1. the first part or period of the day, extending from dawn, or from midnight, to noon.
2. the beginning of day; dawn: Morning is almost here.
3. the first or early period of anything; beginning: the morning of life. –adjective
4. of or pertaining to morning: the morning hours.
5. occurring, appearing, used, etc., in the morning: a morning coffee break.
He starts walking the moment I switch off my mind- you know – the moment my thoughts cease and I drop off into the unknown. I wake up with a jerk and my eyes hurt as I grate them open- even in the dark. Creak-creak- creak-thump. Woosh- I hear the flush. Creak-creak, creak-creak- he enters the bedroom. He will get up again at 1:30am and at 3:30am. If I’m lucky my ear-plugs will work and I’ll be so tired that my mind will refuse to register his sounds.
Creak-creak, creak-crash. Its 6:00am. He’s always up at 6:00am, no matter what time he goes to sleep. Will there ever be a day when I wake up to the sound of birds like I used to in Lucknow? To the sound of bells and chants to gods as papa went about his morning prayers? Not till I live in this thin-floored apartment in New Jersey with a fat insomniac upstairs neighbor. Ugh!
==============================He told me bedtime stories of things rare and few
He sat there with a guitar, time after time
Telling me of distant lands, sipping on his wine
He sang of monsters, pirates and ogres too
Boogeymen, nobgoblins and a wily octopus named Goo
They wrecked havoc while they laughed at the moon.
And scared little children who never ate with a spoon.
But stand up. Fight
Fight
With all your might
When you are right
Stand my little soldier he would say to me
Never be scared, whoever your enemy
For the morning will come at the end of each night
And through every darkness, there will be light.
Naina buried her face deeper into Rohit's chest. She was sobbing. Rohit tightened his hug. "Why don't you sleep, mera bachha? It's getting late. I have to catch the morning train". Rohit kissed her forehead. She responded with kissing his chest. "Can't you stay for one more day? It has been only three days since we got married". "You know I can't miss the morning train. They will throw me out of job if I don't reach by tomorrow". Naina looked at the window through her half opened eyes. The sky was getting dark blue. Some birds were chirping in the backyard. Morning was the best time of the day, she always believed. But today she wished morning never came.
It was early morning and I was still sleeping snugly on the mango tree, dreaming about Jane, when this noise woke me up. I scratched my back and yawned. Then I looked for the source of noise. To my utter horror, Jane was lying near the pond and was puking out. Her sister was by her side. In three jumps I reached beside her. "What happened darling", I asked, "you look sick"."You naughty ape, look what you did to my sister"."We only played some games, Linda. But why is she vomiting, she never ate any wild berries". "You foolish ape, this is morning sickness. You are going to become a father".What a lovely morning that was.
Aveek felt numb. He felt a blinding light pressing on his eyelids. He was standing at the pearly gates. He had not survived the night on the frozen mountainside, after he got separated from his team. He could feel the angels near him, engulfing him in warm breath and thought, 'Do angels breathe?' He felt them licking his face. 'Hang on!', he thought, 'angels don't lick faces.' He slowly opened his eyes and was dazzled by the light. Slowly, as his eyes adjusted, he could make out a shaggy head, with drooping ears. Slowly, Jackie came into view. His dog had saved him, and he realized that the blinding light was the morning sun blazing down on him.
Willy Wingfoot (118)
The Genuine Fake (196)
--"How does my alarm clock automatically get into the "Snooze" mode?"
--"Why do I get the best sleep while I am on the toilet seat?"
--"Why did the Bangles choose to write only Manic Monday and not Manic other-days-of-the week?"
--"Why do I almost end up applying shaving cream to wash my face?"
and the last one being,
--" Why do I waste so much time on these stupid questions?"
And then...Snap out! Haste everywhere. A half eaten bread toast on the table. Running behind the company bus [with an occassional "wait" to the driver],finally managing to enter the bus,feeling like a winner [for catching the bus] and a loser [for being late] at the same time and the "preparatory" nap till the workplace.
0900 hrs. Yet another morning,with the same conclusion..
"What is this life,if full of care...
We have no time to stand and stare."
Misanthrope (133)
Flying particles & water vapor together,
Scattered the blue light,
Left me a red sunset for sight,
Me with my dream - were flying in a flight..
For the roar of engine
& cry of the pilot,
My mind acted like a bigot..
When I opened my eyes,
It was sight that I had never seen,
It was the sight that I should not have seen,
Lost in the sanctuary of ghosts,
First time - I was afraid of thoughts..
I waited - watched them,
All at once,
As I didn't react,
Dissapointedly they act..
And as I saw a tubular tongue of a sunbird,
I started looking for the sun,
It was light - pure - yellow - devine,
The particles had settled,
It was a sunrise,
It was a morning light..
NM (96)
“It’s a beautiful morning” she said, yawning, looking out of the window…
I didn’t say anything but kissed her softly on her brow...
She smiled and began to get dressed…
I was so much in love that I felt almost blessed…
“Let’s get married, Rhea…” I said, “Let’s start anew… it’s still dawn…”
She didn’t even look at me as she pulled out the blanket, fawn…
“We’ll run away”, I tried to assure, “We’ll go to Venice… we’ll go to Rome…”
“I think you should leave” she stared at me coldly, “Kshitij will soon be home.”
In night, a square opened briefly in the door to let in my one-time meal and water, but no ray of light.
"Just food? Where's hope?" I whispered.
Hours later, a tiny hole appeared in a wall. I was told, they did it every morning to let in air. I looked outside, and hope washed away my dark thoughts. I smiled and said, "Dear Morning, I want to feel you again, some day after sixteen years."
I stirred and opened my eyes at the cock’s crow
And sprang out of the stable, for my three-hour show
A cool breeze greeted me warmly, Sun smiled behind the mountains’ bow
I threw up my hooves and whinnied at the welcome, scarlet glow
I trotted through the chirping woodland, dew upon its brow
And stopped to see the swans in the lake, gliding nice and slow
I greeted the blue bird and the yellow one, and every duck and dove
And a deer, a fox and the rabbits, who were peeping out of their cove
Then came the master’s whistle, as the day began to grow
And I said, “See you tomorrow, Morning, but now Summer has to go.”
55 comments:
Seems like another great Klash, this one! Since Konfessioner Singh is not in place, I uploaded the Klash this week. If by mistake I have dropped someone, please let me know. You can leave a scrap on my Orkut or a comment here. If someone wants anything changed in their Klash (regarding the appearance), just command me.
- Sarang
i was going thru the klashes and they keep gettin better...and ive also noticed how the komments keep increasing with each passin post...
cant wait for the fun on this one to start..!! hehe ....
when do we start kommenting!
Whenever you wish too Sir Mandi! The Klash is brilliant this time..! Tough one to judge, Sir Santonu!!! :D
Hellos!
New to this blog yet an old time reader of the same. Its good to see so much talent around.
Will post my komments in a while.
Cheers!
Weeeeee.....
Let d Komments n VOTES roll....!:)
hmm it seems that I have missed the deadline!!! i thought it was till next thursday..is it or have I been delusional...yet again!!!
great work people...cant wait to see the ball rolling...:)
When when when...ohh when do we Komment..?? Great klashes coming in...!! :)
Morning, a new begining for some, another day filled with worries for some. Hope for some , dispair for some.
All moods were beautifully captured here. This Morning we found some old faces missing, and a new face joining, welcome Anamika !.We know you enjoyed reading it till now, how do you find fighting it?
Some one said this is a mutual admiration camp, how true. Yes it is a mutual admiration camp, and we are here to admire each others efforts.
There was a qoute in the morning paper the other day "I don't read criticism of my stuff only because when it's bad, it's rough-and when it's good, it's not good enough. (Kevin Bacon)
Ok...ppl...
U can start Kommentin rightaway...
guess d Konfessioners r busy...bt dey will b bak soon 2 Komment n Vote...n i'll put mine down soon too....
so go on....
Adieu
my sincerest apologies... as i know how much it means to komment... but im leavin to shoot for four days..will only komment when i get back, unless i squeeze five mins somewhere.... ! sorry :)
well, i left, but with a huge albatross around my neck. guilt they call it i believe..
so here goes...
DOK SAAB: really nice take
Mickey the monkey: nice take but to be honest i dint enjoy the writing
Priyanka: reminds me of a scene from a game..god of war or something. and hey, ure already a tough cookie.
Willy wingfoot: brilliant poetry, but u seemed to have got my disease of complusary rhyming. dont.
genuine fake: guess we relate to this. think it wud ve been more fun if u stuck to the word limit. and if ye reward the reader.
Misanthrope: again the disease of complusive rhyming. simpler, but dont know how much i like the take.
NM: wel I've tried lots of times to do stories with a similar take and style. but uve gone and done it much better
Sarang: for once i have a say here. dint like your last line sit. think u couldve done better. and it dint tug my heart like it shouldve.
Summer: brilliantly written. ure quite the horse. but i think u shouldve given your last line more thought
my winner: NM, tho willy u come a close second!
adios amigos!! got to run
I may be a monkey but this much even I can sense that the Klash this time is missing the feminine touch of Konfessioner Singh. All the formatting gone fom my post and separate lines packed into a dull paragraph.
Mandappa KC-- Liked the last two lines more than the whole poem.
Dok Saab--very nicely described fear of the morning
Priyanka--Dog's lick has therapeutic value they say. very lovely take on the word. I knew the word limit will not bother you. 885 or 118, you excell in both
Willy Wingfoot--Hi Willy birdie, your poem is very well, but the use of the theme word is not convincing, i feel.
The Genuine Fake--Anamika, welcome to the klub. you wrote very well, the monday morning blue very nicely told. just be more miserly in using the words. you have to pack the contents in 120 words.
Misanthrope--your poem sounds very nice but is a bit tough for a monkey brain :)
NM--Adultry in the backdrop of morning, good one !
Sarang Mahajan--hope should be the last to go,morning as a symble of hope is very clear here.
Lord Summer-- Your poetic ability is beyond question, but morning here could be replaced by evening without much damage to your poem.
My Vote-- Priyanka
Heyy! Well,I think the name's should be the pseudonyms expressed in the blogs itself! Please,The Genuine Fake is just good enough.
Yeah I agree,Konfessioner Singh is missed this time around. You come back early missy! :)
Komments for the week hmmm....
Mandappa KC--
Good work with the poetry! But perhaps a tad complex for the morning mind to think of...Dont you think?? The effort to bring out the fighting spirit is really awesome though :)
Dok Saab--
Very nice concept! The hope and expectations of a new marriage was nicely put :)
Mickey, the Monkey --
Hmmm...decent piece of writing,monkeyji.But,pardon me if I am wrong,it does read a tad immature you know,like when u tell someone that he's gonna be a father,one has a very subtle expression...Just the last line :)
Priyanka--
Very nice writeup Pri,there was a suspense element,which made reading the writeup pretty interesting. :)
Willy Wingfoot--
The last line again confused me a lil...esp. cowering they flew like the wind of the morning ..otherwise awesome! :)
The Genuine Fake --
Cut the words. Put in shorter sentences. Repetitive why's.
Misanthrope--
I really liked this one...Mixed feelings rolled into poetry. Nice :)
NM--
Morning blues in the light of adultery. Good read :)
Sarang--
Despair v/s Hope. Could have been framed in a better way. The concept rocks though.. :)
Lord Summer, the Stallion --
Excellent stuff! The last line was sort of a dampener though...Could have framed it well...
My vote--
Lord Summer,The Poet Stallion :)
Konfessioner Singh, missing again..hope she's back soon..
Hence I venture.. :)
Mandappa KC: Nice write-up, the hope shines through all the fight.
Dok Saab: It sort of mirrors the feelings which I imagine I'll be feeling when I get married in 2 months' time.. :) Its a genuine feeling.
Mickey, the Monkey: Made me read it twice..and made me laugh..!! The way you presented it, was hilarious :))
Willy Wingfoot: Good use of words, but I couldnt make out it was about whom or what..
The Genuine Fake: Good write-up..something I felt every morning when I was working.. :) Wud've voted for you, but you crossed the word limit. (Psst..I did the same in my first post, though..)
Misanthrope: Varied feelings, nice.. :)
NM: A gud twist to the tale. Reality always comes with the morning light. :)
Sarang Mahajan: Hope is never far.. :) Gud one..!!
Lord Summer, the Stallion: I pictured the scene from the movie "Spirit-the mighty stallion", as I read your write-up.. Gud work.. :)
My vote goes to: Dok Saab although Lord Summer comes a close second..!! Mind you..it was a tough job, voting, this time.. :)
Till the next Klash..ciao..!!
A fine Klash again, though we again miss some of the regular klashers like Richa, Missy, Truthdude and Ana. But it is nice to tha see new entrants coming in regularly.
My Komments:
Mandi: I think this one is your best that I have read so far. Rhyming is meaningful and not stretched mostly, except for the name of the Octopus. The openeing lines reminded me of the Gleeman called Thom Merylin from the Wheel of Time, when he is on the ship of Byle Domon. Wonderful imagination!
But I feel that the two halves of the poem are disconnected. The first one has a dreamy feel and the second one suddenly sounds like an inspirational speech. Besides, I feel Morning is not the theme of the poem but merely used as an example.
Dok Saab: As usual, it is very well written. Nice dialogue and vivid description. Some mornings can come this way. Morning would be the most bugging time for me when I was in school.
Mickey: Man, I don't know what to say. Whatever you have written is clear and well-written, but it did not appeal me much. Not that it is bad, but somehow I am not moved at all. And It could easily happen at an afternoon or evening (forgive me if my knowledge of monkey biology is bad, but I have seen in movies that pregnant women vomit just about any time).
Priyanka:I wonder how the dog saved the human, did not get that part at all. Use of Morning is good if you meant to compare morning, as a beginning, with his new life, but I could not get it clearly. And I have seen this situation in two pictures at least, a licking dog waking up a guy. I think the idea was originally used in Mask. But the write-up is quite expertly worded. And for my love for animals, the idea touched me. A good one!
Rangan: A very well imagined situation, but there is absolutely nothing about morning here. Merely using the word somewhere is not what's expected. But I loved reading your piece, as an individual work and read it quite a few times just because I liked it.
The Genuine Fake: Welcome! :) A cool write up to begin with. Liked the humour, the quesions. A typical morning in the lives of many of us. But the real test comes when you try fitting it in 120 words. So looking forward to your next one.
Misanthrope: Dude, you write well, but you never mind the word limit, which is now beginning to disappointed me. I'll never be able to vote you no matter how well you write. I know you don't care about votes, but I think we should respect the rules at least once in a month.
NM: Loved the rhyming, especially Rome and Home (even though it seemed a little force-fitted)! But a cool one. Another side of morning. The darker half ends with the morning. Morning here is not the goody-goody thing, but the beginning of a day the woman would cheat his husband like Pakistanis tamper the cricket ball.
Lord Summer: Is that all you do in morning? Don't you brush your teeth and all?
My Vote: Dok Saab, for his clearer usage of "Morning" than NM, my second.
Really tough one to judge this time:)
No consensus emerging, with NM, Priyanka, Summer and Dok Saab getting one vote each.
Playing tricks, eh, Micky? :D
My poney lies over the ocean.
My poney lies over the sea.
My poney lies over the ocean.
O bring back my poney to me.
Bring back, bring back,
Bring back my poney to me, to me.
Bring back, bring back,
Bring back my poney to me.
well well well...amazing work everyone!!! can I komment?? was something mentioned about people who have not klashed can not komment...let me know..
Well sure You kan komment Richa jee, In fact we would love to hear what you have to say.I kant say whether you kan vote or not though.
@ Sarang Sir Sarang, I dont know about you humans, but in us monkeys, the vomiting associated with prgnancy is Kalled Morning Sickness , so I thought my take justified the word. (Klick on the link to know more)
Mandappa KC Good imagination, good poetry, but Morning comes in the end At Last
Mickey, the Monkey First it was labour pains, now morning sickness, are u a midwife or what , Mickey ha ha.and be careful while playing games!!
Priyanka Where were you all this while Priyanka ! you write well.Though I am not a dog lover(would take a bath if a dog licks my face ), I liked your take.
Willy Wingfoot Your poetry is excellent, but the theme-word seems to have been forced in the end. You have to think more if you want that purple krown
The Genuine Fake I felt you were telling my daily morning ritual. there is nothing fake about it. Best debut award goes to you !!
Misanthrope Your poem is very nicely written, Misanthrope. Just pack it more tightly.
NM We are already your fan NM !!. adultery fading in the morning light! is this a pre-cap of what we are going to see from your Camera.
Sarang Mahajan Hope is best symbolised by morning. and you brought that out very well.
Lord SummerYour master must be a very able man, trained you well !!. Would love to watch your show Stallion. This much was easy, now the difficult part of the game, Voting.
Can it be a secret Ballot Konfessioners :).
Well it would have been the GF but for her 76 extra words,
my vote goes to
NM, for the-vanishing-of-sinful-night-and-dawn-of-reality-with-the-morning concept !!
Kk...Time 2 get my Wings dirty.!
Lemme start:
Mandappa:
Yes,sir.The last line is cool...n those above wer better too...but just the link between dem seems 2 b lost.Not that i can do any better...jus a View!!Nice one Overall...
Dok Saab:
Oh,sir...u seems to Perfectly match with the topic!!I had 2 ponder for a while on wat i can do abt MORNING...n i had never looked at d opposite side of not having a morning at all!!!
Mickey:
My dear Ape,if u wont take me wrong....All ur work b4 seems like sum other Monkey's!!n dis-may b,belongs 2 a distant cousin...may b, d Baboon!!
Priyanka:
Mam,nicely put down.attractive literature...but d DOG thing,..no,mam. Does'nt make me want 2 read agn...u cud add up sum spice 2 it,cant u?
Genuine Fake:
Absolutely True...n WELKOME 2 klash...!Ur already told abt d Limit,i c.so...hmm...Good take.
Misanthrope:
You disappoint me!!!Everytime u cum up with better n better words,much better WORLDS!!so y dont u try 2 fit ur head under d KROWN?!
NM:
Yes, sir. Good one.I dont really get 2 write a realistic prose r poem,no matter how hard i try.Very well put...n Within d limit!!!
Sarang:
Agn...Well thought of...this one.Each read puts me into trouble on whom 2 vote.n lemme confess...as i Komment now...i still got no clue on whom 2 vote!!!
Summer:
Horsy,A nice poem agn...but definetly less effective than ur previous ones.But that still is in very much demand 2 get d Krown...
Ah...so ends d Komments...quite tiring too...n now 2 d VOTE part...
Agn...Misanthrope-Word limit puts u OUT...n so...MANDAPPA...
This morning is genuinely bright, bringing out the vividest of imageries and softest of feelings with impeccable excellence. This klash, this morning, stays my favorite ever.
I warmly welkome, The genuinely fake onto the Klash.
Here's for the voting:
Mandi: Sir Mandi, amazing Klash I must say. Its your best so far and I should admit that it didnt leave me even for a moment.
For the morning will come at the end of each night
And through every darkness, there will be light.
Inspirational writing is the toughest after comedy acc. to me, but you manage to pull it off very well.
Now on the flipside, the rhyming seems forced and thus lessens the impact. Structure wise, the poem changes tracks from being a surreal piece of writing to a inspirational piece with a few hiccups. The transition should've been smoother and I am sure you could've done it.
However a klassic klash. This is the best Mandappa KC bit of writing on Karma n Konfessions.
And like a 6 yr old boy watching a magic show, I am eagery awaiting for you to do your final act and pull a rabbit of your oh-so-talented hat.
I am impressed. I really am.
Dok Saab: Beautiful. Is the one word which struck me after reading your Klash. Its like a painting done with the minutest of details at perfection.
Morning was the best time of the day, she always believed. But today she wished morning never came.
And with such a finishing line, it just made me feel what she must be feeling.
On the flipside, the description of the color of the sky and the chirping of the birds was not required, instead you could've had natural metaphors to describe her state of mind. A crescent moon or something, maybe.
All in all, a terrific article.
Mickey, the monkey: Now this article is very well written as far as lucidity of language is concerned. But somehow it failed to amuse me.
Strictly average.
Priyanka: An interesting read to say the most. Somehow I failed to understand the purpose of it. I mean, the word is morning. Ok, the dog saved him when it was morning.
Cute? Yes. Works? No.
I will tell you the problems here.
Though your command over the language is commendable, somehow you are missing the point and this being entirely my personal opinion. Maybe it works but for me it didnt. It doesnt work logistically and most importantly it doesnt make you feel nice about the dog, nor sad about the fact that the guy is dying nor happy that he doesnt die.
Apologies Ma'am, but I am sure you can do a tad more than this.
Willy Wingfoot: Rangan!!!
This is poetry at its best. Amazingly worded and nicely rhymed (though forced at times) I like the way your brain thinks and I think you have the makings of a great writer. Just that it doesnt bring out the essence of the word like it should've. The morning seems to be there just coz it has to be there.
Blood-red blade, bow and arrow,
Riding a Dragon, came sorrow.
One spew fire, other harpooned spear,
that burnt my rear, and heart bled with fear.
Terrific stanza, metaphors work if they are properly used and you just make it perfect.
I would love to read more of your work. You seem to have the "Spark"
The Genuine Fake: Morning blues. We all experience em. What works about your debut Klash is the simplicity of it. We can just relate to it.
Please stick to the word limit. Its more fun when its 120 or under.
Welkome to the Klash.
Misanthrope: Dude, please respect the rules. I know you are a good writer, show it to me in 120 words.
Sarang:A good opening, a decent middle but an end which just doesnt klick. Definitely not one of your better works, bro. But its still a valiant effort to bring a different perspective to the word. An interesting read which just loses steam as it ends.
Lord Summer: If I ever ride I horse, I wish its you. There's a way you play with your words, horsey that somehow makes us believe that you are a horse and not a human. Its very tough to write from a perspective of an animal and make it look convincing. Though this poem lacks the punch of your last one about smile, it still works for more than one reasons. I would strongly suggest you to write a book about your adventures. It would be a bestseller.
We did miss Richajee, Shin-Shin, Ana and Butch. We also missed a few komments. The mutual admiration klub is becoming quite a lovable place with some real good writing showing its face this week. I just hope that the klash gets better with every passing week. Lets hope that more and more people participate. Spread the word folks... get your partners, friends, neighbors to write. Cheers!
My Vote: My vote this week goes to Lord Summer for his sheer simplicity and play with words. Dok Saab and Willy come a klose second.
Here is what you were waiting for eagerly, my komments:
Lord Mandappa: I have a BIG question, why did the little children never ate with a spoon? I think the mention of spoon has a hidden meaning. And I also want to meet Goo. Sounds like a cheerful personality! :-)
What I liked most about your poem is the advice to stand up and fight, because fighting while sitting down can be a headache. The other thing I just loved is the way you described the captain. My master often tells me the story of such a character from Treasure Island. A beautiful imagination, wonderful wording!
Lord Dok Saab: Why does he have to catch a train? They don't employ stalions? Bad world! But a good klash! There was some human emotion in there which even I understood.
Lord Mickey: If you were sleeping on a mango tree, why were you dreaming about Jane? Whenever I am grazing in a pasture, I don't never think about anyone else but me and the grass.
Lady Priyanka: Convey my whinney to Jackie, the licker. He did a nice two-in-one job - saving his master and licking all the dirt off his face. Something I should learn from him. Once upon a time my master fell in mud, but I did not lick him. Yucks! But a very nice, inspirational piece here.
Lord Wingy: Well, us fighters, war animal and bird! That reminded me when I was in the war of Gondor, the flying Nazgul. I was hell bent to bring one down, but they were all out of my reach. A touching piece here, reminds me of old days.
Lady/Lord Genuine Fake: Hinn hinn hinn hinn! Welcome to the land of many humans, one monkey, one weird bird and one great stallion! I felt the pain of leaving a toast uneaten and running for work, leaving the best thing in life for the most irritating one. A good one! Technicality prevents me from voting you! :-)
Lord Misanthrope: What a great write-up, Lord. Simply loved it until I reached the 120th word, but couldn't read any further as Master called me to carry him to the loo.
Lord NMOP: Why did she smile before she began getting dressed? I never have been dressed, so I do not know the fun of it.
Lord Sarang:How does the hope taste? If I were you I'd remain there for the rest of my life as long as I got food and water.
My vote: This time my hundred point vote goes to a human called Shakti Kapoor for his wonderful acting in Raja Babu, and my rwo pointer goes to NM, because due to him Rhea felt the fun of getting dressed.
Komrades..Sat sri akal!!!! What a LOVELY painting Sarang!!!
And what beautifully written klashes...if I can, someday, I'll take out an anthology of our klashes!
I've been up to Dehradun and back..so found NO time to write! But komment I shall..once I'm done with what's to be done haha.. and this place is becoming an animal farm!!! Bird, monkey, horse!!!!
I love it!!!! :)
Welkome GF...!!! :)
Where is the Judge ???
Do we have a second line if the Judge is not tracable
I will try my best to abide by the rules when I submit my post next time.Due to lack of free time, I had to submit a poem which I had written few months back & since I don't prefer corrections in my previous posts, I submitted as it was.
Mandappa
Last two lines says it all.
For the morning will come at the end of each night
And through every darkness, there will be light..
a smooth write maintaining the flow..
Dok Saab
aha.. good one ! I , somehow, enjoy usage of "hinglish". Day certainly looks best when its morning..Brings me some mixed emotions.. :)
Mickey
A monkey's brain has worked quite well ! cool write dude..
Priyanka
A lovely one Priyanka ! would love to see more work of yours..
Willy
I was wondering what made you write this one.Something to ponder upon.A fantastic write indeed !
Genuine fake
'ssup with this name buddy ? :)
I believe, We have all the time to stand and stare. cool che !
NM
You write really well & I have enjoyed it through & through..
Sarang
were you watching any episode of "prison break" while writing this ? hehe.. darkness everywhere n then comes the ray of hope , lovely take !
Summer
The stallion has the strength & the spirit to race against the wind..
My Vote : willy !
NM 4,Dok Saab 2, Summer 2, Priyanka 1, willy 1 and Mandappa 1
NM clearly emerging the winner, this time, unless the judge's choice differs. lets see where the judge is.
guys have patients, my comments are coming...dont have a steady net access now. will do thet by tomorrow 4 sure... looks like agr8 klash, job became harder
phew...Santonu glad to see you here haha..thought I might have judge!!!!
People please make recommendations for running the klash next post onwards..!!!
-- do you want the judge to have 5 points instead of 8?
-- An increase/decrease in 120 words..
Any other suggestions?!
Weeeeeeeeeee.....
Finally got a VOTE!!!after being played substitute 4 such a long flight.....
Thnx Misanthrope....
Our Armours are always at ur Service!!!!
@ NM
That was more than d Vote n Krown 4 me....
Thnx...
Now you know what Mickey was referring to as feminine touch..
you can see colors, fonts, formatting back again :)
Welkome Seema Kashyap (have heard this name before hmmm, may be in LBC) !!
Great Klash Seema !, nicely written, fully justifying the theme word, and touching my heart as a pukka lukhnawi. I have already cast my vote, but yours is the winning take.
Missy were you asking the Judge for his suggestions, or from the house?
Anyways, I have some..
1)less than 8 points, and the judge will have no role to play :)
2)More than 120 words, and the klash will loose its charm.
3)Make a calender, be it 7 day, be it 10 day, but then stick to it.
4)those who do not komment in a klash should be given a one klash rest.
Haha.. Dok saab and Mickey!! :)
I agree with all the points you put forth.. lets see what the other konfessioners say!!!!
It's a pity Seema's post didn't go up in time!! :( and she is indeed from the LBC!
Santonu has left this week's judging to me since he's busy with a conference.
So here goes----
(Seema is not up for the kompetition but I'm kommenting anyway!)
1. Seema-- Refreshing! Because it's from real life and yours, the creaks were very well done! and I agree with Dok Saab, you might have got the krown this week!!! First attempt! I loved the description of the pleasant Indian mornings..back home at Lucknow..!
2. Mandi-- What a super klash, the best I've read by you, by far.. The common "for the morning will come after every night".. and your structure is much better than ever. I particularly liked how your imagination took off with the "wily octopus named Goo".. perfect!
3. Dok Saab-- aah the newly wedded couple now part..each morning, you bring a poignancy to even the simplest parts of our lives.
4. Mickey-- The day you became a daddy?! haha.. I liked it till you scratched your back and went jumping to her and innocently said you'd only played some games..!!! I'd have however preferred if you ape people had some weird witch doctor some jazzy orangutan or someone who told the daddy to be about morning sickness! The sister was not so cool!! But nice take..here's a banana! haha :)
5. Priyanka-- I am so tempted to vote for you..my weakness!!! Dogs!!! Lovely take on the word, but it's a tough call this week.. You're good!! :) I liked the image of angels breathing warmth into him too.. well done.
6. Wingfoot-- This sounds like a particularly charming phoenix with someone after her arse!! Well conceived! But the morning only turns up at the end..like so many posts here.. why isn't morning the central theme?!
7. Genuine Fake-- Nice take! reminds me of the song, Chelsea morning and a couple of other songs too..haha nice one about The Bangles and feeling sleepiest on the pot! I wish you'd stuck to 120!!!
8. Misanthrope-- 133.. why!!!! :( particularly liked "red sunset for sight" and the image of the particles.. I have often observed these particles dancing in the light of day...but you could have captured it better in 120/less! :)
9.NM-- It didn't do too much for me when I read it first, (and you know!)but I wondered why was it the popular choice this week!? was it the desperation in the lover.. was it as Dok saab put it the the-vanishing-of-sinful-night-and-dawn-of-reality-with-the-morning concept !! and I still didnt understand..till it struck me that you are perhaps the only person who has used metaphors so beautifully and to top it, stuck to the morning theme throughout... good job!
10. Sarang-- Affected writing! But good.. the ray of light/of hope in a dark prison cell..makes me think of when Mandela was imprisoned..(The Santonu thing from last week has STUCK haha) well written..its always a joy to read you Konfessioner!
11. Lord Summer-- What utterly gorgeous images! You make me think of children's stories about Brier Fox and Rabbit! I loved the poem...But it didn't satiate what I set out in search of..for 'morning'.
My winner this week is Mandappa..for the smooth transition from a bedtime story to a morning! There is much more than meets the eye to Mandi's lovely little piece here..
-- The description of the Captain reminds one of bedtime stories, colourful imagination.
-- The Dawn of a new morning is a lovely concept, well done with the encouragement from the Captain to 'fight for what is right'.
-- It is the most innovative take this week on the subject, involves nobody in particular, just a figment of someone's imagination..and the concept of the new morning..
Super effort.. Indeed this was a tough Klash to judge! Considering Nikhil and everyone else put up such a cool fight, but my heart went out to the Captain and his 'morning'!
Konfessioner Singh.
Hi all - This is Seema & my blog name is Free Woman. I'm delighted to be here! Thanks for the kind comments Shinjini and Dok!
The voting is closed, but I'd like to start on the right foot by kommenting anyway:)
Mandappa- Great style- reminded me of British children's poets. Loved the lesson it conveys. At places I felt that the words were forced to create the rhyme.
Dok Saab - Very tender passage nicely written.
Mickey- so cute! I loved it. The buildup, climax, and conclusion all nicely tied up.
Priyanka - great description with just the right amount of details.
Willy- OOOh! Sci-Fi poem. The content/genre justifies the use of words like wormling, which is so creative! Here too I felt the words in some lines were forced to make them rhyme.
Genuine Fake- The last two lines add the punch to the passage-nice!
Misanthrope- I'm very bad with esoteric things, so I didn't get your poem. If you have the time- could you please explain what it was about?
NM- Its interesting how you have taken an episode that is typically prose and converted it into a poem- very original!
Sarang- my fav because I love the theme of hope :)
Lord Summer - the winner- my vote would have gone to this klash. Very elegant,smooth,musical and with good grammar (something I suck at!).
Summer gets another vote, Summer gets another vote! And that too for grammer! :D
Thank you, Lady Free Woman!
And many congratulations and celebrations, Lord Mandi, the bedtime story-teller!
@ Free Woman, my sincere apologies. I was a temporary host of Klash this week, so it did not touch my mind to check the inbox again after the Klashes were up, or else I would have put your take up for the kompetition.
Reading it now, it was another aspect of morning, which should have been there! A good klash first up!
@ GS Virmani, same goes to you too, sir. Though, we missed your take this week, looking forward to it for the next week.
@ Mandi, great klash buddy! Wonderful to see the crown on your head! Keep it up. And give an easy word this week! :D
Kongrats Mandappa KC,
that krown is well deserved,
Now that you have to suggest the next word, Sir please keep us lesser mortals in mind while suggesting.
thank you all !!
humble bow and apple pie i promise.
well, as i always clarify... for those who felt the transition wasnt smooth, im sorry.... but my real intent, was the difference from a nice bedtime story of dreamful fantasical creatures, to a meaningful messages...after all, dint most of our fairy tales try to convey some moral meaning in the end....
and , well when people do have the time, ask me...like konfessioner singh said there is a lot more than meets the eye including the octopus named goo and children who dont eat with spoons! :)
Exactly Mandi.. it was the 'moral' and the whole Captain and eating without spoons.. the octopus named Goo thing that got me in a tizz.. loved it, very well done!
To me the transition was smooth.. because its like a bedtime story that exits with a morning--moral! Cool stuff!!! :)
NOW where's the apple pie langar?!!! haha
hahaha...
missy , thats as soon as i get the honour of meeting you..
also sarang: when u asked if anyone wanted changes on teh post, i wanted to tell u bout teh paragraph spacing... wouldve made a slight difference... but i ws busy so its ok !!!
anyways again, humble bow...
p.s: these things actually make me blush hahaha !! :)
haha blush blush blush!!!
Well deserved! :)
Is apple-pie the word next week?
i think Blush is the word
though I love apple pie
The word is "Conversation"... you animals..can't ever think of anything but food!! :D
well I was tempted to make the 50th entry, so this is it.
Difficult word Mandappa, I believe you have something in mind already :)
So is the word for next week- 'conversation'? And entry to be sent by tomorrow?!
Also Mandappa (in Kannada this word means dumb guy! haha)- pls to explain your poetry- me is a bit dense when it comes to deeper meanings. But I really want to know!
dumb guy suggesting conversation for the word, thats very apt ha ha
well it was conservation for u mere animals, but they dint let me get that tough....
so "conversation" it is... and
free woman - kannada so im guessin ure in bangalore...dont u have any coorg friends...hence the name,, and as for explanation , mail me or scrap, i'll feel shyy to profess hidden meanings in full view of the klub!!!!
ooh- you be a coorgi- got it. I have plenty of coorgi friends. What is your mail id? Mine is seemakashyap@gmail.com
Mandi... shy!!!!!!
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