Sunday 23 September 2007

Conversation

Conversation

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1.informal interchange of thoughts, information, etc., by spoken words; oral communication between persons; talk; colloquy.
2.an instance of this.
3.association or social intercourse; intimate acquaintance.


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Free Woman (137)


Lovers that left without a goodbye

Did you meet someone new, was everything a lie?

Did I do something wrong, when did you decide

That this was not it…I wonder if you cried

I don’t want you back, just want to know why

To ask all the questions, and for you to reply

To have one last conversation, to find peace of mind

To move on with my life, and leave you behind

Loved ones that died when it was least expected

Did I tell you enough, you were loved and respected?

How much you meant to me, what an impact you had

The stories I remember, both happy and sad

Your time was up, and you had to go

Just wish I had told you all I wanted you to know

To have one last conversation…

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Niharika (131)



Crumpling the warrant he walked unsteadily towards the criminal , surrounded by an inquisitive crowd.
Remembering coversations aeons ago "Neighbours have shunned us because of my vocation , I'm sending Vincet away to a land where he wont be known as my son ". Everyday Vincet would ask "Dad can we go for a walk over the bridge and talk ? ". Hurrying away he would reply in a gruff voice "No, I have a sentence to execute ! "
Wishing he had given his son a ear ! Made him understand that his family didnt exile him with hate but love !
His hand was on the lever ,quivering ..Vincet s neck was on the guillotine .. theirs eyes met ..
It was the widest bridge and lengthiest conversation !

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Amandeep Parmar (120)


When the white zen used to tread on those half-hearted roads, there was always a silent mischief in progress. I used to think about the TV channels. Would I miss them? The rickety old man who refused to call me Aman without 'deep' attached to it was no more. They gave my cousin an iron bell with a wooden hammer. I carried a bunch of peacock feathers as they carried him through the village to the crematory. Every now and then my cousin would hit the bell and I would wave the feathers over his body. How does it feel to be telepathic with the deceased? I could hear "Amandeep!" – Loud and Clear. How do you end such a conversation?


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Duperman (120)


"The thing about cats is" the fireman told me, "They suck."

80 year old Pansy Pingleton's 8 year old cat had managed to climb a tree only to realize that it had done the wrong thing.

"Someone has to get her down" I made a futile attempt to invoke cat-love in the fireman who was listening to his I Pod to avoid hearing Pansy's shrieks.

He looked at me contemptuously, "Why don't you do it, Mr. Fancy Dress?"

The conversation with the heartless fireman had ignited my saving the world instinct.

I dusted my silver robe and in one jump got up the tree and got the cat down.

The fireman was dumbstruck as Pansy shouted, "Duperman saved my cat"


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Richa Gupta (110)


Bharitye rail ki general bogie
Apne jheli to kabhi zaroor hogi!!
Ek din hamara bhi number aaya,
Jab general bogie ne humko bulaya.

Chad gaye le kar hari ka naam-
Raksha karma hey bhagwan.

Kisi ne maari kohni kisi ne dhakka lagaya
Finally bogie ke beecho beech khud ko paya

Wahan ka nazaara tha sabse alag
Lagta tha maano machhli bazaar ho ekdum sajag
Makhiyoon ki bhinbhinat si thi sabki awaaz
Bhinn bhinn the sur pahiyyon ka tha saaz
“abbey dikhta nahi kya” “bhrasth hai sarkar”
“saala kameena kahin ka” kahin thi baatein kahin takraar
dekhi humne general bogie ki yeh nirrali reet
ajnabiyon mein bhi hoti hai jamke baat-cheet


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Mandappa KC (118)

Conversation – doesn't count as a word


For Pidi


She's been long gone now. About three and a half years. Tonnes of times I've reminisced.

Of the 2 years we spent together. We were lost in each other. No futile fantasy or perfunctory sex. No serenading outside windows or threats of slashed wrists.


Time has gone and changed a lot of things like it always does. I don't remember the escapades. I don't remember the details.


All I remember were endless conversations. 9-10 hours every day lost in each others words and worlds. At the end of which we still found enough to write little love letters running pages long.

That's something special, I'll treasure forever.


Endless, meaningful conversations, day after day.


True love is just that.



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Truth Dude (120)


"No."
"No?"
"Never."
"But why?"
"Because..."
"It's not right. It's not what you believe in. It's not what was taught to you."
"Yes."
"Jesus! Get out of your mindset already."
"You don't get to tell me what to do."
"Why not?"
"Because… I'm not your possession.."
"So?"
"So nothing…shut up."
"Bitch."
"Loser."
"I love you."
"I love you too!"
"So can we...?"
"No."
"Aaargh!"
"We can't, it's not right."
"But it wouldn't hurt to try though would it?"
"And why not?"
"Because I stand to get hurt...not you."
"But I'd be hurt too. After all, it's you getting hurt."
"So? Like that hasn't happened before."
"Ok, just this once."
"Really?"
"Yes."
"Here you go…"
"What's that?"
"My wallet."
Fataaak.
"Oww!"



Mickey The Monkey (120)


He was the master of conversation. He could talk on any subject. Steering the conversation from mundane to complex was a child's play for him. Page-3 socialites dreaded him. He could dig out their deepest secrets in a few tricky questions. He had a very special guest for tonight's show. He went to the studio unprepared, as usual. On the hot seat was a monkey.

"Hello! Karan, I am Mickey."

"Nice Coffee!"

"Have you seen my latest movie?"

"How did you like my role?"

"How was my chemistry with Jane?"

"How about casting me in your next film?"

The master conversationalist was speechless. "Err! Hello Sir" was all he could mutter to justify his talk show In Konversation with Karan



Sarang Mahajan (120)


When Sharmon’s armed messenger returned, the sky was clear. But soon it might be filled with painful cries and dust clouds, the land beneath it bathing in the blood of many sons, husbands and fathers.

Jidan will conversate,” said the Messenger, failing to hide hope in his voice.

Sharmon nodded and kicked his horse off. When the two kings met between armies, Jidan, a massive man, scanned Sharmon’s diminutive figure contemptuously.

I only want your wife, Jidan,” said Sharmon.

And I your head.” Jidan spat.

Then let the men return home,” said Sharmon feeling the hidden dagger at his thigh. “Let our own arms decide our fate.”

Jidan nodded with a grunt, then jumped off his horse for a duel.



Lord Summer (120)


“Hello there, my lady! The hilltop is so damn smelly!”

I said to the lovely mare, feeling jitters in my belly

She blinked her eyes befuddled, and my heart went cold and numb

I said in my mind sadly, “Oh no, she’s deaf and dumb.”

But then I smiled wider, striking an honest conversation

Knowing she wouldn’t hear me, I told her my true intention

“I am a looser of a horse, got no grass, nor any stable,

“But I’ll find both if you be with me, for I am quite willing and able.”

She could not hear my words, but in my eyes she could see

When she nodded with a smile, they were filled with joy and glee


Dok Saab (57)


Every time
When she was
With me
In my dreams
Holding her hands
I told her
All I wanted to
Tell her!


But That day
When she was
With me
On that bench
Under the tree
In that park
I became speechless

Still…

She understood
All I wanted to
Tell her!

Our eyes
Did all the

Conversation


Willy Wingfoot (115)


Drooling monsters of my dreams turned to Fairies.

Getting wet in the rain, won over hot coffee by the fireside.

"Sure", always said my tongue, while "Cant!" screamed my mind.

By the window, beneath the moon, fetched me sleep. My AC failed.

Ducks and Doves amused me. And Dogs stared at me, I smiled.

My bathroom found a new stand. My Cell stood upon it.

Thoughts learnt to travel as SMS, and wishes, calls.

I called 3, a crowd.

And my heart thought of its own.

HOW?...you ask....

Before the sea, beside my rigid self,
"Start a Conversation”, said she.
I did.
And so it all began...
as I ended up, confessing,
"I Love You".


NM (118)


I dreamt as a kid, to fly a kite, high in the crimson sky…

To be a hawk at times, at times a butterfly…

To have a white house with pink walls…

To sleep on a cloud, with mom, dad and my two little dolls…

I wished to have a conversation everyday with God…

To tell him all; fair, square, even, and odd…

I smiled, laughed and occasionally cried…

Till time blinked, each dream slowly died…

The dolls withered, the clouds sank…

The kite faded, all hopes shrank…

Mom left dad, I went along…

God fumbled; I think he went wrong…

He made the walls white, the sky grey…

I still hear those broken conversations, far and away.




The Genuine Fake (128)


Silence added to the melancholy of the room, as I sat there, watching Jane changing Amie's fever bands. Amie and I, meanwhile, were in our own unspoken conversation. Expressionless, even when she was rushed to the ER, her gaze asked, "Will it hurt?"
I smiled, saying, "No."
She kept her stark gaze while the doctors tried to revive her decreasing pulse. I held her hand and whispered,"Its time."
Her eyes quizzed me in despair, "Can Mommy come along?"...Another negative.
As her body gave way, she cried, "Will she understand?"
I smiled and replied, "Yes with time."
As we walked through the doorway, her final question was, "Are you God?"
I looked through her this time and replied, "No, I am the Messenger".
The brightness of the dark awaited us.



Misanthrope (110)


And he quaffed from the glass in front of him,
The conversation is about to begin,
Agility of his black eye balls,
And cautious movements of his fist,
A thin line of sweat formed on his forehead,
When he saw that his all sins were not dead !
 
That little change in the shine of his eyes,
& he feared the pernicious thought that came to his mind,
By stealing sights,
He contrite for the thoughts he saw,
Vestiges of which reflected in his eyes !
 
I didn't speak a word,
Patience won the conversation again,
Or may be the fear,
That broke the enigmatic charisma of the killer !!!
 
 


Priyanka Acharya (120)


Julianne entered the room, smiling at her twin sister. Anna looked peaceful, but then she always did. They both were identical twins, down to the birthmark on their shoulders. Julianne always looked forward to these weekly visits to her sister. It gave her the chance to unload her weekly burden. She narrated about everything that had happened in the whole week - her job-change, the new apartment and the new guy in her life. And Anna listened patiently; at least Julianne hoped she did. It had been two years since Anna had been in a coma and Julianne tried to reach out to her sister with these one-sided conversations, hoping that some day it will help her sister regain consciousness.



Konfessioner Singh (119)


“How I’d love, love, love to dance with my father again…”

I can’t get that lyric out of my head. Especially now, when I’m sitting with my chai in the porch after years… Years after dadaji passed away, years after we last talked.

Those early Sunday mornings, sitting here in the porch, our unending fights over everything in the news with dadima acting as the partial mediator… how he’d mark articles for me to read…I miss him, I miss our conversations and our walks together. What would he have said about my new subjects for example?

He would have approved, I just know it…I guess I have enough conversations stored in me to know what he’d have said…right now.




121 comments:

Priyanka said...

I found it a hard word to write on...and as I guessed..mine turned out to be the worst..according to me.. :-))))) Hahaahhahahaa...!! Nice posting people...you all inspire me..but I still can't write any better.. :-)

Mickey said...

HI People !!
Back to the thing I love most, Reading Komments !!
But I see you lucknow people always are stuck be Pehle aap so I am balling the first over (Kant help it, kricket fever has gripped whole of Afrikan Forests with India beating RSA and Kangarooes)
Truth Dude-- Dude You have used all your 120 words, but the word never appeared once. Its conversation between two pax, OK, but is it the theme of your write-up. Sorry bro I could not get it quite right. And what was fataak for? your write up needs some explanation, at least for a monkey brain like me :)
Mickey The Monkey-- Well I am not in habit of self praise, though most superstars are :)
Sarang Mahajan -- talking of horses, did Jidans horse get Sharmon's mare ??
Lord Summer --Good poetry as usual.Its true, unlike humans, we animals converse with our eyes, honest conversation, direct from the heart.
Dok Saab --Your Eyes did the talking :). we animals , as Lord Summer would agree, usually converse with our eyes, sometimes with our hands, lips, tongues, and even with our tails. Those humans who own a dog will agree, how their tommy convey all his feelings with a drolly tongue and wagging tail. Loved your poem. ( sir are you a vet, by any chance. have some personal problem to discuss)
NM --Your take left me sad NM. There have to be at least two people for a conversation to happen. This God, is he there or is it just you humans wishful imagination. I feel your God fumbles most of the time, its up to you how to make best use of the situation he leaves you in. No use conversing with him , all you will be left with is broken conversation.
The Genuine Fake--Dear GF, was Jane playing the role of nurse in your movie. If you read my take you will know I have a very good chemistry with her. The dictionary says conversation needs spoken words, but again here we see unspoken conversation. beautiful. only your packaging is still bulky. you have to put in some extra effort.
Priyanka Acharya --one-sided conversations good one here by priyanka
more komments will follow after a short break (people dont get disheartened, I will not forget any one) )

truthdude said...

forget the word. and forget my writing. that conversation is taking place between two people. I give the words, you give it a context.

That's the game.

Missy Baba said...

The Fataak represents the sound of a thapad Mickey..

Shinjini.

Willy Wingfoot said...

Alrite...This was d DUMBEST of all d topics!!!Plz dont take me rude...bt of all d words in d Dict...Y o Y did sum'1 choose dis word??!!
Bt yes,since v r meant 2 cum up with meaningful n INTERESTING set of 120's every week...here's wat v got...n agn..nothin rude intended...ders more dan a few bad ones here...includin mine,by all means.!

Mickey said...

Well never got a thappad from my old monkey, so never heard a fataak :)

Missy Baba said...

Rangan, to each her/his own of course... But I think the word is well chosen.

To come up with something interesting on the dumbest of words is our intention and our challenge here at the Klash.

It's quite easy to write on stuff as simple as dreams, love, happiness, fire, rain whatever...

Now conversation requires some thinking..and how you put it across is bound to refreshing.

All the posts at the klash this week, I think, are well conceived. We did think!

S.

NM said...

Tough word. Nice Klash
NM

Willy Wingfoot said...

Truth Dude:
I dont get d head n tail of this...!!!Who wants what?N d one who wants gets it??No?n v r supposed 2 use d word Conversation sum'wer,ai'nt it so??!!
Mickey:
Ya...how was d interview,Ape??Bt agn...wat was this all about??!!Am i a bit Over-my-head 2day...r is der really sum'thing m not gettin here!!!
Sarang:
Sounds incomplete 2 me...Is it a Para frm ur book,u picked up n pasted down here??
Summer:
My lord,does'nt ur race eva get tired of Grass...!Bt good one dis....
But am thinkin, if v had set our standards High initialy...coz i c d quality detoriatin..(A general stmt-2wards no'1 in particular)
Dok Saab:
This comes as a relief,Dok...!!Kool...really.Bt y dint u use d remainin words??Dat cud have had an impact....though mar it too,at times!!!
Myself:
Thats inspired frm my Thursday nite marathon QUEUE 4 15hrs...with a very gud frend of mine.Though not all of such sort,as is written,happened...still.This s 4 d Lady(My FORCED-bt-Frequent visitor)
I'll get my feedback,there
NM:
Fantastic,sir!!!One of d BEST scripts u've cum up with....n 4 such a topic,wer unfortunately,many of US hv failed 2 put up an appreciative work....Gr8.
Genuine Fake:
GOD??Wer did dat question creep up??Seems most Unlikly....absurd too.U kept me guessin till,"Will She Understand?"...then cums d letdown.Tel me abt it.ne'wayz...
Misanthrope:
Sounds Kool...language s Wonderful...Penicious,Vestiges,Contrite...u make me run 4 my dict...BUT WAT REALLY S GOIN ON???
ahhhhhh...m so DUMB 2day!!! :(
kk...will b bak soon...with d remainin Komments...

n agn...Nothin rude intended...hope none taken...
N i guess dis wud b my last Klash till d End of Nov...d earliest,that is.A litlle catch up is 2 b done(STUDIES)...n YES,d Lady 2 take care of,too. :)
Wish me LUCK!

Mickey said...

who is this turban clad human being in the theme pic??
Is he one of the Konfessioners?

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malted socktail said...

to second shin-shin
ya, we all have shown that we are brilliant at shooting booker prize entries every week on everyday words...why not let our mind evolve
rangan - thats for u... and if u think it was a really dumb / easy word, wonder wwhy there were still so many varied takes on it....


@shin
shin could post my entry again, with the para spacing... somewhere i feel it does make a small difference a gap between paras...
thanks a ton :)

truthdude said...

Rangan...hey if you don't get it, you don't get it. You decide who wants what...what they get is in your head man...so think!

And as for the word, i think it's supposed to be more than just using the word in your post...it's supposed to be your take on the word itself.

Whether you choose to use it or not in your post...it's all up to you my man.

And it's cool if you don't get everything I write. Because for me, this is a place where I get to experiment with my writing. And we've got some really fine people here who can tell you exactly what's wrong with it!

Now is that awesome or is that awesome? :)

richa said...

i agree that the word was tough but again as Princess said...no fun and no talent if all words were inspiring and full of writing potential. a good word and a wonderful clash. one observation though...of late I have noticed that people when comment (which they are supposed to) people get defensive and justify their writing and there begins a whole spate not very nice to read!! I mean when people comment they are just expressing their opinion and nothing more...you can agree and try and incorporate their suggestion/ feedback or disagree and just move on.

Also I dont feel that the word per say has to be used in the write up..if it is good but if its not but the write still conveys the word it should be good enuf...

my person by person comments later when all entries are in....

NM said...

Go mad with the komments people... I strongly feel that the word must be present in the writeup. Makes it more challenging. Writing a conversation is easier than writing a conversation with the word conversation in it, in such a way that the word seamlessly blends in the writeup and doesnt seem forced. The Klash rules clearly mention the requirement of the word being present in the articles. Lets stick to the rules. They are framed with some kinda thought.

As far as defending work is concerned, I think its all cool as far as it doesnt get offensive towards anyone. We're all budding writers and the tendency to stand by our work is plain human. But as Richa says, the suggestions should be taken seriously. If you feel that the komment makes sense incorporate it, or else forget about it.

Some nice takes on the word. But I agree with Rangan when he says that the quality has deteriorated, albeit slightly.

More later.

Cheers all. Keep Klashing.



KONFESSIONER NM

Unknown said...

Hi People !!
Nice Klash !! highest number of entries till date, Cheers !!!
But before Kommenting I want to say something.
Is it Komments you want here or just praise. If you want praise only, then whats better than self praise. Read your take and say Wah re Hum!! I often do this with my takes :).
But if you want komments then be prepared to accept bricks along with the bouquets.
You don't have to open a fight every time you are kriticised.In a Previous klash you have already bullied away a klasher just because he took his role as a kritic a bit too seriously.

Regarding the need of the word to be included in the take, I think it has to be there , thats what I was told by the konfessioners when I was made the judge, I quote "Relevance of the word as the subject i.e., whether the draft becomes meaningless without the word or not. It makes no sense to write something that does not use 'the' word as the subject. In short words - The word has to be the soul of the theme. If the word is not there, whats the point writing it.
In this klash we were to write ON Conversation (using it as a word), and not A Conversation, I hope you understand the difference between the two prepositions

Willy Wingfoot said...

@TruthDude
Guess it was'nt so,sir....Its not a TAKE on D word CONVERSATION,bt a take ABOUT d word CONVERSATION....get d difference??
Ya,rite...u might find bttr Kommenters here,on ur work....n Xperiment u can...its al ur choice...bt STILL...after readin urs a few times more dan ne'body else's...i find myself with all Questions n no answers...may b an Xperiment gone wrong??

@MaltedSoctail
Every word u choose,even if its d preposition "A",v ppl r bound 2 get varied views,sir.Bt dat does'nt count as a means 2 justify d lack of REFRESHING takes on dis word!!!

@Dok Saab n NM
Cant b put bttr.

Willy Wingfoot said...

Bak on Kommenting:
Priyanka:
Simple n Engaging take,mam.N yes,This time arnd,...d Twist was unxpected...d DOG one n d one b4...as i said,has been usual...n predictable too....A very fine change dis time.Nice.

Konfessioner Singh:
Nostalgic??!!Nice...bt sumwer,sumhow....still d Punch dats reqd 4 d Krown s lackin...

Duperman:
WELKOME,hero....a pretty tough start 4 u,mate.Bt dats a wonderful job done.Creative too...gr8

Richa:
Bak 2 Hindi,mam...?!!n dis time i did read it til i got d meaning...n wat of d word CONVERSATION??

Sarang Mahajan said...

@ Mickey: You did not get it pal, perhaaps. Wish even I had someone to explain my klash through comments! :D

@ Rangan: Well, I left it for the readers to understand that conversation between two kings was over and they were prepared for the duel at the end. No matter who wins the duel, the thousands of soldiers standing on either side will go home unhurt. That's the the effect of even a short conversation.

Unknown said...

a horse, a bird, a monkey, all we needed in this circus was a super hero. Welcome Duper man !

Everyone komplaining about the word being tough, but I see the biggest turnout ever in the history of Klash.
Duperman :-Can't see the face behind this dusty silver robe, but you did intelligent use of the word. But not very impressed, you need more effort.
Richa Gupta :- Richa jee is not happy with every one calling her jee, but I cant help it. your beautiful poems make me respect you even more. your kavita on baatcheet is worth a kavi sammelan, this is a very small manch for you. ajnabiyon mein bhi hoti hai jamke baat-cheet, conversation between strangers, a very typical indian rail scenario, very beautifully captured in this comic poem. I kan only say, Wah Wah
Mandappa KC :- Conversations as a priceless memories, very emotive take, Mandappa. It was your word, you must have had these treasures in mind while suggesting the word.
Truth Dude :- Dude, its not very clear, but unlike that monkey I am somewhat getting what this conversation is all about. But I agree with Mickey, the word has to be there in the writeup. without the word , any dialoge between two or three people could have been used here. No Sir, you have to put in Conversationin the writeup. What do you say, Konfessioner Singh!!
Mickey The Monkey :-So your master allows you to watch Koffee with Karan.Even I love the show ! Good use of the word, dumbstruck conversationalist was a good idea. And I am not a Vet, but being a child specialist, I think I can handle monkeys, scrap me, or if its some thing personal, mail me.
Sarang Mahajan :-If talks could decide all disputes, there would have been no war. And a woman is the reason behind most wars(is it sounding chauvinistic? ), good concept, only that you too did not use the theme word in your writeup.
Lord Summer :- I think you cant see beyond that mare and the grass over the hilltop. Your poems are good but becoming repeatative. why not try a different genre for a change.
Dok Saab :- Well , found it difficult to write full 120 words.
Willy Wingfoot :- Wingfoot, this one from you is better than your previous takes. Ending any conversation with I Love You is a good Idea
NM :- when childhood dreams shatter, all we have are broken conversation. Nice take on the word from the master script writer.
The Genuine Fake :- Another nice one, conversing without words. Being a pediatrician, I know !! Sick children say a lot with there eyes, you just have to listen from your eyes, and the conversation occurs. Only wish you could have pruned your write up a bit.
Misanthrope :- very nicely written poetry, and a very different view on conversation (or failed conversation)
Priyanka Acharya :- ONe way conversation ! its like talking to self. but most of us have a conversation with ourselves, we ask and we reply. good use of the word.
Konfessioner Singh :- you taking part after quite some time :). nicely written as usual, no kashmiri females here though. But the emotion here is the same nostalgia associated with conversation, like Mandappa's and NM's, I was expecting much more from you.

Unknown said...

@ Rangan Since Richa Di has chosen to write in another language, she has used baat cheet instead of Conversation. I think that should be OK with you

truthdude said...

While I am certainly not averse to following rules...I think putting the word in the post (and making a rule of it) is like missing the whole point of it.

But then...I guess in a democracy, the majority rules. So if it has to be, then it has to be.

Well..that's that I guess. And yes I will continue to experiment. Thank you so much for your confidence. :)

malted socktail said...

for once i disagree with NM...
i dont think you need to use the word in the post.. relevance of the word to the post ofcourse is extremely important but not neccesarily by using the word itself. think theres more joy and it is harder, if one chooses to.. chooses not to use the word, yet the word has all the relevance to the take....

and RANGAN-- to each his own mate. i jus thought it would be mroe fun to get to different words that spur different emotions, like most words but not seemingly simple words, like love hate, a, etc.

and if ye dint like it, too bad
:) :) :)

as for dok saab --- nnaaa i dint think of this when i gave the word. i had tonnes of other things (and psst. i suggested another word as top priority but anyways :) )

and i was runnin out of time with many thoughts on this word, but finally for some reason ended up writing about this... tho i was pleased at the end of it, dont think my current gf would be hehehe....

and wat i think is, people who do want to get into writing or who write... please for heaven's sake learn the meaning of the phrase

"KONSTRUCTIVE KRITICISM"

NM said...

@ Rangan... Dude try and komment without using the sms language of de's and frm's. Just becomes easier to read.

@ Truthdude... I have been an ardent admirer of your work and I love the bit about u experimenting. Go on... do it. The readers are more than willing to figure things out themselves.

@ everyone... The klash rules say, the word HAS to be present in the writeup. And as Truthdude said, if it has to be, it has to be.

I, on behalf of the Konfessioners, excuse the absence of the word from the klashes this week. But next week onwards, the post will be considered Void if the word doesnt appear.

Many thanks,
NM

The Konfessioners said...

Priyanka, yours was DEFINITELY not the worst haha... :) GOOD attempt!!! :)

@ Mickey, the sardar is nobody anyone of us know! Just thought he looked cool haha.

@Richa I agree, we shouldn't get defensive! but the word HAS to be part of the klash, it brings uniformity to the klashes... like, at the end of the day what's important is how differently we used the same word...theme too is imp. but word MUST be there...next time on, the konfessioners as NM said, will keep a tab on the same

Dok Saab, nice one about bricks and bouquets haha..and I agree with Rangan and you..not much 'punch' but it's an extempore thing...that's what was on my mind then!!!

Mandi... the word I repeat has to be there only for one reason.. :)

This place sure is getting kool!!!!

The Konfessioners said...

p.s. that was Missy Baba (me) above..

welkome aboard Niharika..!!!

Sarang Mahajan said...

@ Dok Saab: The word is there, Dook Saab. You might have to read it again! :)

Unknown said...

since you have changed the draft we'll read it again, you cheater cock

malted socktail said...

man,
konfessioner singh ji---do u go out and get people only better than us... the fresh blood here boils hotter than mine own...

and you say - this place is getting cooler... its getting hot as hell.....and boy am i loving it.

tho im thinkin id need to dedicate a whole day to komments...

aah the smell of fresh, new blood!

richa said...

okkkkkkkkk what has to be has to be :) thank you doc sa'ab for clarifying my word "baat-cheet". Just to repeat and "stand by my work" baat-cheet in colloquial Hindi means "conversation" I wanted to use "vartalaap" but then i feared it would become too pure for many of non-hindi speakers to grasp.

Also want to know from the Konfessioners if a Hindi write is going to be acceptable in future?

my comments will follow shortly

Unknown said...

Free Woman... one last conversation, I know how much we yearn to just have one last conversation with those gone from our lives. good one, hope you will watch the word limit though Free woman !!
Niharika...Welkom to the klub, Niharika !!. Interesting take on the word, but very dramatic, hangman hanging his own son!! pure bollywood stuff, but well done.
Amandeep Parmar...Conversing with someone who has departed, very emotional. you are not new to klash I suppose, Aman..deep !!

Well I am through with komments, but where are others, only three komments so far of 17 klashes. People stop defending what you wrote and start killing other peoples klash

Missy Baba said...

hahahaha...!!! you're right it's gettin' hot in here!! :D

And Welkome Duperman what's with the hazaaar pseudonyms!!!!

Amandeep Parmar aka The Dark Poet is an old klasher dok saab!!!

Missy Baba said...

My komments will kome kal...!! :P

India jit gayi, India jit gayi!!!!

Free Woman said...

Let me start by saying - wow! What a varied & creative interpretation of a word we all thought was hard to write about.
Niharika- The concept is good. But the execution (no pun intended!) could be better. It has a few loose ends that could be tied up better- why he was sent on an 'exile' wasn't convincing to me.
Amandeep - half-hearted roads-wah! But why do you think of TV channels? The rest of the passage is beautiful.
Duperman- 120 words tell a complete story-beginning, build-up and end. But why would a fireman who is (I guess) there to help the cat, do nothing? I didn't get the storyline completely.
Richa - Hindi mein likha hai- bahut hi badiya hai. Reminded me of a poem called Bharatiya Rail by a famous hasya kavi.
Mandappa- Simple & sweet. Would have been great if it had extra creativity, twist, a buildup...
Truth dude - I feel that this is a very creative interpretation of the word - an example of a conversation rather the use of the word in a write-up. Would have been easier to read if you had the characters' names before the lines to figure out who said what.
Mickey- Made Karan speechless - that is some achievement. Unique interpretation of the word
Sarang- love the flow, the names, the vocabulary. I feel the theme of'conversate' is lost though...the plot takes over
Lord Summer- who in two short weeks has become my favorite - never knew I was a horse person! But my vote goes to another :-(
Dok Saab- simple & sweet.talking about a subject oft talked about. wonder if it could have been made more interesting...
Willy Wingfoot - I kind of get it. Its the klash of the heart vs.mind, and you say I love u even if you didn't want to? Nice job!
NM-My vote goes to NM this week. Its lovely. I think that if you had written "I had a conversation with god..." instead of "I wished to have " the impact would have been better as then god's 'fumbling/failing' you would be more touching.
Genuine Fake - damn good piece. What a unique interpretation of the word, and so beautifully written.
Misanthrope- I got it this time! I feel if you reduce the "big" words, it will be even better. I still have a problem with the grammar & language.
Priyanka - that's a cute write-up. I think I get where you're going with the twins thingy. If the coma-twin could talk telepathically to the visitor-twin- that would have added the kick to this story
Konfessioner Singh - what I like about this passage is that it talks about an insightful concept that is true universally. I connect with this. Well- written too.

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Priyanka said...

Brickbats..and bouquets..and then some more...forget about the klash...we have a fantastic KONVERSATION going on here... :)

Awrite...here are my comments...

Free Woman: Broken love...broken heart..!! Nice one..!! Could've stuck to the word limit though..but for a first..its fine..

Niharika: Welcome to the klash Niharika..!! Nice first klash..but its a usual piece of writing..!! Was it anyway inspired by Barty Crouch from HP and the Goblet of Fire..?? :)

Amandeep Parmar: Nice one..Aman..or Deep..or should I call you Amandeep..? Lol..!! Nice one though...pretty touching..!! Welcome to the klash..

Duperman: Your neighbourhood friend..DUPERMAN.. LOL..!! Saving Mrs Pansy's cat was a nice gesture...but could've written a better piece..!! Cute...yes..but doesnt work..!!

Richa Gupta: Aapki hindi ki hum daad dete hain...and I have experienced what you have described..so many times.. :)

Mandappa KC: Lord Mandi..thanks for the word..made me exercise my grey cells a lot more than I usually do..but still I couldnt come up with something good.. :)) Love lost...usual again..though..!!

Truth Dude: This was about paying the bill..right..?? The write-up was good though..!!

Mickey The Monkey : Hey Monkey..hows the swinging going on..? I want to see this broadcast..!! Humorous...!! Keep it up..!!

Sarang Mahajan: Hmm..reminded me of the movie 300..where the messenger from Persia pays a visit to King Leonidas..!! Usual stuff..!!

Lord Summer : The mighty stallion..found your love..I guess..!! Nice take on the proposal part...!!

Dok Saab: Written from experience kya..?? Lol..!! Nice one though..!!

Willy Wingfoot:This one also looks like a product of personal experience..too usual..but cute.. :)

NM: Moved me.. :) And u said it stinked..no way..!! :)

The Genuine Fake: Who's the messenger..?? Maybe I'm dim-witted today..but I couldn't understand..!!

Misanthrope: Fear before the sentence...?? U do wield the words fabulously..i sometimes have to run for my dictionary..!!

Priyanka Acharya: I wrote horribly.. :))) Conversation with self..I always do that..!!

Konfessioner Singh: Beautiful..just the right mix of emotions and feelings.. :)

My vote goes to NM :)

And Konfessioners...Chak de India... :)

Sarang Mahajan said...
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Priyanka said...

@ Free Woman: That was what I wrote about..telepathic conversation.. :) I guess..have to wield my words better.. :)

Priyanka said...

@ Sarang: Revenge...not today...maybe some other day.. :) Am in too good a mood.. :)

Free Woman said...

@ Priyanka - the messenger in Genuine Fake's write-up is an angel or death - whatever you want to call him/her.

Sarang Mahajan said...

@ Free Woman: Thanks for the kind words. And yes, I think the word did not fit in there. I did not want it to be there, but was reminded of the harsh rules.

@ Priyanka: Seeking revange, eh? :D But not 300, if you have seen Troy, you'd call this one even more usual. But I thought it to be the biggest effect a conversation could have. Saving thousands of lives.

Sarang Mahajan said...

Priyanka: Hehehe! Cool. Cheers! :-)

Sarang Mahajan said...

Great Klash, yet again! And yes, I smell some scheming/plotting going on here. Klashers seem to have taken the rip-apart suggestion quite seriously. But let us not lose the old charm of Klash completely. Let us be honest while Kommenting.

Free Woman: Good one, but why did you not fit it within 120? I feel it was possible with the entry you have posted. But yes, everyone takes one Klash or two to manage cramping the stuff within the limit. Taking about your theme, I like it. One last conversation!

Niharika: Welcome! :-) I had to read your take twice to understand it as there was a little discontinuity, but in the end I loved the concept. The father executing his son, while regretting that he did not have the much needed conversations with his son. Cool concept. But I feel you should pay attention to your formatting, to make it more impressive - spaces before comas and exclamatory marks are the easiest things to get rid of. A good one though!

Aman: Welcome back, pahji! I was a little surprised to see prose from you instead of a poem. I don't know what made so many people to think of death for writing on this word. I wouldn't talk much about your take, though! :-)

Duperman: You have a cool, humorous style of writing, Duperman. Welcome! :-) A nice-one to begin with. I liked the title Fancy Dress! :D

Richa: Badhiya hai! :) I remember a horrible journey that gave me the most terrible time of life, from Mumbai to Aurangabad! I could have taken in a hundred times greater exaggeration here, easily! But a cool and humorous one! Only, I don't feel the word (baat-cheet in your case) is the theme of the tale.

Mandi: Yeh, I have heard that people in love can go on chatting night after night over phone (for which their parents pay) for months. Nice one man, as usual. Your word, after all!

Truth Dude: An experiment here, isn't it! A wonderful conversation, even though the word is not the theme at all. A good read, none-the-less!

Mickey: A great idea, a monkey at the show! But I feel you have lost the charm of your writing since last two posts. I remember voting you on one of the previous occasions, when your take was a lot more sensible. I can't make anything out of this one!

Lord Summer: I wish I was illiterate!

Dok Saab: Good one, Dok Saab. I think you could have added a few more words, even doubled it up, to make the story more interesting. But I think you have unveiled another aspect of the word even with the little words that you have used! The theme-word seems force-fitted!

Willy WIngfoot: Good one, man. You play impressively with words and imaginations, which seem to emerge inside your head very well, every time. But I don't feel the write-up rotates around 'the' word, it is more about how you feel when you are in love! The end was average.

NM: Superb word-play. Cool imagination throughout. But I feel the conversation with good never started, so how could the kid listen to the 'broken' versions of it? It is a good experiment however. Very well written!

The Genuine Fake: Why did you not mind the word limit? I think you would have made a difference! Nice concept, a conversation with death! Liked it!

Misanthrope: I think I got at least some part of what you tried to convey, which I think as achievement considering your abstract style of writing. I sense something nice in it, but I am a simple, ordinary reader!

Priyanka: What a wonderful improvement. This one from you can match (or even surpass) anyone else’s klash from above. Being the way I am, I liked this one. Touching imagination!

Shinjini: Superb, Shin. And more importantly, I could understand your whole theme in one go. Simple enough for the likes of me, yet good enough to amuse anyone. Good use of the theme-word.

My Vote: I had to choose from Priyanka, Shinjini and Aman, but, for his most-touching idea, I think it has to be Amandeep!

Sarang Mahajan said...


@ Mandi
@ NM

I feel it should be okay if the word is not there in the write-up. That makes it a challange to write on the theme without using the word. I don't see the erason why it should not be allowed.

Rangan:

I think the word is perfect, mate. And please try writing neatly, so that one feels like reading your comment. Are you always in hurry that you use the chatting lingo? Eh?

And don't you dare give a rude answer to this one from me, I am older than you. And I have learnt my curses and hexes well. You might end up vomiting slugs! :P

Sarang Mahajan said...

This time we might have the 100th komment. Let us see who writes it! :D

richa said...

thnx to all those who have praised my work but pls let me know how to improve on it too...Here are my comments:

Free Woman: Welcome to the klash!! A wonderful poem, something i guess we all can relate to!! very simple yet effective rhyming, however I felt that the use of the word was not as effective

Niharika: welcome..it took a couple of readings for me to get it but it sounded very filmy and half structured. Why would talking made him (the son) any different. Being a executioner is not something one is so ashamed of that they would send their kids away. a good take but could have been better. looking fwd for your next klash!!

Amandeep: a good take on the word but the piece seemed disjointed somehow. the first couple of lines not gelling with the rest

Duperman: liked your piece a lot...its kind of humor i like, esp the opening line. I guess the fireman was just going to take his own sweet time doing his job and Duperman is too soft hearted to wait!!

Richa: hmmm apni prashnasa mein hum kya kahein isliye will say about where i lacked. the first para was not much of a conversation related just a build up to a scene with a lot of conversation happening!!! could have and should have done a better job.

Mandappa: wonderful take and wonderfully written. Shelley rightly said "Our sweetest songs are those that tell of saddest thought"

Truth Dude: I thought your write was funny!! and i mean in the good way...so typical of a guy to get a girl in his bed!! :) but the end was a little out of sync...why would he take out his wallet to pay his GF or was he just being too conceited and was already prepared with condoms in his wallet??!!
either ways he deserved the "fataak"

Mickey: good take and I liked the use of the word the best in your write up!! a little unstructured..try and trim and tighten it.

Sarang: as a part of a bigger story this is awesome but as a stand alone it wasn't. Coz i have your other pieces to compare this one against I know you are capable of much better and more effective writing.

Summer: What doth yee see
in a mare so silly??

haha i sahll write a poem about summer's poems!!! but have to agree with doc saab its getting repetitive but again what other avenues does a horse have except the grass and the mare??!!

Doc Saab: a big bang with a small write up. tongue tied with the lady!! so true!! but still i know you have more potential and this is not one of your best.

Willy: have to admit i could not get the flow at all...except the last few lines. the whole thing did not lead to the moment when you said "I love you" both parts were good in themselves but together they failed to deliver the punch.

NM: :( :( your write up made me soooo sad...for all the dreams all of us have ever lost, all the big dreams that have gone away unnoticed in the hurry to grow up!!
and today here we stand on the mound of our twisted broken dreams and wondering "huh!! what happened!!" I almost voted for you then re-read Fake's write up and had to vote for him just for the sheer novelty of the idea and its written nicely too.

Genuine Fake: a wonderful take on the word and very well written. loved the line "The brightness of the dark awaited us." it was hard for me to decide between you and NM and in the you won coz of the novelty of the idea.

Misanthrope: I would definitely komment on your write up if I really understood it..i understand all the words but dont get the soul

Priyanka: nice and different from your other write ups. a little too dramamtic perhaps but as twins are supposed to be sooo close I guess Julianne felt the pain!!

Princess: what a nostalgic piece!!! ... but again although it was a touching piece it was a very common theme.
chalo kisi aur ko vote milne ka to mauka mila!!!

MY VOTE: GENUINE FAKE!!

Whew!!! what an uphill task this was..taken a good 2 hrs of my office time :)

India ke world cup jeetne pe sabko hardik badhai aur 2-2 laddoo!!! :D

richa said...

sorrrrrrrrrrrryyyyyyyyy genuine fake...i take back my vote as I just noticed you exceeded the word limit!!!

richa said...

MY VOTE: NM

malted socktail said...

this excitement and kompetition i should save for a sober time...

ya ya im a part time drunkard too.

:)

my komments tmrw hic. !

nutcase=neharika said...

[ neharika ]

hey feel like a novice out here , u konfessioners really have your way with words ! The klashes really expose the muitihued nature of a word ..

Free Woman: words left unsaid and words you want to hear ..in a last conversation.. nice stuff

Neharika: no komment !

Amandeep Parmar: hey why would one want to end such a convesation ?! nice questions to ponder over !

Duperman: yaar i doubt you can talk someone into love !why bother about an ineffective conversation if duperman was so capable of doing it ?

Richa Gupta: great work ; the poem carries a very lively sprit and nice rythm.

Mandappa KC: hmmm conversations serving as a reverie..

Truth Dude: nice humour.. reading between the lines :)

Mickey The Monkey : full relevence and spot light on the very topic ,nice one

Sarang Mahajan: hey do you really believe the "conversation" of a challenge to the dual was main reason which averted a war ? a war reduced to a personal problem ?

( hey sarang excusing you this time for speling my name wrong ,its neharika )

Lord Summer : cute one ; spills honest emote !

Dok Saab: yaar a little dragging (i mean the idea has been trampled over for years and totally its flat now) Surely the experience doesnt lose its charm !

Willy Wingfoot:hey liked it ! ends with a jazzed up note :)

NM: grey shaded poem evoking depression !! kiddin really nice effort

The Genuine Fake: nice one but i fail to understand what brightness of dark is !

Misanthrope:subtle message juxtaposed with boisterous effect.

Priyanka Acharya: conversations as a succour .. good one

Konfessioner Singh: guess when people are gone , theirs words are what we hang onto.. convos revive them .. post s a little bleak effort.

nutcase=neharika said...

stupid me forgot about the vote ! mines for richa.

Unknown said...

Good Morning people, this is Duperman. Its tough to take time out for klashing and kommenting when most of it goes towards saving the world.

Here are my komments:

Free Woman Sounds like a Britney Spears song to me. Decent writeup. But what's with the extra words?

Neharika This looks like an excellent scene to me. I have been in a situation like this. Unfortunately I wasnt around to save the son from death and the father from guilt.

Amandeep Well penned passage. One of the better klashes.

Duperman To offer some explanation, Miss. Richa got my meaning right. The stone hearted fireman was taking a long time. Also to answer the question of Free woman, Well woman, no matter how free you are, you dont ask Duperman questions. Saving the world is not my job, but my duty.

Richa Gupta Lady in the a train bogey. Written well but I dont think baat cheet is the theme here.

Mandappa Now this really reminded Duperman of Ratwoman. My first love. Amazingly written. Moving, i must konfess. And its tough to move Duperman.

Truth Dude Duperman loves brain teasers. This one was one helluva trickster! Cool job. Love the sound of fataak.

Mickey You've seen some glowing reviews here ape, but to me its as bland as Spiderman 3.

Sarang The female form always lead to conflict. Duperman's not a sexist, he's definitely sexy though.

Lord Summer Well written poetry. A horse's love story is an amusing read.

Dok Saab Nice Klash, sir.

Willy wingfoot Again a decent take on the word. There's no sea in duper-land, so I found it a tad tough to visualize.

NM Why did the kid want pink walls? Duperman loves silver. No wonder God fumbled.

The Genuine Fake Genuinely fake, this. Failed to invoke any kind of feeling. Well worded and nicely written though. More than 120 again.

Misanthrope Now this was a fairly complex, interesting read. Tough language but good klash.

Priyanka Nice attempt.

Konfessioner Singh Nostalgia is always a good thing. The problem with this is that it ends up being just good, not more.

DUPERMAN'S DUPER VOTE
MANDAPPA

It's great Klashing here. I will try to come as often as I can. Saving the world is not an easy task.

DUPERMAN,
DUPER-LAND,
SOMEWHERE IN THE WORLD WHERE THERE ARE NO PROBLEMS, COZ I AM.

Santonu said...

after a long time all big klashers are klashing, and i have to judge the m!!! :( dont kriticize the judge at the end of the day, luks like that vote is going to decide the winer :)

Sarang Mahajan said...

@ Neharika: Sorry for mispelling. I have been doing this since childhood, and still doing it.

And as to your question, have you seen Troy?

Cyn1c said...

God lies in the details. Death is the ultimate truth. Who wouldn't want their words to reflect the ultimate truth? Even imagery is based on a truth;we can imagine.

Nostalgia is manifest, for a conversation cannot be current. Words scroll up and become history.

I used to klash here like some obie van hermit and it's good to see this joint flourish.

Good Ole Dok - You Still amuse me.

Dear Free Woman - The TV channels air death of all sorts. I deal with the realest of them all. Hence, I miss the frills.

Priyanka - You could call me either. I would still be the same jerk!

Sarang - It's the P that matters. :)

Richa - No 'conversation' is more boring than the one where everyone agrees. The disjoint is actually the connector.

Thank you all for the kind words. However, I shall refrain from being the judge, like always.

Singh, my call to you is due.

Yours
Court Jester

Willy Wingfoot said...

@Sarang
RUDE,sir??I dont remember ever being rude with you....Your Bro,NM...yes...in the community.but that was settled.Still...tell me when...or was it pun??
And you know Me,sir...n my MUM too....PC is abandoned till CAT.So i sneek in whenever i get to see my momma's back.And that ai'nt too frequent these days.
And i've already said...This was my last Klash....Will b bak after CAT...n hopefully with a grin.

My Vote to NM.

I've read the new entries too.
NEHARIKA-Yours was kool.The limit put you out though.
and Others...great work.
CYA....

NM said...

Hola! It was a nice klash, though somewhere it (strictly a personal opinion, this) paled in comparison to the previous Klashes.
The maximum number of Klashers, and after a long time Shin-Shin, Sarang and Me Klashing together.
Quite a blast, this.

Here are the komments:

Free Woman: The last conversation sounds like a nice idea. Its also penned well and you seem to have a very good piece to start with. Welkome to the Klash. Please lookout for the word limit next time :)

Neharika: Welkome to the Klash,Neharika. I was amused to see such a bollywoodish Klash! And I used to think I was the only film bug in the gang! Not sure if you intended to be filmy, but this one surely rocks!

Amandeep:Paaji!!! We've missed you! And this is just the right komeback vehicle! Very well written!

Duperman: Welcome to the Klash, duperman! Not bad, i must say.

Richa:Visually enticing! You capture the scene in a general compartment with terrific flamboyance and the use of our rashtrabhasha is just the icing on the cake! However, I strongly feel that conversation or baat-cheet doesnt really come akross as the theme of the piece.

Mandappa Sir Mandi! I have no komplaints this time, whatsoever. This acc. to me is your best Klash so far!

Truth DudeThere's been a lot of talk about the clarity of your article. Fine with the experimentation dude, but this time, its a bit too unclear. Though I had a ball trying to draw different conclusions, I somehow felt the need of a li'l bit of explanation. A nicely penned dialogue, but that's about it.

Mickey: No,no, no. Somehow Mickey, this one is not working on any level (for me, personally) It is a different approach, but is too out of the blue and a li'l childish. Koffee with Karan with a monkey might be fun to start with, but it definitely ends up being everything, but fun. This one, just does not work.

Sarang:Bro, your article reminded me of a few films. But seemed highly incomplete. Though i imagined what happened before, I guess its just a scene. Nothing wrong with writing a scene, but then this misses "something" which i cant really point out.

Summer:A sequel eh? Nice nice. Lacks the element of surprise which your previous posts had dear horsey! Valiant effort though!

Dok Saab:Short and sweet. Nice Klash, Dok saab!

Willy:Rangan mah man! Your article is cute, full of cliches. But its still like a Shahrukh Khan film, which is the same everytime but does manage to be a super hit! Superb last line though!

The genuine fake:Brilliant build-iup, lucid language but somehow an end which just loses steam. Nice article.
Watch.The.Word.Limit.

Misanthrope:Finally within the word limit! Nice article! Though it made me run for my dictionary quite a few times!

Priyanka:Very nicely done! And you said this is the worst?

Shinjini:Simple and nostalgic! This is very unlike you esp. since I cud get the heads and tails of it in the very first read! But still, it lacks the punch!

My Vote: Sir Mandi!

Sarang Mahajan said...

@ NM and everyone who feels my Klash is incomplete: First of all, there is this word limit, and despite it my attempt has always been at cramping in as bigger tales as I can. Secondly, I felt, after both the kings were prepared for the duel at their own to decide the fate of the battle, there was no point in stretching it further until someone won, for no matter who wins out of the two, the conversation had won, saving thousands of lives.

malted socktail said...

here i go, on my own again
like a twister i was born to walk alone... hehe ...k sorry got carried away,,

1) Free woman: well..hmm...it's well written. but somehow teh first half seemed about people leaving or broken relaitonships rather than death. i think your end couldve been better

2) Niharika: I love the idea behind this. I clap. applaud. your new blood?? But i think if you had kept to 120 words, you wouldve done even better.

3) Aman'deep': youve been here before. i jus love your start. your first sentence. problem with such a good sentence is that rest has to match it and it doesnt. nice though.

4) Duperman: don't like the take. dont be offended though duperman. the whole piece seemed a tad flat. though your second sentence is worth your salt albeit being simple.

5) apologies again richa jee. hindi nahin malum.

6) truth dude: liked the beginning, dislike the end. continuity?? and when your leaving the context to the imagination of the reader, either make it mroe descriptive or mroe open-ended. yours is one tracked where the reader wont know whether to wonder the context or happily skip by.

7) Mickey: i hate fake talk show hosts. i hate pseudo stardom. so sorry, but i dont like the take. and there's more to conversation than the one there.

8) Sarang sir: even if the conversation did save so much trouble, your piece focuses more on the duel rather than that very fact. and isn't it converse?? rather than conversate?? jus wondering

9) Lord Summer: for once you can get off the high horse though im glad your sticking to your theme. some parts are ok. but your last two lines din't fancy a battering eyelid. if i can advice, never force rhyme. i learnt it the hard way.

10) Dok Saab: reminds me of the song from notting hill "when you say nothing at all". we all know you can do better saab.

11) Will Wingfoot. Its nice in parts, brilliant in some. but you do water down the excitement inbetween. not smooth. love your first line. brilliant. hate your 6th. :)

12) NM: Salutations. put simply. written well and i too was thinking of a conversation with god. but you've done superbly. nice going bro.

13) Genuine fake: nice on a re-read. as in takes time to see it. good one mate.

14) Misanthrope: nice. sentence errors. and i know people whine on grammar errors, not that im a stickler for grammar either, but when its pure wrong english, it kinda makes ye jittery. nice in parts. and trying to hard in some others.

15) Priyanka: love this take. and by no chance is it the worst. Priyanka - let me tell you something. you dont need to sound profound to be a good writer. your simplicity and innocence gives your text and writing so much character. keep it up!

16) Shin-shin: my fave. your visualization is always top-notch whther its one sentence or many. but i dont like your ending. i feel you need to reward the reader more after you've built up splendid imagery in his head....what with "chai on your porch...sunday morning...."
but your last line did disappoint..

i really want to give my vote to priyanka..cuz u do write well, and you need the encouragement. but i shall be proffesional and i think my vote goes to

MY VOTE - NM

malted socktail said...

n that took a good three hours... wonder why they bother paying me at office.. hehe... :)

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truthdude said...

ok my turn :)

Free Woman
Ok this is nice...but it doesn't do much for the reader. I think you missed the point of actually having a conversation that just needing to have one...which is as good a take as any.

This coming from a guy whose take on conversation not many people understood anyway. :D


Niharika
Awesome!

Amandeep
Very cool this one! I really liked how you steered the conversation one way without even mentioning it anywhere right until the end.

Duperman
I liked it. It was fresh, comic and certainly not a conversation…more like an incident. The conversation I thought was like ‘oh by the way’.

Richa
While I can read and appreciate hindi, it’s not something I look forward to doing! The fault, I assure you, is not yours. I’m a much more Bambaiyya sort of character to apan ke liye shuddh hindi basically bouncer hai.
Maybe in my next experiment apan koshish karega ki bambaiiya hindi meich likhne ka…bole to..fultoo jhataak! Meanwhile..apan kuchch comment nahi marega teri poetry ke upar. Khudka popat kayko karneka?

Mandappa
True that! Very evocative text…me appreciates! :)

truthdude
The idea of having a conversation while not really giving it a context, struck me as a little weird. It was certainly written with a two character in mind – female and male…but to give it a context would be giving it away.

So..a conversation where the players are people you have met and in a place you wouldn’t expect them to be. What are they talking about? You tell me!

Mickey
Man I loved the idea of sushing up Karan. And it’s nice to see you weren’t carried away. This script had a potential for venom and disaster, but with your pen…it was surprising. And that’s a good thing! :)

Sarang
This didn’t do much for me. I couldn’t relate to the characters…maybe because they were so alien. I liked the idea of a duel…but it could have been so much more…punchy!!

LS
You really write good poetry, I must say that! I love the idea of a romance between two horses. You guys make a really cute couple, I bet. A deaf and dumb mare…if only other horses would be so lucky (hehehehe!). Ok that wasn’t so funny…but hey nice poem!

Doc
You the man doc…even though I wasn’t very impressed with the writing, I liked the idea of a wordless conversation.

Love is like that too Mr. Mandy!

WW
According to me…your post should’ve have been –

Before the sea, beside my rigid self,
"Start a Conversation”, said she.
I did.
And so it all began...
as I ended up, confessing,
"I Love You".

Everything else was excess.

NM
Very cool poetry…very cool imagery. The sense of nostalgia and the sense of unbelonging…very nicely captured. You’re a pukka wordsmith Sirjee!!

GF
Me likes this. Very imaginative and well written. Really nice! :)

Misanthrope
You are the Enigmatic. I didn’t quite get all of the poetry..and I didn’t know where it was leading, but yes…I did get a sense of ‘who am I’ here.

Priyanka
That’s a nice piece you wrote. I liked the fact that your writing shows caring. And I’m glad you chose to write about something like this. Your writing style is lucid…no need for the fancy stuff when you have such a nice story to tell. And you tell it, like it is, simply, without making a fuss. I like!!


The Belle of Bells
Like the new nick? :)
What can I say…your writing is poignant, elegant and so very personal. And no fancy stuff this time! You got me vote.

The Genuine Fake said...

Lots more klashing this week!Good to see that...I noticed one thing here,when one individual constructively criticises amidst the mutual admirers,he/she is booed off,but when all of them do it together,it is indeed,CONSTRUCTIVE CRITICISM...wonder why though

Priyanka said...

Thanks a lot people..for the komments..and for the encouragement..and even for the brickbats.. :) I hope to write better..and stay with the klash forever...!! Its become essential for me.. :)

All hail the klashers.. :)

The Genuine Fake said...

Nevertheless,my turn to usher in the komments...
Here goes:
@FREE WOMAN:
Very nice piece of work,represents the blues of a person who's lost and regretted. Just that during the end,a certain bit of discontinuity didnt live upto the good start..Nevertheless,good work :)

@NIHARIKA:
The concept thought of was very decent,the sentence formations were a bit weird...like the exclamations could have been converted into shorter meaningful sentences...nevertheless,I'm sure the next one from you would be a cracker :)

@AMANDEEP:
Made for a really nice read Aman...just that 120 words must've been too small a word count for you to put all your thoughts into..hence,a lil jumbled up I believe...Nevertheless great work :)
and yeah...WELKOME ;)

@DUPERMAN:
Good writeup for starters dude. Dont understand the usage of slangs in the writeup though. And even though you've used them,you havent placed them in the right fashion...Cats suck? Wha? And even though the situation seems ripped off from a normal American day,what kinda sarcasm would allow the fireman to listen to his IPod,apparently,while up on the tree? Vague. Duperman,you really need to dust your silver coat and put in some genuine readable thoughts.

@RICHA GUPTA:
Now here's one example,where it can be proved that language aint no bar for the ones who write well. Well done richa. The only problem,here,I believe,is the audience which reads it. If they aint comfortable with it [like we have some readers already],we may have fewer appreciative responses.
Good work though!

@MANDAPPA:
Hey Mandi,good choice of the word this time round. :)
Your concept of losing and remembering was very nice,but there were some serious grammatical and sentence errors which made the passage really discontinous.Example:
"Of the 2 years we spent together. We were lost in each other."
should've been one single continous sentence. secondly,
"9-10 hours every day lost in each others words and worlds."
didnt make sense.
No offence,please correct me if I am wrong.. :)

@TRUTHDUDE:
Maybe because of the word being ambiguous and the rules not visibly imposed,you must have written a conversation itself.
Nevertheless,it was a good one,essence of which was its normalcy :)

@MICKEY:
Star monkey,eh? Funny read,must say..Monkey drinking coffee was a bit of an overdo though!
good work nevertheless :)

@SARANG:
Liked your work Sarang,and I dont think it was incomplete.
Is conversate actually a word? googled it and didnt quite like the findings ...
Nevertheless,excellent :)

@LORD:
Lord,was a little disappointed with your writing this time around. The rhymes were so mismatched. Whats a smelly hilltop? and after telling that to the mare,why would you get jitters in your belly?
Just a question,please correct if I am wrong :)


@DOK SAAB:
The essence of your writing was the simplicity in it. But a little more words and an extension of the simplicity would have lended a nice feel to the poem :)
p.s. Yeah,children do have a way with their eyes. Something we tend to lose once we grow up. :)

@WILLY WINGFOOT:
Dogs stared at you and you smiled...once you were in love? err..ok acceptable. all was great except a few lines here and there...the concept though was nice,and romantic...good work :)

@NM:
excellent thought! certain grammatical errors,and not so acceptable last line made it a little dim,but I still salute you for the concept. cheers :)

@MISANTHROPE:
Your poems are really a worthy check..this time though,the poem didnt quite seem right...agility of his black eye balls? why eye balls?
nevertheless,without this one line,I think I would have to really think of voting for you this week :)

@PRIYANKA:
Good stuff lady,very neat..I loved it..difficult to vote now..keep the good work up mate! :)

@KONFESSIONER SINGH:
Atlast,the lady has spoken..Simple,lucid,nostalgia personified.Classic example of wonderful writing with no complicated grammar involved.Cheers! :)

My vote: Priyanka. Keep it up!

Unknown said...

Difficult to decide whom to vote !! ,
all are so good this time ,and so many to choose from
But cant shrink away with the responsibility.

My Vote---Willy Wingfoot

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Unknown said...

Mutiny against me, I love it. Give me more of it!:D

Here are my komments scribbled in extra super mega hurry:

Lady Free Woman: Truth!

Lady Neharika: Nice setting!

Lord Amandeep of Seventh Galaxee: Wow!

Lady Richa: Nice Chineese poem!

Lord Mandappa: Time has money!

Lord Truthdude Fataak! Ouch!

Lord Mickey: Banana with Karan sounds realistic!

Lord Sarang: Yucks! Vomits!

Lord Summer: WOW!! :-)

Lord Dok Saab: T20 version of Klash!

Lord Willy: So nice!

Lord NM: Baba black sheep have you any wool?

Lord/Lady Genuine Fake: Cute!

Lord Misanthrope: Superb!

Lady Priyanka: Wonderful!

Lady Konfectioner: Great!

My hundred pointer goes to myslef, and one point vote goes to Lord NM 1st!

Unknown said...

Lady GF: When you are about to propose someone you get nervous jitters in your belly, and then you easily mumble nonsense such as "smelly hilltop!"

Mickey said...

Hi Lord Summer,
You in such a hurry, has the Lady Mare agreed to your advances??
And Lord, You Missed Duperman in your komments, it it an oversight or delibrate

Mickey said...

My remaining komments and the precious vote
Free Woman--except the last conversation, every line rhymed so pretty well!!
Neharika--Publik hanging of a son by the father !! very difficult situation for the poor dad. what imagination !!
Amandeep Parmar--Such conversations never end, they are always there as cherished memories.
Duperman--on the tree in one jump, are you a duperman or dupermonkey !! Had I been there I would have scared the cat even higher before helping her, dunno why she didn't jump down , wouldn't have hurt anyways , having those nine lives.
Richa Gupta--saala kameena kahin kausing choicest abuses in a klash, you are always jaraa hat ke Richa G.(or is it Jee)
Mandappa KC--conversation as a cherished memories !! once again!, but thats all you are left with, memories of meaningless conversation.
Willy Wingfoot--You failed to notice the monkey , watching you from your bathroom ventilator he he
Misanthrope --don't have the dictionary with me, but the poem sounds of a high order.
Konfessioner Singh --sob sob, you reminded me of my dadaji Konfessioner Singh. He used to tell us such interesting stories ( borrowed heavily from the western series of Sudden, we only realized when we grew up)
My Vote goes to Konfessioner Singh
for making me remember again all the conversation I had with my Dada jee, Miss you Baba(Not you missy baba, but we called our dadaji baba.)

Mickey said...

An Idea kan change your life, One komes to my monkey sized mind,
since using or not using the word in the write up evoked such strong sentiments, dividing the people into two groups,
why not, just for the next klash, we do not use the word. That is, write on the word without it being included in the writeup, and still conveying the theme. Any take which includes the word be excluded from voting.

Unknown said...

Sorry, I missed you, Duperman: Meaw!

Unknown said...

@ Lord Mickey: Missing Duperman was a grave mistake, the result of rush that I was in!

Unknown said...

@ Lord Micky: No I am running out of luck badly. For instance, a lot of people found my take good, but no hay to me. Sobs! :(

Mickey said...

no hay for you but you still have the beautiful Lady Mare and smelly grass on the green hilltop

Unknown said...

I can see what the Horsey and the monkey are upto, they are just trying to shoot the hundredth goal,err I mean komment !!

Unknown said...

What use is all that without hay?

Unknown said...

You also join in, my Lord Doctor with an injection!

Mickey said...

dont loose heart Lord Summer, I too have been getting only peanuts, even after such brilliant TV show.
There is still hope, Lord Judge with his Eight Votes.

Unknown said...

Mickey, Summer, I am too in your league, they say I gave a very low dose (only 57 words), so no votes for me too. My homeopathic treatment to the word failed :(.
I thought 120 was the upper limit, so smaller the better.

Unknown said...

I am winning the next klash! 8-)

richa said...

Thanks neharika for the vote. and sob sob coz so many did not get it!!

Truth dude: i specially wrote this in colloquial hindi so u would get it...this is NOT pure hindi by a long shot...but a write up in bambiya...kya jhakaas idea hai beedu!! bole to ekdum mast!!

I have a couple of observations to make..many will not agree and I might rub a lot of people the wrong way but nothing personal:

1. people should only submit one entry..if they are using pseudonyms. lets not have 2 entries by the same person coz i am seeing a lot of underhand commenting going on using the psuedonyms.

2. It has been said here before that the language or rather the purity of it does not matter in the write up...well hard as it is for me to accept that I guess we have to give room to "artistic license" however when we are commenting can we try and write in a language the way its supposed to be and not butchering it? I mean the whole concept of writing is just not getting the idea across but to do it in a manner that preserves the essence of the language too.

let me know your thoughts on it

Missy Baba said...

Let me go backwards

Empress a.k.a Richa jee :P I agree 100000% with you, pseudonyms were fun in the beginning now they are getting kind of overwhelming... And the klash might just be bursting with faceless faced people?! but I thought/think that was ok in the beginning..because whoever they are, they do make an individual komment and follow the rules too...

I agree completely with the bit about the essence of the language being maintained.



Mickey and Summer.. you two retarded animals..!! :X

Thank you Mickey for the vote... :) I'm glad it made you think of your dadaji! This is by far the most personal klash I've ever written..

Your request about the word being EXCLUDED from the next lot of klashes is interesting, I however was planning a phrase instead of a word for the next klash...

Priyanka, thank you!! three bows from all three konfessioners!!

Genuine Fake, I think this is the Klassic sociological--mob thing... we oust the one who speaks right (first and then we mimik her/him?!) haha nonetheless, it is amusing!

TD... thank you for your vote...LOVE the nic.. I'm VERY surprised with your vote this week.. :) and pleasantly.

NM, Mandi and Duperman...thank you.. :)

Missy Baba said...

I'm not a state of mind to komment right now, just watched Kundu.. that poignant movie about the Dalai Lama.. pretty shaken.

But I will by early tomorrow morning.

Cheers,
Shinjini.

P.S. Judge, you're expected to total as well!! :D

Santonu said...

oho! i lost track of it because of so many comments, i will do that by tomorrow for sure...

Free Woman said...

That's some good feedback! Thanks for the encouragement. Word-limit- will try to do that next time. Britney Spears? Ouch!:) Last line I left as is because
1) Word limit
2) I thought people would know that its a repeat of the previous 'chorus' lines
3) I thought that it represented the unfinished conversation theme ;-)Perhaps I was getting too creative. Thanks again guys-appreciate the time everyone took to read and comment!

Santonu said...

Free woman: Welcome, i am a judge and cant consider u as you have crossed 120 words, i wish u had fit it in withinn 120, i liked this piece of work

Niharika: again welcome to klash, very dramatic, again more than 120 i am sory :)

Amandeep: I've been wondering where r u once we started reklashing, i was a gr8 fan of u r writing. As usual its a very nice piece, conversation with lot of depth. I liked the first line the most :) but again i think your last line is not suggestive its very direct which probably melowed the effect..

Duperman: Conversation, i found needs some thought about it, U have done really well in putting down the event but i felt the thrust is really not upon the "conversation"


Richa: i think u conversate very nicely and the rime is u r strenghth but i felt in this kind of conversation, it'd been gr8 if u had replied to the readers, mock conversation! job well done, just one thing not to u only but i had a feeling that many of us writes better in their own native languages, i dont know whether all of us know Hindi, hence i always would prefer to read a english version. but i would love to read your poems whenever is put here


Mandappa: remiscisng conversation, the structure of u r write up is always good, but i felt it would have been better if you had stressed upon the conversation more. Its very nice wrte up, but i cant say its the best

Truth dude: Too much, you have used an excellent conversation, i liked it. I had a quiry about the line .."this is not what you believe in, It's not what was taught to you.." there is a contradiction here, its beliving axioms which doesn't go together i guess, but its really good

Micky: U used a different idea all together, nice take. Although u r conversation wasnt convincing enough to Unsettle Karan the master in conversation :) never mind it was just a point i was keeping in mind to choose the best write up

Sarang: Really admirable effort, excellent build and i would say u have really used the word conversation as the thrust of the piece, gr8 take, was this word conversate necessary?

Lord sumer: Hey lord, good to see your "hill top" series continuing :) again this too added a dimension to your writing, but honestly speaking i didnt like the first line, such emotional conversation should start with somthing softer than this

Dok saab: Dok saab u have set you level slightly higher than this. I agree the relevance of the word is there withing the word limit, but if i have to shoose the best one probably you wont come this week as the best writer for me.

Wily wingfoot: Yes willy you written very well, its a potential best for me, but i just thought about something: the first few beutiful lines actually drew me away from the conversation, ur build up is good, but probably slighly more for 120 words

NM:Thats beautiful, too good

The Genuine Fake: I wished you had finished it within 120 words. This was one of the best klashes this week, thanks for making my job simpler:), very touchy conversations

Misanthrope: I must say u put in lots of effort in this, well i just wondered about a link, the agile eyballs and the "litlle change in the shine of his eyes" do the go together?

Priyanka: Very neatly written, but i just felt the sentence "They were identical twins" wasnt necessary.

Konfessioner Singh: Hey Shinjini finally back, well i felt not with a bang. I think you have really tried to push the word conversation into it, Was it needed? anyway u have won enough klashes i guess

Well now the toughest of the Jobs, i think this was on of the best klashes till now. with all our three pioneers of klash, klashing together for a change and with all the big klashers around, i hated this voting, i would have given 8 points to atleast 3 klashers but since i have only 1,
judges vote gose to : NM so he gets my 8 point

So situation is like this

NM : 14 points
Amandeep: 1point
Richa: 1 point
Mandappa: 1 point
Priyanka: 1 point
Willy wingfoot: 1 point
Konfsn. Sing: 2 points


congrats Nikhil

By the way please includ any point i have missed, it was too difficult this week. and one request please do somthing about the pseudonyms, i mean Anirudh felt bad when i mentioned it last week but see its difficult, u r writing in one name and kommenting in other is not easy at all to follow...

and a bow to all the klashers the standard of writing is too high

Sarang Mahajan said...

@ Santonu: Thanks man. Through my theme, I wanted to show how one short conversation can change the fate of many, but none except you understood and spoke about the usage of theme rather than other aspects. But I have no complaints, my genre is not general and I don't expect everyone to like my work. Wish I had more Rangans here! :D

NM: Hmm! You won.

Cyn1c said...

Mickey,

Such conversations do end when the wheels of another car roll through the same half hearted road and you're the one for whom the bell tolls and the feathers wave.

But we're invincible when we're the judges!

It's like a frivolous vapour that cannot be enjoyed. Memories are nothing but thoughts minus the truth.

Yours
Dogma Condemned

Cyn1c said...

Santonu,

It's been a while. I think the only person missing here is Katte? You might as well call it a re-union. I'm here to stay, this time.

Yours
Hour Glass

Mickey said...

@ Richa G. Whom do you suspect Richa Maam , of submitting 2 (or more ) entries? A person writing under a fake name may not necessarily be there with his/her real name too.

And writing using a pseudonym is a very acceptable thing in the literary world, so many big names are in fact only pen names. If you want I can give you a big list. You must have heard of Mary Westmacott (Agatha Christie) and Lewis Carroll (Charles Lutwidge Dodgson) just to name a few

Missy Baba said...

My komments this week.... -->

1. Free Woman-- You have captured the bit about wanting peace of mind (almost wrote piece of mind haha..how appropriate?!?!) after the 'relationship' is over and you've done it simply and as close to lyrical-perfection as one can be. Totally in your face. My only grouse is, this would've been cooler if it was just about lovers or just about those we have lost. Maybe that might have helped you contain the words too? But I can understand the desire to write, write, write and put it all in when you can...haha. Good job! :)

2. Neharika-- Welcome again! I somehow feel there is something amiss in this piece, it is funny when we Indians attempt the European.. but you have managed fairly well for the word! I'm looking forward to more from you!! :)

3. Aman-- The peacock feathers, the hammer and bell... very unsettling, I like the concept of 'telepathy' and i often wonder if its imagined or real.. God rest his soul in peace and may you hear/not hear the 'deep' however/whenever you want/don't want to.

4.Duperman-- Everybody either likes or hates supermen, I loved the idea of a silver costume..!! Fire/bird dropping proof? haha.. good. Just that saving the cat is a cliche.. someone with a silver costume would've looked cooler saving an acrobatic armadillo mid-air! Welkome to the klash!

5. Richa-- Empress, mazaaa aagaya!! makhiyon ki bhinbhinahat, bhin bhin.. kohniyon.. saala kameena kahin ka..haha.. bahut sahi! Loved it, bas jo "reet" hai usko change karna chaiye.... loved the end too! My winner this week!

6. Mandi-- Rung a bell this one, that the most special loves we've ever had were the ones we talked most in..verbally and wordly.. It's absolute mindfuck when that happens,I agree, nothing beats it. Good klash.

7. Truth Dude-- hahaha...dude, good one.. could see the two talking about doing it I assume?! Poor puppy faced guy and his high on morals girl... perfect scene. Loved the Fataaaakkk!

8. Mickey-- This was absolutely a brilliant idea, very well executed with the questions but the justified bit and the intro to Karan screwed it a bit, I loved the questions..I'm still laughing..can imagine a talking chimpanzee talking Karan Johar down hahaha.. what fun!

9.Sarang-- So well described..! I don't think the 'kicked his horse off' fits though.. there has to be a more appropriate line for that.

The grunt (in the end), the contemptuous look at the diminutive figure are all essential additions a careful writer makes while writing a conversation. Well done, in the technicals and the creation!

10. Lord Summer-- You and your romances uff!!! haha.. loved the "Hello there my lady" the most, I could almost hear a horsey neighing !!!

11. Dok Saab-- Not your usual i'm afraid :(, but I loved the rhythm in--
When she was
With me
On that bench
Under the tree
In that park

Unknown said...

Kongrats NM You won the krown very konvincingly :).
Well Now thats we know the winner a day before, kan we have the new word earlier than the scheduled time, will give amateur like me some extra time to think.
we kan keep on kongratulating him throughout the week :)

Missy Baba said...

Contd.

12. Willy-- I didn't understand this?!!!!!!

13. NM-- Beautiful, more beautiful than anything you've written about love and romance. This indeed is one of your most heartbreakingly innocent pieces, will always stand out in my mind. Kongrats!!! :)

14. GF-- Sad.. very. I loved your last line most. I wonder if I got this wrong..but is it about a dying mother and her husband, wondering if their daughter will understand? or is it the other way round?

15. Misanthrope-- The big words take away your rhythm, I began to concentrate on them instead of what you were saying.. like three big red beads in a glass of water! But well done.. :) Thank you also, for sharing the links to your poems on orkut..we're glad to have you on the klash.. ;)

16. Priyanka -- Lovely idea, I was just waiting for someone to come up with a mad one on one-sided conversations, this wasn't mad.. but it was indeed true.. not about the identical twins details but about sharing and all that.. very peaceful... :)

Unknown said...

and kursing him too, if he gives a tough word. (thats makes 97th komment, where are you sarang, mickey , summer, kome hit the hundredth )

Missy Baba said...

About Pseudonyms, I have no problem with those, it adds to the charm of the klash.

I however am getting a little freaked out about multiple entries by one person ...(are those happening?? I can't make out!)

truthdude said...

Richa G. Jee
:)
I'm glad you liked the idea of Klash an Bambaiyya Hindi, but like Sarang said...please continue writing. The hindi in english, makes me want to just skip over, because -
1. it takes too much effort
2. my Hindi isn't that good anyway..it's strictly enough to converse in (no pun intended).
That's not to say I don't like what you write. Just my fault on the language.

Missy B.
Well I was completely blown away by your writing this week. I never got to spend much time with my Dadaji's, but I'd love to have done so.
This week your writing surprised me because it had a depth which I hadn't seen before. That and it was so lucid!
Your piece in this Klash showed me a beautiful aspect of you. I appreciate and cherish! Thank you.

All the Klashers
Thank you all for your comments. The Klash is fun because of the effort we put into our writing. The komments we make and get, are the stuff the makes us better.
As an individual I've always valued dissent, even if it's dissent against me. Because it's the principle of it which needs to be upheld.
As a Klasher I've come to realise it's not always easy to accept this. But I have also learned to accept it..after all who understands rejection better than a lover and a writer.
That and the Klash is so much about perspective. Each entry here, good or bad, is a 'take' which is so different. It opens my perspective of what writers can achieve and what people are (some are animals ;) and some are lords but mostly they are just beautiful). Rock on!

truthdude said...

100th and cheers to all you beautiful people!! :)

malted socktail said...

@genuine fake
regarding your komments

the first one you pointed out. is a writing style. almost like stoccato. the pauses inbetween are to give an added effect. writing licence.
the second however i do agree, i think it either needs a comma or an apostrophe. my mistake and apologies.

Priyanka said...

Kongrats NM...!! So can we have the word now..?? :)

And the weather is sooooooooo beautiful here in Lucknow...anyone up for chai and pakoras..?? ;)

Unknown said...

@ Shinjini
Pseudonyms are ok with me too, but here in klash the problem arises when one posts as Amandeep and then komments as Chaos, or when willy komments as rangan and Neharika as nutcase.
well if Mickey, or Summer write there klash and komments as mickey/Summer, where is the problem then?

Unknown said...

And who says Summer is my pswudoname?

Mickey said...

How true, Lord Summer !!,
Dok Saab may be a pseudonym for some Manoj Singh as can be seen from his blogger profile,
but not mickey, thats the name I was given by my mother, all my friends call me mickey, even Jane kalls me Mickey .

Santonu said...

Micky what Dok saab said is right, my problem is not with the Pseudonyms, they are absolutely fine, i know Micky and i know Dok Saab but using multiple pseudonym is a problem, I just want to figure out who it is? just to understand their way of talking thats all. completely agree with u Dok Saab,

Free Woman said...
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NM said...

@Everybody
Thanks a lot.

Cyn1c said...

@All

I do not post as Amandeep Parmar. It's the name on my Gmail account and that's where I mail it from. to. My own blog has 'Chaos' written all over it.

Blogspot.com saves the cookie(s) and identifies the tag when a blogger returns to post on his/her blog or any other blog on blogspot.com. Hence, the Chaos pseudonym.

You're most welcome to post my entries under 'Chaos' and I hope that would settle things.

Yours
Browser

Cyn1c said...

Singh,

Two things that I spotted:

1.You're still not in a good mood.
2.You forced yourself to write.


Yours
Delay Patch

Unknown said...

Chaotic Pseudonym,

Singh Who?
Konfessioner Singh or Manoj Singh !
1) The Mood Swings.....
2) That gives force to my writings

Yours

Temperamental

Missy Baba said...

I'll change it to Chaos.

1. Yes.
2. Yes.

Dok Saab, I think he meant me.

Yours,

Definitely Yes.

malted socktail said...

knock knock !!
sorry for the late reaction...

but we have already had the word "magic" for klash once???

???
???
???

Unknown said...

I still have that take saved on my blog :)
but thought it would be fun writing another. there are so many new ppl who were not there then.

Unknown said...

The faceless are winning the poll with absolute majority

NM said...

@ Mandi, Dok Saab, everyone else

Too much work forces me to be forgetful. Anyways, the word magic was on the old Klash and not on the new one. Lets give it one more shot. Am sure all of us can write on magic, more than once.

This too, because its late to change the word and some people mightve started writing their klashes.

Apologies from me. My mistake.

The word is
Magic

Free Woman said...

Hi- I think the poll question is not clear. It should be - "Do you want to know who your fellow klashers are". I want to use my pseudonym (vote=Yes in the current poll), but I don't mind if people know that I am Seema Kashyap (poll=Yes in the poll I'm suggesting). Sorry if its a late suggestion. I wonder of a pahaad is being made of a molehill. I'll let you folks decide.

Missy Baba said...

I didnt realize Magic had already been done...sorry NM, I should've checked!!! :(

But oh well...

And yes, well..my klash is ready haha.

and maybe we are overreacting..I'm chucking it. I think it's cool having the faceless people because at least I know them all, Seema don't worry about it. The Konfessioners do screen who participates... :) all the "animals" here are good people we all know.. so no worries. But now that the Klash is heating up a bit and as Santonu said..we are getting a bit noisy..lets calm down and be nice too?! lol.

Cheers,
Shinjini.

Cyn1c said...

I may not be able to participate in this Klash coz I'd be gone for a week.

I'll see you all around.

Yours
Travel Agent

Mickey said...

May be you need a Time-turner
Many of us are already using to live our dual lives!
Yours

Ministry of Magic

Missy Baba said...

oh no..!

Mickey.. you got an extra timeturner on you buddy?!

Yours,
I-know-where-Jane-is.