Magic
1. | the art of producing illusions as entertainment by the use of sleight of hand, deceptive devices, etc.; legerdemain; conjuring: to pull a rabbit out of a hat by magic. |
2. | the art of producing a desired effect or result through the use of incantation or various other techniques that presumably assure human control of supernatural agencies or the forces of nature. |
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Genuine Fake (113)
The hospital was in a state of chaos that afternoon. Although asleep on the wardroom bed,Nina's subconscience was in an overdrive. Memories of her unhappy married life flashed back and forth. Particularly of that morose night..
"We cannot afford it,Nina,whatabout our aspirations?"asked Shantanu.
"Luxuries can come by anytime,Shaan; moments like these come once in a lifetime!" answered she.
"Ohh yes,for you!" said he and stomped out...
Eight months of struggle had passed since then. Yet everything seemed right today..
"Congratulations for the baby boy", whispered the nurse. Nina woke up to see the baby and a sorry Shaan holding him.
The magic of a new life had just unfolded itself.
And thereafter,Happiness prevailed.
Willy Wingfoot (116)
My eyes went blind with tears
Of not pain
Of not loss
Neither joy
Nor fear
But by the memory of those years
Clinging to the tip of my father's robe,
Wandering around farms,
Upon yellow hills,
Through sea and heavy mist.
On and On.
Singing our own song.
When a secret sip of his mead,
Or to kill a game by his blade,
Were the innocent dreams i relished to aim.
Tonight,
When sorrow becomes my shadow,
And grief makes it hard to swallow.
A walk down the line,
Of a life left so far behind,
Feels like heavenly dew,
flowing down the desert of my throat.
Such is the MAGIC,
My childhood has bestowed.
Agnisen Chauhan (120)
"Mr. Minella. Constable John saw you shoot Burt Carlson. He caught you in the corridor without a gun or bloodstains on you or on the crime scene. You couldn't have swept all of'em stains so swiftly! No windows in the crime scene room. Dunno what to say, but I'd have to let you go for now. But you would've to drop down here for some paperwork later this week."
"I have a plane to catch in twenty minutes. Goodbye."
Two hours later, Inspector Harte gets a fax for Mr. Minella's face identification from the US Crime Records Database.
Closest match: Carl Vajic,
Record Backup: Newspaper Ad - "Vajic's Magic…. Magician Vagic's vanishing train act …."
"There all along!!"
Truth Dude (120)
'Ganapati Bappa Morya, Mangal Moorti Morya, Ganapati Bappa Morya, Mangal Moorti Morya...'the hypnotic chant continued to reverberate in the tiny hall.
Half closed eyes, the power of belief, reverence and electrified atmosphere cramped the room amidst the already huddled figures. A few were pacing rapidly in the meager space they had.
Already, the heart beats were heard across the open country.
Already, people clasped their hands tightly…oh so tightly.
'Wwiiiiiiiiikkkkkkiiiiiiiiittttttttttt', somebody screamed.
Prayers and hopes. Aspirations and dreams. All rolled together.
A billion people stood, sat rooted.
Sweat and tears.
And then it happened.
A spell was cast.
A hush fell.
A collective gasp.
And then…
And then…
And then…
A nation erupted whipped itself into frenzy!
Sheer magic…Indiyaaaaaaaaaaaaaahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh!!!
Yeeeehaaaa!
Dok Saab (120)
He was waiting on the stage for curtains to rise. Son of Peecee Sorcerer, the greatest magician of
"How many tickets we sold for this show, Maya"
"Only three rows have been sold, Indroneel"
Aimlessly he pointed his wand towards a wooden cage.
"We can't survive long like this"
"I'll have to find some other job"
Box office clerk of Frolic Cinemas was busy counting notes.
"Sorry, the show is houseful for the weekend"
"SRK's magic!!, it never fails"
"Give ten tickets for Monday matinée then"
Sarang Mahajan (119)
The sun was there by a branch hung
And thunders, inside a teapot rung
Seven blue seas lived in a bottle corked
Moon was inside a pocket parked
Deep, dense jungles grew in a rabbit’s hole
And all the stars twinkled in a cat’s milk bowl
In one stupid matchbox, all the storms would rage
Snowy, grey mountains were locked in a birdcage
Dark clouds gathered in an ironsmith’s nook
Rainbows were dangled by a nearby hook
Just then, I woke up, in my smooth, warm bed
‘A stupid dream of magic,’ with a shake of head I said
But before I slept back, something queer caught my eye
Just above my head, there was a cloud sailing by
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Neharika (112)
His one touch, flowers bloomed out of nothingness;
One wave of the wand, a million stars burst on the horizon;
Each fold of his velvet cloak,concealed a plethora of
fantasies,enchantments,dreams and wonders;
He cast spells and every wish was fulfilled;
He built a castle in the land of pixies,mermaids,unicorns and fairies galore.
As it turned into Gahenna,she asked the denizen of Utopia
When did the magic end.. of love.. of hope.. of life
When did he decide to walk away
As her vision blurred and darkness engulfed all..
The divorce papers slid from one hand and life from another..
The bottle of magic portion rolled on the floor, the label said "poison".
Mandappa KC (116)
The summary of the last seven years of my life – magical.
The details would take me seven times the time. Each second. Each moment. Each breath. Each everything. Everything with her, about her and together.
She tugged at my heart with heaven-sent harp strings. Her words, honey coated dewdrops on my now sugar coated mind. Like an angel kissed life I lived with her.
Then she left. Without a trace. It nearly killed me but it was worth it. And I knew her secret all along. All that happiness, the otherworldly love. I knew her secret. She never slipped up, but I caught on from the first day when she said "Hi, my name is Maya."
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Mickey the Monkey (120)
I longed for Jane at two in the night.
How to reach her, that was my plight.
Couldn't use magic outside hogwarts, I knew.
Desire overtook reason, out my wand I drew.
A big monkey I transfigured to, jumping on the trees.
Into her room I entered, leaving behind all my worries.
Scared at first, she recognized my voice.
I hugged and kissed the lady of my choice.
In came her mother hearing the jangle.
I jumped out, my wand on the table.
"Whom were you talking", she scolded her.
"What's that?" she took my wand with her.
Since then I am hanging near her house, on the tree.
God! When will I get my wand back and be free.
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Priyanka Acharya (120)
A pair of soothing hands, lots of loving kisses, warm hugs as and when required, sometimes, even when not required, and a secret magic ingredient – the perfect recipe to feel well. Whenever I have been sick or simply put down by the troubles of life, this potion has cheered me. Brewed to perfection, by my parents and siblings, even my friends, - for all my twenty five years of decadent life. And now that I move on to a different and new, yet exciting life, a thought crosses my mind, ‘Would I still get it?’ – and my heart answers, “yes, because the secret ingredient is the magic of love”, and I know it’ll just get better and better with time.
GS Virmani (181)
"magic is in mind, its our imagination that something is inexplicable,But there is nothing in this world which happens without a reason.Just we have to find the reason and say 'Eureka Eureka'.Its just our effort,our deeds,our plans, our projection which works..'no MAGIC works'..said the new CEO ,Pritish at opening speech to his board of directors and staff.
Pritish was pretty happy with the recent developments in his life.he was recently promoted to the post with bouquet of all luxuries,got news his wife Smita is an expectant,his younger brother got H1B visa,share market in boom and all investments doubled.
To celebrate there was a little lawn party at his place in evening where among guest and friends there was be a small show of a clown and a magician.Smita herself managed the liquor and food menu for the party.the party was great untill she started with labour pain and was brought to hospital.
Smita's excessive bleeding and being her anaemic brought her soon into 'danger' phase. Shortage of her blood group type made conditions worst.
Pritish was praying for a 'magic' .
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Konfessioner Singh (118)
I shoot blue butterflies
with noiseless firecrackers.
They flutter with purple pigeons
under a yellow starred
black velvet ink sky
between those red fur clouds;
And there’s this supernatural feel…
The dancing bear that escaped
sits next to me,
with his paw wrapped
in a bloody bandage.
His eyes are on the trapeze artist,
she’s waving him farewell.
a black kohl tear
rolls down
a white powdered cheek;
And he is discovered…
By the monkey:
with a stolen monocle,
and an old grudge;
selling toke,
for free backrubs.
And I hear--
that the canons were burgled
for bodies,
of dead human cannon supermen
by blind clowns without knees
searching, searching.
What magic,
at the Circus of the Absurd.
64 comments:
@Konfessioner Singh
I do wish to Komment....n Vote...
Sorry about the alterations....if you still think it possible to make.
I've mailed,Scraped...n Kommented.... :)
Wonder Y Nm's not here??!!
Sorry for the inconvienience.
Wil be back....Later,if not soon.
A New Klash uploaded is always a much awaited moment for me. But this time it was a disappointment, with so many people missing, NM, Chaos, Free Woman, Lord Summer, Misanthrope, Santonu, Duperman and Richa Jee(our Judge this time).
Poor Willy is there but has opted to remain out of the kompetetion.
Anyways, we have some very nice interpretation of the word.
I have always been enamoured with Magic. during my childhood , there was a magician, Gogia Pasha, and his mantra, Gilli gilli chhoo. It was only when i grew up that I knew, there is no such thing as magic, its all a trick.
But then there is magic in so many forms around us.
Like my patients say I have a magic touch, just touch there child and they get cured. thats faith!
Or like my wife's magic touch, just one touch of her turns even a simple daal roti so tasty!
No,sir Dok...
A change of mind...
I've asked MAM.Singh 2 include me too...and am still waitin 4 a rep...
I should be IN...
Cya
There was so much talk about psuedonyms, that most of them are not seen around this time .
Without Lord Summer's escapdes with the lady Mare on the smelly hilltop, the klash looks inkomplete.
I think you humans are taking komments too seriously, why not you ,as your people say Dil pe mut le yaar .
Why not let any one send as many takes as he kan write, as long as he has the time to write and is writing sensibly.
hello hello...just got back home after a week of sheer revelry!! am so bone tired that had to take one more day off from work!!
the Klash is as "magical" as always and though there are few Klashers missing the ones who wrote have been a joy to read!!
Doc Saab: i am not missing..i could not write as i am the ahem ahem "judge" :)
Mickey: the reason we want one entry from one person is coz everyone is taking out time to comment and vote and judge. I think it only fair that one person receive one critique only.
my comments and votes shall follow once people start voting...
made the changes Rangan!
Yes Dok Saab..I'm missin the aktive lot too! But 11 entries isn't bad..!
Mickey-- Summer khafaa hai! :D
Empress-- Apun bola tu meri laila.. :D haha.. :)
Welkome Agnisen and GS I HOPE you VOTE!
Are non-entrants expected to komment?
Dok Saab- I wanted to write but was really busy this week with guests etc, and my mind was a blank on Sunday after they left :-(
I 2nd Mickey's sentiments- I hope the debate did not piss people off- no offense was meant to anybody, and none was taken
Free Woman..you're allowed to komment.!! no votes though.. :)
Nobody is pissed off haha don't worry!!! :) I'll whop their arses if they get pissed off!!! :D
Why are so many people missing? And why is Summer Khafa? Why did Rangan decide not to compete and then decide against that decison? Why is Konfessionar Singh so angry with Chaos and Rangan? And which debate was supposed to offend Mickey, the monkey (thanks to whom for missing me)?
So many questions, answer only one, Humdurd's tonic Chinkara! :-)
@ Mickey: This place is not meant for us animals, brother monkey. Humans smell humans in us. They think we might be the hidden bad ones! :-(
I kan understand Lord Summer (where atr thou?)
They have bad memories about our brethren, remember that wolf who dressed as granny and tried to savour (or is devour the korrect word) Little Red Riding hood.
hmmm why are komments so slow in coming??? karo karo komment karo so I can also discharge my duty that of counting votes and kommenting!!! all await the Judgment Day muuuuuaaaahahaha (evil laughter)
no one venturing to komment first, Is is the fear of a backlash
Genuine Fake...So Shantanu(is the name inspired by someone we know) has become the proud daddy!! but why was he sorry holding the child?
Willy Wingfoot...your article reminds me of my childhood days, when I used to cling to my Dads Tail and go from one forest to the other
Agnisen Chauhan...No window in the Krime scene room, then how did konstable John saw Mr Milella shoot!!
Truth Dude...foolish game, one billion people watching one foolish player scooping the ball to defeat. one billion people watching eleven exhausted, grumping players standing on an open double decker,waiting for the ordeal to end. And no one rejoicing over the victory of another person winning world chess championship. chuk de India! Its Magic
Dok Saab...Iff I could only get his wand when he decides to give up magic.
Sarang Mahajan...True Sir , Magic is just a state of dream induced by the magician. Was it the raindrops which woke you up.
Neharika...when dreams shatter and enchantments break, reality sometimes is killing. But one must realise that magic never lasts always, charms break in the end. Good take.
Mandappa KC...I know Maya the enchantress. thats why I have decided to go to Himalayas the day i get my wand back.
Mickey the Monkey...waiting for someone from the ministry of magic to undone the charm :(
Priyanka Acharya...We know you are entering into a magical phase of your life PA, just surrender to His magic, your next 50 years will be more blessed than your past 25.
GS Virmani...had you written 60 less words my vote would have been your GSV
Konfessioner Singh...Circus of the Absurd Great imagination, reminds me of one of your another poem Cooked Rainbow meaning of which has eluded me till today.
hello everyone here...
every participant is EXPECTED(treat it compulsary, as per konfessioner singh's dictionary, or u will let her make more 'prudent' decisions') to Komment on everyone's work and choose their winner.
anyways(should i use 'Hence' )my komments follows ...
Genuine Fake-memories of nina's unhappy married life were flashing back and forth in her subconcious,and shaan was 'sorry' holding the new born baby..still the magic of new born made happiness prevailed...! ok i agree it is a magic then...:)
Willy Wingfoot- "a walk down the line, of a life left so far behind." remembrance is not 'magical', otherwise nice....:)
Agnisen Chauhan- Johnny Gaddar...:) achha hai... i have complaints with U.S police that why they let go an accused so easily,after having an eyewitness, they must have waited for two hours...our indian police is better in keeping such ethics..:) i guess the reason; 'time is money' for U.S; ..
Truth Dude- True....that is kricket in indiaaaa.....but excitement is magic?..yeaaaah sometimes...:)
Dok Saab- "royal look in tattered robes and faded turban"..ur magic worked, it didnt failed..:)
Sarang Mahajan- even after a dream of magic ,'just above my head a cloud was sailing by' ...now this is magic...:)
Neharika- Do we have divorce in utopia also...!! a take which could be magical...:)
Mandappa KC- u 'already know' the secret of maya...:), Satrangi re...
Mickey the monkey- what will you do when u get your wand back..
turn yourself human or make jane monkey...:) u want to be free!! from what? whom ?..:)
Priyanka Acharaya- depiction of a speculation..then a deduction without deliberation and rationalization....cos the heart says 'yes, the secret ingredient is magic of love'.very true,:) still i get two synonyms at one place...magic and love :)..and i think the word this week was magic only..:)
Konfessioner Singh- blue, purple,yellow,black, red, white..a kaleidoscope of colors..and yes i truly pay homage to your superstars and detrix (who not only die before 7 seconds of fame but under the 120 word limit of KnK: ) )
thank you everyone for making me learn from you while kommenting....:)
and finally there is a ceremony to vote so my vote goes to Sarang Mahajan.
Komrades! Sat sri akal!! Apologies because this will be very brief..leaving today (till the 15th) for a family holiday to Srinagar and Leh!:)
Ok komments---->
1. GF-- I wonder why your klashes find inspiration from hospitals? just like mine are usually about Muslim women and Kashmir as Dok Saab once observed.. it's nice.. I liked your piece, but it didn't seem to go with magic..except maybe the birth of the child.. but it was very well written.. :)
2. Willy-- You have written more magical pieces than this, maybe the theme tempted you! I love your imagination, I imagine the fatherfigure here to be quite like Prospero. I particularly liked--Secret sip of mead.
3.Agnisen-- Welcome! Crime-Thriller!There's a first for the klash..haha.. I loved Vajic's magic! But the beginning didn't do much for me... :( Such a good attempt though!!! :)
4. Truth Dude-- One word-- Winner! LOVELY!
5. Dok Saab-- kudos for writing about Pee Cee, isn't his daughter/grand daughter a magician too?!! What's the magik without a magician!!! :) Fresh take!
6. Sarang-- SO VIVID! I loved this.. especially the bit about the cat's bowl.. the cat being synonymous is magik of course..no broomsticks and witches anyone?! Absolutely stunning first 2 stanzas..! :)
7. Neharika-- I guess you meant magic potion! Not bad at all... (does anyone remember Getaxfix's magic potion from Asterix and Obelix!!!?!)I liked the image of the divorce papers slipping from one hand and life from the other..but who gave her the poison/or did she take it?!
8. Mickey--- The cool thing about this is, it's been written like a monkey too haha.. Now we know how you became a monkey.. I liked the addition of "jangle" hahaha.
9. Priyanka-- Our dear komrade-bride-to-be, my heart swells each time I read your klashes haha seriously..sounds corny but it's true.. :) they all have the fragrance of hope and dreams..
10. GSV-- Not bad, better than the last attempt! but why'd you go overboard with the words? and it would have been cool even if it ended at his life being so good...everything being perfect and him wondering about the magic of it all...:)
MANDI!! I believe I missed you haha..sorry! Ok here goes--- The name does it all, the first amazingly sappy parts made me squirm because that's so unlike you..all honey and cherries and butterflies.. but 'Maya' did the trick, if this is real..hope she reads it!! :)
Cheers all.. happy klashing...I shall miss you!! :(
Konfessioner Singh.
hmmm have never waited for the komments so eagerly as am doing right now!!!
Princess I shall miss you but then again I am sure u r going to bring back some wonderful exotic gifts for me from the land of snow and Indus...if u get a chance do some river rafting there..Indus is a lovely river to do it...wild and romantic :)
so far:
sarang 1 vote
truth Dude 1 vote
mickey who did u vote for??
Sorry Richa Maam
My Vote to the Genuine Fake
Its magical how a child can bring back the parents together !
So its-
sarang 1 vote
truth Dude 1 vote
GF 1 vote
Genuine Fake:
Good take!But lacking in content...may be,you could add spice a bit,... would taste good!!!
Agnisen:
"Of'em", "Donno".Tricky words,ai'nt they??
Good first take,lol....n WELKOME to Klash.Its good to see a start,a middle n an END,all within 120...n a few MAGICAL words... :)
Truth Dude:
Sounds and Smells like a Pepsi ad.... :)
But MAGIC it is....wonderful.
Dok Saab:
True...very true.Such is the world we live in where even entertainment is restricted to,but the Famous.
Very creative take,sir."SRK's magic"-The word's been there for about as long as a decade....yet did not bother to strike me.Gr8.
Sarang:
The best of yours....!
Flawless...sir.
Neharika:
Each line is The-Best by its own...If first half seemed like Wizard of Oz,the second half brought in reality.But i wish you had carried on with the fantasy part and ended on a Magical note...
"The divorce papers slid from one hand and life from another..
The bottle of magic portion rolled on the floor, the label said "poison".
But this is KOOL too....
Mandappa:
Pretty nice....but the end is'nt as good as it could have been.Not that i can suggest you better...its just...the build-up was strong....and it required a strong Tail.
Mickey:
Poor Boy.Why dont you pay a visit to Mr.Ollivander.May be he could help you on the issue.
But for now....Good work,APE!!!
Priyanka:
A simple take on Magic,mam.Feels good....but nothing more.
GS.Virmani:
Very nice story...but 181???You did'nt bother about it,i may safely assume.A good one,nontheless.
Konfessioner Singh:
Ow!What are YOU,in the Circus of the ABSURD,mam???
Liked it to the core.was tough to imagine the situation....but when i succeded in doing so(on the 6th read)....its all so cool.
n Finally-The vote.....to sir,SARANG
@gs
No sir,remembrance is not magical....
One more read of mine would assure you,that its not THAT which is compared with being Magical...
Its the power within those Memories....to heal when in sorrow....is how i thought to project my words towards MAGIC. :)
@Summer
I did'nt know Mam.Singh was angry with ME???!!!!
Is she...?
or...
@Konfessioner Singh
ARE you,mam???
N y 'O' y am i being left out when the talk's about animals???
Summer and Mickey ai'nt jus the TWO here...!!!
well before i komment, i most say the kuality of klashes were brilliant tho numbers are fewer...the stories here are brilliant and honestly i did feel lack...anywyas, sorry for the delay in komments, but had personal problems....
@will wingfoot -- is this from ure life or fictional..cuz it seems to me u grew up in the hills?? if so, then high five or whatever they do, cuz uve got another mountain boy in me....
@mickey--did u do rounds of the forests too when u were young?
Writing 120 words is child’s play kompared to kommenting upon eleven fellow konfectioners.
Genuine Fake--Your second klash in a hospital setup! Have you ever seen a baby being born, GF? It’s almost magical when she takes the first gasp of air, and cries. He is the greatest Magician of all. Very nicely written, but Magik is not the strongest feeling in your write-up, I think so.
Willy Wingfoot-- I liked your poem, very nostalgic for me. So many memories of my dad became fresh. I used to accompany him, at four in the morning, to hunt Siberian birds, which thronged our village lake during winters. Now he is gone, and the birds don’t come anymore. Very nice poem, but could not associate it with magik.
Agnisen Chauhan--Welkom Agnisen, your first attempt in klash, and you did not kross the 120 barrier, that’s good. Looks like a scene from some Hollywood movie, Magician kommiting murder and wiping off the evidence magically. Good first attempt.
Truth Dude--India winning world cup, nothing less than a magik! That last katch was in fakt unbelievable, sheer magik, a result of so many prayers. Good thinking Dude, and for a change, no reference to the erotic this time :)
Dok Saab-- This is my second klash on Magik. In the Klash pratham I wrote about pitiable condition of road side performers. But I felt, even bigger magicians are having tough times in India.
Sarang Mahajan--looks more like a take on surreal though the last para gives an interesting twist to the dream. :)
Neharika--too much of a magik here, a magicians wife, failed magik of love, and magik potion which takes life. Very Imaginative!
Mandappa KC--once again memories of a past love from you, Mandappa :). Your take on conversation was also about same. But very true, Maya is the biggest cheat (maya maha Thagini, hum jaani)
Mickey the Monkey--I don’t think Jane will let you get that wand back, Mickey, for she loves you the way you are, a cute lil Monkey. Nice rhyming this time, are you taking lessons from Lord Summer (seems he has not returned from that smelly hilltop)
Priyanka Acharya--Magik of Love!!! I wish the magik you will witness now will surpass all your expectations.
GS Virmani--Great take on the word Mr. Virmani (can we not be a little more informal, I mean what would have your friends kalled you) its true, magik is in our minds. We know magic is not true, but wish it was. Whenever things are beyond our kontrol, how we wish things kould get right by some magik. Had you said this in 120 words GSV (I hope that sounds better than Mr. Virmani)
Konfessioner Singh--This level of poetry only you kan write! But like sarang, here too I feel the feel I get is of surrealism, may be what’s magical is surreal too, what do you think?
My Vote --
I liked the takes of Willy (for such a nostalgic poem), Mickey (he is improving), Agnisen (very dramatic take), GSV (for the truest interpretation of the word) and Konfessioner Singh (for the lovely poem she has kreated, such imagination only she kan do that)
But my vote goes to Priyanka (magic of love is the only magic which is real, no sleigh of hands, no tricks, and can be performed by any one)
Hi All
this is just to help our lovely Judge Sahiba (I hope this effort of mine will not influence her judgment )
Votes so far
sarang 2 vote
truth Dude 1 vote
GF 1 vote
Priyanka 1 vote
and I have a query, if Konfessioner Singh is still in town and listening.
Last weeks winner (NM Sir) did not participate in this weeks klash, so what will happen to his two votes, can he still vote ?
awrite time to go !!
Genuine fake: mixed emotion more than magial.. think your last sentence wasnt good at delivering the punch.
Willy: really like this because i relate to it. letme guess tho, u havent shown or told your dad these emotions. these kinda feelings is something i close dear. so i really enoyed it .
agnisia: brilliant start to your kareer in klashing. hollywoodish and i think i've seen it before. but great start none the less.
Truth Dude: i too wanted to kapture the magic of the victory. it really was something to it. the eletricity and the patriotism as i have never witnessed before. but i dont think you captured it as brilliantly. the end shouldve been better.or the usage of magic.
Dok Saab: sad but true. nice but not there :)
Saraang: dint know you excelled in poetry too. nice. but like someone mentioned, the use of magic couldve been better
Neharika: lovely. smooth. silk. sweet. vocabulary is impressive.
Mickey the monkey: hmmm you always seem to be riding on wahts popular. koffee with karan. harry potter and hogwarts. nice effort tho.
Priyanka: a great take. a great write. a watered down ending. keep the energy up, even through the end.
GSV: your thoughts are there. you have greater potential. though i do recommend and Wren and Martin to excel.
K Singh: poetry as always. u excel. A nice thought. but you have dwelled more on the writing or crafting, and less to the content itself. so it comes out as ure writing is brilliant, tho the thoughts maybe a lil befuddled. i maybe wrong, but its my opinion :)
im so keen on going with willy cuz i relate to it dearly, but i think ill give this one to
Neharika
she ahs outmatched and outclassed herself more than anyone else.
MY WINNER: NEHARIKA
how does one make it bold???
@ All:
Sorry guys... too much work. Kant Klash. But I have gone through all the nice looking takes and shall vote soon.
@ Mickey: The Konfessioners (shin-shin, me and Sarang HAVE to vote everytime irrespective of us being there.
So my two pointer is valid. Will vote in sometime!
Cheers.
Ok, here are the komments:
The Genuine Fake: Touching and very well penned! Also a different approach to the word. Commendable!
Rangan: You are slowly getting a fan in me.
Clinging to the tip of my father's robe,
Wandering around farms,
Upon yellow hills,
Through sea and heavy mist.
On and On.
Singing our own song.
Being a filmmaker, this particular bit enticed me terrifically. Nice visuals. Well done!
Agnisen: Welkome to the Klash mate! This is definitely a different approach to the word but i somehow feel that it isnt really the theme of the piece. Well written though!
Truth Dude: Magical! Very relatable..! Nice work, dude!
Dok Saab: I am a self konfessed Shahrukh Khan fanatic. And frankly, nothing else in your article other than the end worked for me. It seems like a forced act (no pun intended) Nicely written though.
Sarang: Pure Magic! Brilliant!
Neharika: Swift and smooth switch! Works in a big way... I am a fan, ma'am.
Mandi: You are my favorite klasher Mandi... And this is just another feather to your cap..! Nice take!
Mickey: Finally, monkey... there's an article from you which i liked! Funny and cool, I like it! :D
Priyanka: Beautiful!
G.S. Virmani: The word limit sir. Nice take otherwise.
Shin-Shin: Amazingly written. Its tough to get in the first go, but it does make a wonderful read! Nice work, Konfessioner!
This was a very high quality klash. All articles were nice and I had a tough time choosing a winner as i was torn between Rangan, Sarang, Priyanka, Mandi and GF.
However, taking into consideration the relevance of the world and approach, my vote goes to...
SARANG
Thank you...thank you...thank you all....for the nice words... ;-)
Now I kommence with my komments.. :-)
Genuine Fake: Eventually the magic of new life drives away all the sorrows and struggles..but it seems its out of some bollywood movie...!! Nice try though..!!
Willy Wingfoot: Willy the poem is absolutely fab...but I couldn't get the lines about A walk down the line,
Of a life left so far behind,
Agnisen Chauhan: Welkome to the klash Mr. AC...!! :-) Nice take here...but straight out from a Hollywood 70's movie...
Truth Dude: Yes, we live in a nation where cricket is synonymous with religion :-) In fact its magic is more than the religion...!! Gud one..!!
Dok Saab: Fantastic Dok saab...an era gone by...tats wat happens..!! I sometimes think about the times when I used to go watch circuses and theatre shows...now...the movie magic has taken over..
Sarang Mahajan: The magic of a dream...beautiful.. :-)
Neharika: Hmm..nice..but tragic...the magic is missing..
Mandappa KC: A magical life gone by..?? But the remembrances live forever...tats magic..
Mickey the Monkey: Hey Mickey..damn funny.. :-)) In case you havent got ur wand back...you can have mine.. ;-) Maybe it'll transfigure you into an orangutan (my fave animal) :-)) Nice one..
Priyanka Acharya: Me..moi..no komments.. ;-))
GS Virmani: Why do the bad things happen when life is beautiful? Magic and miracles..do happen though..!! Shud've stuck to the word limit...and i mite have just voted for you.. ;-)
Konfessioner Singh: Beautiful lady...moved me a lot...just like ur klashes always do.. ;-) Cud've made it happy and romantic though..but I guess...am in that phase where I always want love..romance..and happiness.. ;-)
My vote goes to: Dok Saab
every one liking what Mickey writes but no one giving Mickey Vote :(
And whats this I_Scratch_your_back_you_scratch_my_back going on between Doksaab and priyanka ???
@ Mickey...
C'mere Mickey...I'll scratch ur back too....provided u dont have any fleas...!! ;-)
And hey...I was going to write that its not a mutual admiration klub (in ur words I-Scratch-your-back-you-scratch-my-back) between me and Dok Saab...but I thot it wud sound too korny... :-D But I have to resort to it now...!! :-) Guess we both believe that love is the only magical power..and didnt Dumbledore too say that...?? I thought you knew it...studying at Hogwarts...
Always related magic to that special ingredient that makes the difference in a dish.. for a long time i wondered why tea :esentially a simple mixture of just 4 ,tasted different every time ,with every person ! is it really the magic in the hand of the maker or magic of the company (tere sang ek simple se coffee bhi kick deti hai !)...whatever it is ,it was captured beautifully in the klashes.
I dont know how well i comprehend the klashes ,so help me out in identifying the ingredient and excuse me if i got it totally wrong !
Genuine Fake: loved the depth and the magical way that innocence transformed a marriage. ingredient : child ?
Willy Wingfoot: usally whenever i have looked at a son and father from a distance i feel both the parties are incapable of any sensitivity and sentiments.men n their egos !ur blog enlightened my twilight thinking (which is partial darkness and partial light )so its a thank you for the lovely take.
ingredient :reverie?
Agnisen Chauhan: nice catch in the end and the way you roped in magic to do that .But i dont think arthur conan doyle would particular approve of the flaws mentioned by the 2 konfessioners about the plot.
ingredient :solid magic
Truth Dude: perfect timing ,cool clash,magic that nicely brought a sense of unity.
ingredient: frenzy ?
Dok Saab:truth dude. fab take with a hidden message ,really hit.
ingredient:srk (",)
Sarang Mahajan:the whole set up was very magical but not very meaty "magic" as such.
ingredient:magic in your very poetry
Neharika: stupid nutcase its magic potion and not portion (thank you sarang )
ingredient:loads of bittergaurd
Mandappa KC: "..it was worth it" reminded me of wordsworths ..better to have loves and fallen than to have never loved at all.. lovely take.
ingredient:attempt to emotionally blackmail people to vote for you toying with the idea that most of us would have met a Mr or miss maya along the way.( Did you u really have to kick up the old dust? kidding )
Mickey the Monkey: A succour in midst of the heavy emotions calling the shots in every other take.nice sense of humor :)had a nice laugh.
what probabily that you agree to become a pet ? anyone would love to own you .but i am guessing P(x)=0 ,theres Jane to think about !
ingredient :monkey business
Priyanka Acharya: hey priyanka your right the magic is missing ,thats why it ended up tragic..bound to be !gotta keep it alive :whatever name it carries - love,trust,faith,hope etc.
And your take my dear is abounding in it :)
nice one but the lines felt a little redundant .stagnant tempo.
Hey congrats on the impending happiness :)
ingredient :loads of love :)
GS Virmani:nice but the many words dilute the effect.
Konfessioner Singh: lost in the magic !fab ..
ingredient: all spot lights on magic
my ballot: all for Konfessioner Singh
gs she in right now in what she pictures as gahenna.asking the denizen of utopia is like asking a clear blue sky why are there grey cloulds down here.
malted socktail thank you ..soooooo much :) made my day !
Today is Judgment Thursday
but Truth Dude, G'Fake, Agni and SM are yet to komment and vote !!
Though this time seven out of twelve have got votes (such a widespread voting) Mickey is yet to get any.
Results so far-
SM---1+1+2=4
TD---------1
GF---------1
PA---------1
Neharika--1
DS---------1
KS---------1
GF
Pointers here:
1. ‘subconscious’ is a word, ‘subconscience’ isn’t
2. he said..as opposed to said he. She answered … as opposed to answered she.
Birth itself is magical. You’ve got that right.
You’ve also focused on the circumstances, which by themselves weren’t so magical. What I think, would have make your klash the finest here…would have been the description…not of the process of birth, but then unravelling of life being delivered. Imagine a mother’s pain...the baby’s discomfiture…the father’s anxiety and then the relief that follows for all three, captured in 120 words.
That’s magic!
WW
Really nostalgic and nice. You’ve got a good thing going there mate. Keep it up!
AC
A magician commits Murder. But no magic involved. Ah…but the mystery is solved, wrapped up and delivered. Solid writing…some flaws in the story…but really nice. Welcome here and I’m looking forward to more from you!!
td
Wiiiiiiiiiikkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkiiiiiiiitttttttttttttttt :)
Doc
Really nice take on magic there. And yes, SRK has worked his magic pretty much all across the world. A good take…but I want more from you.
S
Woah Mr. S!! You are the master of rhyme.
“In one stupid matchbox, all the storms would rage
Snowy, grey mountains were locked in a birdcage”
That is the only part where the rhyme felt a little forced. I think the rhythm jarred a bit here. But really…too cool!!
N
Nice…vivid! Although, the transition you made was a little abrupt.
But hey I liked it overall.
MKC
Only you, my man could pull of an ‘Each everything’ in your klash. :)
I really liked the rest…reminded me of this movie called ‘City of Angels’ – Meg Ryan and Nicholas Cage in one of the best damn performances ever.
You rock!!
MtM
Funneeee like the monkey. Nice and light and magical yes. Good show there Monkey. You win a bunch of Banana’s from me :)
PA
Nice, solid concept…very thoughtful. But I know you can write much better. This writing was like a big box of wood. It’s nice and important…but it lacks the sizzle that would make it great. And you have that in you…bring it out though!!
GSV
Pritish was praying for ‘magic’ (no ‘a’ required). I liked how you’ve used magic in a very antithetic sort of way. Hmm…well there’s writing that grabs you and then there’s writing that sits down besides you like a friend. Your writing is like keeping distance.
Don’t get me wrong…I liked your take on magic. And I think you can do much better on the writing. Good show mate!!
KS
Ok…I really don’t know what to say here. I mean, I gave you my vote last time, because you shared an awesome story in such a beautiful voice. And now…you have an adjective in every sentence. I mean, what happened?! My dear Belle of Bells, you are the reason I joined this group…because you invited me here. I’m sure you have a lot of fans here who adore your writing. I do too! But I like it unadorned with the heavy glitter. And I know you can write so evocatively…so beautifully…
Mandappa, you got my vote!
Once again, some one got a vote and Mickey, A bunch of bananas :(
but who wants vote !!,
Mickey only wants some more bananas,
Once again, no consensus here !!
seven humans getting one vote each, and Sarang Sir, four.
Results so far-
SM---1+1+2=4
TD---------1
GF---------1
PA---------1
Neharika--1
DS---------1
KS---------1
Mandappa---1
Hello everyone:
GF: A very good take. Nice and touching!
Willy: Cool, man. Nice one. Doesn't look like you scribbled it in hurry.
Agnisen: Welcome bro. I liked you klash just as much your name. Very good beginning here.
Truth Dude:Yes, we all felt that magic. Nice presence of mind.
Dok Saab: Nice one Dok Saab, but the theme of this take is disparity, something like the current comparison between Hockey and Cricket, and not magic.
Neharika: Good one, Neharika. Looks like you are enjoying the klash. I like your style.
Mandi:Good one, Mandi. As usual a take on love from you! But I think, the simple meanings are burdened beneath over artistic framing here.
Mickey: Hehe! Good one, Brother Monkey. Nice and funny.
Priyanka: Good work, Priyanka. A wonderful perspective of the word.
GS Virmani: Yes, sir. We all prey for magic in deferent stages of life, this one was one of those. Would have loved to see the magic happen though. And yeh, the word limit!
Shin: As usual, the one that matches your standard. A fine take. There is also a role for Mickey.
My vote: I think everyone has decided to please all the klashers this week. So Silly Willy (just because silly rhymes with willy, nothing else) better not be left out, especially when he has been putting on such a good show every week, like this one as well.
ahhhh now my time has come to komment and vote!!! THANK YOU SOOOO MUCH MICKEY...for counting the votes for me...it made my life that much easier..have been a lot busy lately!!
I guess we all have kommented and voted..shall I go ahead or is anyone missing?? BTW how many votes does a judge have? 5 or 10?
Hi Richa Jee
ab intezaar bahut hua, bus apnaa faislaa sunaa hee deejiye
Aapke (judge ke) 8 votes hai.
aur Genuine fake aur agnisen ne komments/vote nahi kiyaa hai. Monday se abhi tak nahi kiya to shaayad ab naa hee karein.
@ Dok Saab - Surreal is magic. Magic is surreal. David Coperfield did not disappear the Statue of Liberty for real, yet it is said to be the greatest ever magic. I think K Lal disappeared Tajmahal, that was also surreal, isn't it?
The real magic, i.e., the magic for us muggles, is always surreal.
ok the time has come....yeh faisle ki ghadi hai...hahaha...i think I am the only judge who has had so much kick out if it...hheehahahamuuuaahhaaha
GF: birth is magical no doubt but there is one such magic happening every second!!! Also the last line seemed out of space..apparently the marriage was unhappy to begin with and a baby is not going to make all the issues go away!!
nice take and I think it would be MAGICAL to the parents no matter what
WW: wonderful take and very well written. reminds me of a song "wish I could have told him in his living years" wonderful people who touch are lives :)
good imagery almost made me see the whole landscape. one of your best so far
AC: welcome buddy..what a name..must say am impressed :)
unfortunately the write up fell flat for me. the writing is nice but the idea is not..if u know what i mean. So i really do look fwd to your next Klash for I am sure u have the potential.
TD: a wonderful take but the thought behind makes me feel all the more sad...what a waste of time, money and everything else. dont get me wrong..great India won the world cup but for the money and the publicity these guys command they should have looong ago!! i know i shud comment on writing but i feel the thought needs to touch u too!!
DS: in the first read i voted for you coz it tugged at my heart strings...i am a sucker at still buying sabji from the mandi and not from malls in india or seenk ka jhaadu and not plastic but on the re-read felt the write up was not on magic but magician.
SM: WOW what rhyme and what visual effect..i could almost see all the things...but i felt the magic was missing..i mean it did not sound like a piece on magic. but otherwise a wonderful wonderful read...i smiled in about 12 places and laughed at about 3 :
Mandappa: u seem to be obsessed with the damsel!!! hope she is reading it and appreciates what she has lost!! it was a nice write up
but u r capable of sooo much better. also did not feel that magic was the central theme.
but u most definitely have a fan in me!!
Neharika: i am bowled over..one of the fastest rises in Klash!!! unique spin on the word and so provocatively written. loved th eline that everyone else has loved too!! :) hmm u have just made my task much more difficult!!
MtM: man it must be hard to keep within the skin of the monkey and keep writing such good stuff!! I hope Jane appreciates it too!! :)
PA: Congrats man...so when is the big day?? As one of the fewwwww married people on this Klash let me tell u the life after is full of magic and then some...the write up was personal and written very nicely. the magic of love!!! who can deny that but it did not move me...
GSV: nice opening words nad a good speech by the CEO...sometimes i wonder at your grammatical slip ups..are they intentional?? coz most of the time u write impeccably should have minded the word limit.
mostly we wait for a miracle so the word magic looked a little forced here!!
KS: Princess...i love your writing as a rule but to komment here i need to understand it :( maybe u have evolved too fat for us. it was a nice read with vivid use of imagery but the end was sooo sooo sad...why dead bodies and kneeless people?? I like it best when its evocative but simple and u have shown yourself to excel in it in the past
MY Vote....
I am dilly dallying between WW and Neharika...they both tugged my heart and they both wrote wonderfully..they made the scene come alive with their words kahte hai na.."shabdo se tasveer kheench di" :)
i shall vote for WW..I am little partial towards poems as compared to prose.
My VOTE WILLY WINGFOOT!!!
A good decision! As I said, deserving. Congrats Silly WIlly!
the vote tally is :
SM---1+1+2=4
TD---------1
GF---------1
PA---------1
Neharika--1
DS---------1
KS---------1
Mandappa---1
Willy Wingfoot-----1+8=9
So I guess that makes WILLY WINGFOOT our new WINNERRRRRRRRRRR
ladies and gentlemen and the various canine, feline, equestrian and Simian members of this Klash lets join our hands for the new winner....
Taaliyon ki gadgadahat ke beech smiling SILLY WILLY :) (it rhymes too well for me to not to use it)
Kongrats Willy
and you had opted out of the kompetetion !!
to those who kommented on mine, last week was for the damsel...this one was fiction..:)
with the name maya...
congrats WILLY....
people teach me how to make things bold!!!
and next word???
Mandappa
this is how you use html tags-
bold < b >TEXT< /b > (without the spaces)
Italics < i >TEXT< /i >
GOD!
Had surprises been gold,i would have been richer than the Dragon at my neighbouring Hole!!
Such has been the week, that ate September,n breathed out a tense new October....
ONE-for a change;the Study-Study part of my life has started to run...after crawling for centuries in search of a ray...from inside the never-ending tunnels of doom.
Two-My lady,for a lady she is,though a zombie she wishes to be,has been giving me the TIME-OF-MY-LIFE.....(n she'll be wanting a piece of my flesh for mentioning her,here)
Three-The lady's nephew has found a new interest in my fair feathers....!!!He's 5...r may be 6...r could be 4!!!
Four-AND the most unexpected of them ALL is,"You Lovely Klashers!!!"....
n most honestly,this is a piece that i had took not more than 20mins to put in...though the theme has been haunting for quiet a while....n had sir.DOK not told me it was good enough...it still would have been "NOT-UP-FOR-KOMPETITION"...
No sir,Malted Socktail...unfortunately......never wandered around mountains,...yet i had been a field boy before!!Feels good that you can relate to it.
Thank u...all......!!
This makes me wanna come back for more.....n hope my lady wont bother! :)
P.s:She ai'nt a Fat muscular lady...nowhere near a zombie...she s an Elf....Just that,the ears dont peak up!(n she ain't called MAYA)
Hi Bro Willy
I knew this time it would be a bird !!
Kongrats
hey Konfessioners..give the winner the coveted PURPLE KROWN!!!
hey whats the good word !
knock knock ..anybody home ?!
Congrats Willy... :-)
And thanks to everyone..for the good wishes.. :-)
What's the good word..?? Its Saturday evening..and we don't have the word yet.. :-(
SORRY,my most humble Gentlemen n Ladies...n the Ape and Horsy...and other creatures below the sky...
I've been thinkin about the word for a while....and i came up with a few too.But i thought i must consult the Creators before disclosing....
Mam.Singh is OFF until 15th...thats what her ORKUT says...no reps from SARANG...and NM,i thought might be Busy...
Few Suggestions are-"WAR","Wizard","Weapon"....n my favourite at the Moment is "Princess"....
So...wat do we go with...???
"PRINCESS"???
Hmm...Willy...PRINCESS is a nice word...but how about WIZARD?? :-) Komrades..pls komment..
Im very sorry to komment late (was working on a project)....i know the vote is out and the winner has been announced, but i'm here to learn and impart (if its possible, in this esteemed club)...and thus i'd just put in my views still....also thank you all for your valuable komments on my piece....and i must say its just thrilling to know what a writer thinks(his perspective) when he pens his work....so here begins my quest:
GF : For me, the birth of a child as Dok Saab kommented is really magical...and Nina sought it....but could this "magic" have changed Shaan's view point, (from being sorry?) Or does your last line mean that Shaan also changed his view point?
Willy Wingfoot: No denying why u have been announced the winner. Its transports the reader to its positive childhood experiences with their parents/loved ones. Beautiful & whatmore....Flawless!!
Myself: Although i'm curious to know the hollywood connection (i'd love to know parallels! it'll make me feel good :) ), here's my perspective. Magic was always in the background of my peice, hidden behind curtains. Although not invoking the theme, from the word go (like Willy the Winner), i tried to keep it in the end. That way the reader moves back and fits the piece. I'm yet to pack a punch, but so many inspirations on this blog...better luck next time.
Truth dude: Now thats magical. I would rate you an equal winner this week (choosing is tough). Ganpati Bappa & Cricket...deadly combo.
Dok Saab: Probably the piece didnt have a relevant use of the word "magic". But thats just my view. I might be viewing the piece differently.
Sarang: Magical writing. Outstanding manner in which the magical thoughts were penned and rhymed. Mindblowing. I had a question to gain a better view here. Do you think "a stupid dream of magic" is the best choice of words, especially because your choice of words to describe the magical impossibilities was impeccable? Difficult to seperate your work from the winners...thank God i aint the judge.
Neharika: Brilliant twist. Phew...didnt see it coming! I think that the theme of the word didnt carry throughout the piece. But in true sense the piece was magical.
Mandappa KC: Maya says it all! My view is that the last portion of the tale missed something.
Mickey: Too funny and well rhymed! Such a different viewpoint. Radical.
Priyanka: Beauty of simplicity. Equal winner for me.
GS: Great writing. More than the word count, but good read.
KS: Chesterton? Too good...equal winner.
@ Mickey: Even if there arent windows in a room, there usually is a door!!
@ Agnisen: Thanks for the kind words, sir. Well, I used those words just as something you whisper right out of sleep. Usualy what you say then is very simple and straight, so it could not be a part of the poem, I thought.
So Willy, what's the word?
I think..this week there's gonna be no klashes... :-(
NO NO NO NO! There will be a klash. Only we'll start a day later and run a day tighter!
WILY, man what's the word? I'll take wizard... is it ok?
PEOPLE!
The word is PRINCESS....i've written in bold....previously....!
Klash ai'nt gonna stop b'coz of me...
Go on...
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