Ohkay everyone! This is VERY VERY VERY discouraging! This is our FIRST word in 4 months! And including me and my sister, we're all so VERY busy with everything else to do something which brings us all pleasure and satisfaction! This is NOT just a kompetition, its our voice! It's our channel of expression! Please do NOT let me assume that these few entries are all that we as a cult can come up with.
Rishi Ghan (113)
“Yes Sir Mr.Gatekeeper, I am God’s insurance agent”, said Mr.Portney, “And my viciousness lies in the fact that I insure God against your mistakes.”
“Excuse me?” Mr.Gatekeeper interjected.
“Yes, you make mistakes, just like the rest of us.”
“And by mistakes you must mean, not letting you in here?”
“That would be correct Mr. Gatekeeper.”
“In that case, Mr. Portney I assure you, my mistake is well compensated for, by ahem, God Himself. And He will surely acknowledge the fact that I did not allow you entry into Heaven. You clearly don’t belong here.”
“That is not for you to judge”
“Whats all the hullabaloo about” God thundered.
“Oh Mr.Gatekeeper’s been a bitch….”
Nandini Sen (108)
Chaos reigned supreme in the ashram. Swamiji was coming to give a lecture, and everything had to be in order. The sweeper was dusting up a storm, the florist and decorators were squabbling over nothing. Carpets were being laid, mikes being tested with the raucous “123 check” Curious devotees were already flocking in.
The hullabaloo was too much for Rambabu, the organizer. He tried to shut out the noise by retreating into another room, but the hullabaloo had seeped into every corner of the ashram.
He smiled and thought how ironic it was that Swamiji was coming to deliver a lecture on “The Importance of Silence in Life”.
Sowmya (120)
"What's this hullabaloo about?" The noise irritated Swati rushing to work.
"They are from that bankrupt financial company. Poor guys, losing their job in a flash! And it's not even their fault." Gayathri shuddered.
"Come on. It's just a job. Opportunities are available everywhere, one just has to look and be positive. Fortune favors the brave." Gayathri smiled indulgently at her colleague's zealous sermon.
An hour later, Swati's tears blurred the pink slip she clutched. "This is unfair! It's not our fault that crude prices are increasing and more people are travelling by trains now", she wailed.
The next day protest rally saw Swati screaming her lungs out. She instinctively turned to hear a passer-by remark, "what's this hullabaloo about?"
DokSaab (91)
The noise was deafening.
Doksaab, when will his fever subside,
Papa, you forgot to deposit my fee,
Boss, the meeting with the minister is at 4.
Beta, I need a pair of new glasses,
Yaar, aren't you coming to the party tonight?
Sir, the patient on bed 3 is serious.
Honey, you are late for dinner again.
I tried to close my eyes, and relax.
The sound grew even louder.
Doksaab,
Papa,
Boss,
Beta,
Yaar,
Sir,
Honey,
I sunk my head deeper into the pillow,
But the hullabaloo failed to die.
Sarang (110)
What’s this rackety hullabaloo?
I’ll say what I say, I’ll do what I do
You idiot morons, what’s it to you?
What me and my girl do in the park,
What me and my friends smoke in the dark,
Whether I care about the people or not,
I keep my morals or leave them to rot,
Leave my business to me, and shoo
What’s this rackety hullabaloo?
Gone are the days when the nation was old
If ever it was a sparrow of gold
Catching up now is the western hold
Give up, and know your culture is sold
Keep quiet, sit tight, don’t make ado
What’s this rackety hullabaloo?
Rashmi Gupta(116)
"Why are you still doing this job??"
She kept stirring and staring at the caffeine vapor…
"It pays you peanuts, drains your energy and drives you insane at the end of the day!"
The dark circles beneath her eyes were defied by the gleam in the hazel dew.
"Listen Mom, I am coming there next month. Get your passport in order. If you are so much in dire straits to work, you can find a decent job here too. Okay bye, take care!!"
The call ended.
The mayhem at the Morgue was enough to keep the hullabaloo in her head at bay. After all, that was the only way she could meet her dead husband, everyday.
Mandappa KC (119)
Joker licked his lips, with a smile across his face.
The interrogator screamed in rage.
“What the fuck is this hullabaloo about. Your death sentence is in 24 hours and I can’t fucking believe you’re smiling.”
Joker’s smile broadened.
The interrogator banged his fists on the table. “This time you’re not getting away.”
He slams the door shut and joins his colleagues on the other side of the one way mirror.
Joker stares at them intently, smiling, like he can see through.
They watch him, a tad scared.
The interrogator still beamed at him, with a “what-the-fuck-can-you-do?” expression.
Joker smiles. They can’t hear him say.
“This is your hullabaloo. Fuck you too.”
Kaboom.
They’re blown to bits. He’s free.
Seema Kashyap (120)
Kashiram was reclining on his charpaayi on a hot summer day, thinking of everything and nothing in particular. He had placed the charpaayi under the shade of the biggest mango tree in the orchard, yet sweat dribbled down his back and disappeared into his dhoti every few minutes. Suddenly he heard a cackle of kids screams and shouts. Cursing, he rose up in a somnambulance of a summer afternoon, lifted his lathi and lumbered towards the voices. The neighborhood kids were his worst enemies- always trying to steal his mangoes. “Stop this bloody hullaballoo, get out..!”, he shouted as he emerged from the trees…only to come face to face with the meanest looking cobra he had ever seen! Hissssss! “AAAgh”!
Mickey(92)
Bang-Bang
Vrooom
Dhadaaam
Boom
Fizzzz
The cotton ear-plugs and the thick woolen muffler wrapped around my ears failed to stop this great commotion. I had not been able to sleep for past three nights due to this pandemonium.
What's this hullabaloo, Jane, I asked her assuming that being a human, she must be knowing why these village people were creating such uproar.
-Oh Monkey, they are celebrating Dipawali, the festival of light.
But why are they spoiling our peace. We also celebrate, but tell me Jane, have we ever disturbed their peace?
Ruchika Bajoria(114)
"Ruchiiii, come back here! No safari park for you!"
"Uff Amu, why are you yelling? And STOP running around both of you!"
Amu looked at her masi petulantly and said, "but, but, she has my book! And I was reading it!"
"But, but, di isn't playing with us. All she does is put her nose in her books! Ughh."
Smriti looked at them carefully. Neither showed any sign of relenting. "Ruchi, give Amu her book."
"I knew you would say that. But me and mini need a third person to play!"
"I don't want to play! Now give me my book."
"I wont, I wont!"
"Masiii…"
"Buaaaa…"
80 comments:
Hi friends,
A big Hullo!!!
Before I komplain about most people not participating,
or kompliment all those who did,
I must kongratulate Miss Ruchika Bajoria , for the so very professionally managed blog, her first attempt at that !!
Well done Kid ;)
Dear Juhi, Ruchika and Dok Saab,
I honestly apologize for the delay... i saw the email about the extension just couple of hours ago..
I sincerely hope and assume that the entry would be accepted...
anyways, when do we start kommenting??
Loved the picture! Klashes are looking great too. Some more entries will add to the fun. Come in, come in klashers. :-)
Rush.me..hi!
we're just really really glad that you wrote!
yayyyy!!
And I just found a typo in my entry...
Get you passport in order.
it should be...
Get your passport in order..
Kindly forgive..... :((
Rush.me...Dont worry. I'll rectify it for you.
P.s. That is allowed right?
If not, its my mistake (aka kiddy) and so rush.me jija shudnt hafta suffer in terms of being disqualified!!!
good job on hosting the klash... i knows it quite a daunting task :P
and sarang still here, yipeee and dok saab !!
cheers and later wfor the comments!
Good to see you Mandy and Rashmi. And Nandini, Sowmya and Mickey to. But I really miss a lot of old-timers. Come on people, the word is hullabaloo, not dull dulloo.
Hullaballoo sounds so subtle.
I read everybody's posts and felt sorry for having posted mine. Also, its on top of everyone elses.
I feel stupid.
Not bad klashers! What an excellent diversity of takes! It takes my breath away, and makes me wonder who am I going to vote for! This is going to be difficult.
From God's insurance agent to a lady in a morgue, to the market meltdown to a woman in labour (and from live experience!) Smashing!
I'll try and send in my entry fast. Sorry I was mired in exams till yesterday.
Ahoy!!!
It is soo good to see the Klash up and running again!
I am joining in next week, but i am itching to comment. :(
It is surprising to see people who thought Klash was 'scary' to write and that too... soo well!
M glad to see you here Rishi.
Cheers to the new Trio and wishing that Klash keeps running for looong... this time as well :)
The Genuine Fake
Yo folks!!
Its gud to see the klash on its feet again..thanks to the Three Musketeers..!! :-) How have you all been all these months..? First of all, thanks for all the wishes and blessings for my baby..!! :-)
The word this week was good, and the entries are even better..!! Yea yea Juhi..its almost my experience..am saying 'almost' cos mine wasn't this dramatic.. :-D
Waiting to komment..!! Keep up the gud work Ems ('M'usketeers) ;-)
Let the kommenting begin!!!!
My favorite is Priyanka's post.
Personal experiences have the narrative quality that fiction can't match.
Hello Rishi Ghan !!!
Welkome to the world of Klash
Its nice to know your personal favorite, but we would love to hear from you about what you think of the others too.
Thats the unique format of Klash.
Bouquets as well as Bricks, you have to throw both.
I just found a typo in my entry...
Can that be rectified?
its "But me and Mini need another person to play with..."
Could someone pls look into it?? [:)]
Hello Klashers! My komments, as follows:
Rishi Ghan: A toasty welcome to you, seeing that winter is knocking. I like the candid and egoistic conversation between the two characters. I can see them now, standing in front of huge golden gates enveloped in clouds, with their noses in the air. Nice. Although I really don’t understand the context. Could you explain?
Nandini Sen: Hahaha, I really liked it. I like the images and sounds that you created. Like “dusting up a storm” and “hullabaloo had seeped into every corner of the ashram”. Hey, how come you don’t send your inimitable scraps to me anymore??
Sowmya: Really awesome! Excellent work of putting the current economic meltdown so lucidly.
Doksaab: Its cute. We hear about the different forms of a woman so much, you have shown us the different faces of being a man!
Sarang: Hmmm…you never told me you were learning hip-hop? Cool.
Rashmi Gupta: Its hauntingly creepy. I especially like “ The dark circles beneath her eyes were defied by the gleam in the hazel dew.”
Mandappa KC: Where’s Batman??? I like the description of the Joker. But I don’t understand the word hullabaloo in this context. Anyways, I like the picture of a dank dinghy interrogation cell with the creepy Joker in it.
Seema Kashyap: Ooh! This looks like a story right out of Tinkle, I love it! I also like the sound of the word “somnabulance”, although it is a bit heavy.
Mickey the Monkey: Hey where did “the Monkey” go? Good to see you again. I was excepting something roaring with laughter with hands stuck on a turbulent tummy, as always. Not your best.
Ruchika Bajoria: As an aspiring writer you should know the first rule of writing fiction is that it is a TRUTHFUL LIE. Real names are dangerous, their owners can sue you. Other than that, brings back memories and is very well written.
Priyanka Chakraborty: Wow! This one is scary and dramatic…”Aaaaarrgghh..” Happy to see you could take out time for klashing.
Richa Gupta: There was no need for that intro, the first line says it all, and the line after that, as the line after that …and so on. Awesome!
Now comes the difficult part. I can't decide. I'll tell you later.
"Aaargh!!" For some strange reason Mickey's and Ruchi's komments have been clubbed together, without my repeatedly wishing them not be so. Apologies for the inconvenience.
Secondly,
Explaining myself, I have a passionate hatred for twisted health insurance policies. Especially since I paid $120 for been told that I have a nasal drip which causes my nose to run. Thank you Ma'am. Certainly, I could've never figured that out on my own. You just saved my life.
The fun just begins with the insurance company disavowing cover.
Hence, in a mad fit of rage, I curse them to hell, imagining that even God's own insurance agent would be damned for all eternity. And then give him some attitude reminiscent of the one in real life, where they try and convince you how you are dying because of your own mistakes and that the policy does not cover your mistakes.
Sorry, but I hate them with a passion.
Firstly, apologies for sounding and commenting like a juvenile. I have never written for anyone but myself until now.
Dok Saab's version of 'voices-in-my-head' somehow reminded me of college submission days, where I gave in to clinical insanity. In a good way though, since it has that tone to it, which you can relate to.
Sarang's social critique sounded a little dry. Could've used some drama, I guess.
Rashmi's monologue was an interesting one straight up to the end, which opens up a world of hurt for me (I suck happy endings, even though I am death obsessed)
Mandappa KC: If this was your rendition of the Joker, I'd give you a second chance. But since I am anal and Heath Ledger's Joker is almost half-philosopher and half-mad, I can't envision him swearing like a punk, not even in his head.
I enjoyed Seema's narration because I imagined in my twisted mind, that is what must happen to people who don't let kids be kids.
Mickey, I almost read Tarzan there.
Pardon me, if its otherwise. Nice social message though.
Ruchika's blurb reminded me of my niece who raises hell and has made a career out of not letting people sleep. Gotta love her for that. Hence, awesome.
Priyanka: Total rock-the-house awesomeness. Pregnancy amongst other things, innately female, has always baffled me and Priyanka condenses the madness in just 107 words. I can't even start imagining the intensity of the life-bringing force that is the woman.
Richa, Obama is here to save us all, right? I'm so far off to the left that I see disaster even if the markets are stable.
Hello Friends :)
So nice to see you all back in aktion :)
Lovely takes all, especially when the word is not a very commonely used word, atleast I have never used Hullabaloo in my routine conversation.
I didnt had the time to write, but wrote just to encourage Ruchika Jija ( I thought Jija was Jiji's husband but she uses this for her elder sisters, cute :)
@ Juhi Jija
I have decided not to use my sirname, just as a protest against the caste based politics our indian politicians are promoting.
The Musketeers
I am not able to komment and vote, and as such my entry stands disqualified and out of the kompetetion ( but Musketeers, please let the take be there, it feels good to be in that kompany )
@ Ruchika Jija
You have the keys to the Klash, and if you are komplaining ("I just found a typo in my entry...
Can that be rectified?
Could someone pls look into it?? ") then what will we lesser mortals do.
Hi guys - Kongrats to the Musketeers for the resurrection.
Nice to see the familiar ppl around...and welcome to Rishy (btw Rishy u forgotto Komment on my take!!!)
OK now I want to appologize for something I'm abt to do....I'm actually pretty crunched for time & wont really be able to Komment in detail.....
so lemme just Vote & add a couple of words against each take (sorry guys)
My Vote: Dok Saab
Rishi - Innovative
Sowmya - Liked your involvement of the word in your take.....though the story line was predictible.
Dok Saab - Voices in your head.....hmmmm - the hullaballoo within is what appealed to me.
Sarang - Actually quite similar to Dok Saab's - your take reminds me of teh hippies
Rashmi - A dark tale....I dont think I really understood your take - but like what I understood :))
Mandappa - "This is your hullaballoo" liked that line. a nice one.
Seema - Hmm nice twist to your tale.....well potrayed
Mickey - I fully appreciate your concern on "disturbence of peace". I liked the way you wove the word into your typical setting.
Ruchika - Hullaballoo fully potrayed......one could almost see it.
Priyanka - Wow - thank Gid yours wasnt as hectic. Its a big hullaballoo indeed.
Richa - Pffff!!! When oh when will this gloom lift? Very well put. I liked your 2nd last & last line....for the optimism.
@Mickey...
Even though I'm a aprt of the Musketeers, I did not think it apt to change the error myself for the simple reason that the entries were closed. I wasn't sure if a correction was in the fair spirit of the game!
Hullo Klashers??? Its Sunday today. Let the komments and votes flow!
Hi ppl
Happy Diwali:) Firstly its great to that Klash is restored for Kompetition. Great job Musketeers. And thanks Ruchika for your email. Its so nice of you. Sorry for the late commenting. Here goes
Rishi -Welcome to Klash. And you did miss out commenting on my entry. I am still unclear about your take though your style of writing is good.
Nandini- Love the way you use words....brings such clear images and sounds to mind.....'dusting up a storm', ....'raucous 123 checks'. Lovely!
DokSaab -Can't think of a better way for hullabaloo. Very unique concept.
Sarang -Neat message and great potrayal....You have captured the attitude of poeple in current times perfectly.
Rashmi - The end leaves one with an eerie feeling...quite a dark tale really.
Mandappa -Though the story line is interesting, I somehow could not find the word 'hullabaloo' fitting in...Joker smiling need not make the interrogator talk hullabaloo...
Seema -Lovely imagery in your take...
Mickey -Nice entry. I liked it except for the end. Maybe you could have changed that somewhat. Did the ending reflect how we are polluting our environment without a care for other living beings??
Ruchika -Kids and hullabaloo are impossible without each other, I guess. Wonderful take!
Priyanka -Perfect situtation for utter chaos.
Richa -I guess both of us were talking about the same hullabaloo. Yours is fantastic! It describes my present emotion to the T
My vote -Sarang
well, at rishi
it is my take of joker, on another platform altogether... and yes i can see him swear only with a smile on his face..thats his irony after all, isnt it..
but if u r into this, u should meet my friend..and once im done with another piece im workin on, il send it along :P
Ohkay…Drumrolls please! My Komments:
1) Rishi: Welkome to klash! I loved the luvid language and the arrogance of both the characters came out magnificently. However, I did not understand the concept or rather the theme of the narration. Even after reading your explanation, I failed to grasp its import. I also felt that hullabaloo doesn’t quantify the emotions of the piece correctly. It felt like an altercation or at most, a disagreement. For me, the usage of the word was weak.
2) Nandini: I love how you haven’t just used the word, but rather, you’ve portrayed the essence of the word. Your writing is the classic example of show, don’t tell. Something which brings your writing to life! I did feel however that there were too many descriptions of the hullabaloo and while that is a good thing in general I really felt that the descriptions were very regular. I did not see any such description which made me sit up and notice the piece. What I’m trying to say is that maybe if you’d used a few choice words you could’ve painted a more vivid picture for the reader.
3) Sowmya: Yet again, you’ve take a regular occurrence and treated it differently. I love how each of our pieces has a definitive writing style which immediately marks the story as your own. I for one, find it difficult to let my voice shine through my pieces but you are a master at it! I also loved how you showed the dramatic alteration in Swati’s POV as soon as she was on the oter side of the fence. Typical human behaviour at its best!I also loved the cynicism nherent in the last line.
4) DokSaab: At the risk of sounding thoroughly unoriginal and exactly repetitive I am going to say what my sister has said verbatim “We hear about the different forms of a woman so much, you have shown us the different faces of being a man!” refreshing read. It makes you sit up and take stock of how we women are so full of ourselves to think that we are the only ones who sacrifice.
5) Sarang: I love the message of the poem. Its not really your writing style but its very well written nonetheless. Very hip-hop-ish in its tempo, I can see why others have called it a song. I like the rebellion which, you’ve portrayed. I don’t really condone with your last few lines but… it brings out the voice of the character brilliantly. I felt like I was listening to one of my peers (aka the youth of today) and I felt exactly as I do when I hear them speak. The same amusement at our foibles, the same righteousness at wanting our identities and the same discontentment that I feel when they vocalize their belief that the culture is sold etc. whatever, that’s just me! I like the narrative and the writing style. Some places however, the rhythm felt forced and from a writer of your caliber, I expected a more complex poetic pattern.
6) Rashmi: Wow! I love the lines “she kept stirring…: and “the dark circles….”wonderful descriptions and very unique. I loved the way all the voices in her head came together. We all have such voices in the head but its difficult to pen it down and you’ve done a commendable job! However, it didn’t seem like a real hullabaloo. The usage of the word didn’t work for me.
7) Mandappa KC: Thankyou thankyou thankyou for writing! It was short notice and yet you came up with good stuff. I say this is good stuff coz others say so. I don’t know the context in which its written and I haven’t watched batman or joker which is where its from, I gather. So I have no idea as to the story plot. But, I love how well the frustration of the police officer comes through. I love how when joker smiles, you’ve managed to instill a feeling of dread and cold brutality in me. I love the descriptions and the ending. But I did not really understand the concept of the piece.
8) Seema: When I first read your piece and it started with an old man resting in the mango orchard I literally rolled my eyes thinking that I knew what would happen. He’d get up to chase the children who had come to steal the mangoes. Hence, when I reached the end I LOVED how it didn’t end there. I adored the fact that the hullabaloo was because of a snake. Vey very nice trick. I also enjoyed the descriptions. Specially “hehad placed…”
9) Mickey: I AM NOT YOUR JIJA. I’m younger to you so… Get it? Now, about your piece. I love how simple it is. And I enjoyed how subtly you put the question through. Thoughtful and ingenuous. Your grammar needs a little working upon as it took some of the enjoyment away from the read. When you ask Jane a question, you need to put it in quotes and the same goes for all the dialogues.
10) Ruchika: Well, work on your Capitals. Its Safari Park and Mini. Beyond that…remember to fictionalize your characters’ names.
11) Priyanka: Thankyou for writing! I was HORRIFIED by the amount of pain you’ve managed to make the poor pregnant lady feel. HORRIFIED. I cannot go beyond a wide-eyed shocked expression. You have robbed me of all coherent thoughts. So I’m just going to say….Owwww. But I love how everyone smiles and you have a baby girl!
12) Richa: Yayyyyy you wrote! You wrote! You wrote! And I love your piece. It’s a nice humorous take on the horror of the financial market that is today. Wonderful.
I have yet to decide on my vote. Maybe I’ll do that later.
Hi All
Happy Diwali !!!
We realize Klash kan not be tied to any Kalender :)
We ( The admins ) understand that each of us is very busy and it is very difficult to take out time to persue a purely fun aktivity like this, but still we beleive that if we have taken a job we should finish it too. Sending in your takes was great but please dont let this job inkomplete,
Please do komment and vote so that we kan declare a winner.
Hello !! People ,
Happy Dipawali
I hope you had a great time, I enjoyed a lot.
Now back to same old monotonous clinic :(
Klash komments bring some excitement to the dull life in office, and I am always eager to read what you think of my take. Since the komments are koming in very slow, here are my komments, (in many parts) to stimulate you to post in yours too :).
Rishi Ghan…..
Welkome , Rishi !
Your hatred towards the insurance agents is very well portrayed, by denying them entry into Heaven :) , but I feel the write-up doesn’t justify the theme word very strongly, the Hullabaloo in your take is just a little argument. But Nice writing style, hope to see more of you here.
Nandini Sen…..
Hello Ms Sen, your takes are always so fun to read :) (as are your spam mails )
A very apt portrayal of the theme word, and very witty too, very Nandini-Senish take indeed.
Sowmya …..
Hi Sowmya ! Loved to read your take, wish we kould have more klash per month :(
How true, genuine grievances and grumblings appear to be Hullabaloo, when its not coming from our mouths
Lovely concept.
Sarang …..
Hello Sir jee kaise hai !!
Very rebellious poem and very truly describing the theme word. The style is very like Lord Summer, the poet.
Talking of horses it reminds me, Sarang, we (me, ruchi and juhi ) have tried hard to revive Klash, but it feels like we are flogging a dead horse.
Rashmi Gupta…..
Hi Soorya ki pehli Kiran How are you :)
I also thought of hullabaloo as a mental konfusion. But why the morbid setting of the morgue to keep the memories of her dead husband alive? The link of her husband with the mortuary remains unexplained.
Mandappa KC …..
Hi Mandappa, Very intense take, as ever, with those unprintable four letter words n all :)
But I still remember some of your older takes; this one doesn’t match your past performance.
Seema Kashyap …..
After a long time, Seema. Nice to read your take. Very vivid imagery of a rural orchard. Setting very like some Munshi Premchand story .
Mickey …..
Very bad Monkey, if you don’t have time to komment, you shouldn’t have taken part. Wanting to hear nice words on your take without reciprocating is a bad idea. I hope in future you will write only if you are free enough to komment
Ruchika Bajoria …..
Now that’s a Hullabaloo I love to listen to.
The ruckus kreated by kids is the most innocent act you kan ever witness.
Lovely take from a kute Lady
( I have restrained myself kalling you a kid, Ruchi )
Priyanka Chakraborty …..
Hello Priyanka , how’s Anoushka. Lovely kid :)
Your take reminded me of the days of my posting in the labour room when I was an intern. The Hullabaloo there is sometimes very painful, sometimes very funny (the dai’s the doctor, the mom, and the attendants all shouting in unison) but every time very joyous.
Lovely take, very aptly portraying the theme word.
Richa Gupta…..
Richa , another of your so witty poems. You don’t need any krowns, purple or blue. You have always created masterpieces. This one is so in sync with the current scenario. It makes such a grim situation so light.
My Vote
to Richa Gupta !!
Six Komments and Three votes :(
Very discouraging, I must say
Dok Saab!
You guys are doing great. It's just the first klash after a long break. People are still waking up. Soon, we will be speeding like before.
Here are my comments:
Rishi: Welcome. Nice and innovative thinking. I liked the idea of the Heaven's Gatekeeper. I just feel the word could have been a little more stressed. Nice humor though. If you are going to be so creative, I would look forward to read your further klashes.
Nandini: Nice. Loved the irony. Very well put. I like the simplicity of your writing. Good use of the subject.
Sowmya:Good emotion. You have put it so simply that it does touch. Nice take on the word, though I did not quite understand the meaning (or I have, if the second hullabaloo is about them getting the jobs back). Liked it.
Dok Saab:Perfect hullabaloo. Very realistic portrayal, as is your way. Very nice take sir.
Rashmi:All I sensed here is you chose an artistic theme, but I just feel that I failed to grasp it, not completely, but exactly as you intended. The dialogue is good. Scene is nicely painted.
Mandi:Man I always love your takes, but just failed to get this one. It's very interesting, topic-wise. And also made me curious to read it thrice, but I just could not get the hang of it. Blame it on my comprehension power if you want to! :D
Seema:You painted Kashiram so well that I felt bad to know what fate he meets. Even though he is mean. Good klash.
Mickey:Very appropriate to the occasion, sir Monkey. I did not burn a single cracker this year just because I hate to see the dogs getting scared, if that makes you feel better. And a good take, as usual.
Ruchika:There is a kind of writers who take topics from routine life but paint them very well. I think Dok Saab and Nandini fall in that category. You, I thought were more about innovative topics, except here. You have managed this style very well. Good job.
Priyanka:Writing from the experience, eh? :D Very well put. A perfect hullabaloo. Nice take.
Richa:I get a feeling that you wrote it in ten minutes (but you wrote it perfectly). Apropriate topic for the occasion, just like Mickey.
Here we go. I copied Dok Saab's trick! :D
My Vote -
I considered Ruchika (for the cute hullaballo of kids :D), Mickey (for the subject) and Nandini (for the humor and irony), but giving it to Priyanka (for the drama).
Come one people. Rush in your votes and comments.
Votes So far -
1 - Dok Saab
1 - Sarang
1 - Richa
1 - Priyanka
Those who haven't voted so far -
Rishi
Rashmi
Mandi
Seema
Mickey
Ruchika
Priyanka
Richa
Juhi
RUSH IN GUYS!!
Not only does it feel weird not participating in the klash, it feels weirder not voting (for once?) haha.. Hey all and it is SO good to see the klash back in aktion.
A konfession is due, I've decided not to work the klash till we have a website, I think I finally have run out of patience...:( I believe we need a forum and we will have one soon, hopefull before the year ends :).
Until then, thank you for staying so aktive and thank you more for being the best komrades any konfessioner kould ask for.
Love and hugs,
Thaudi Kaur.
Shinjini Jija
You CAN comment. ANd your vote DOES carry a point. Pls Pls Komment!
Hi Missy ! so nice to see you here at Klash.
And Ruchika is right, your Vote (and Komments, if you have the time) would be a real treat for us
I think I voted for Priyanka.
So again, my vote goes to priyanka.
My Vote, My Vote! And it goes to RUCHIKA BAJORIA. Hey I have forgotten how to use bold and italics and other paraphenalia, teach me someone, please!
rishi - welcome... nice take.. u start out in the p.g. wodehouse manner... so i dint quite like the bitch in the end. doesnt go with it, so the end is a bit of a let down.
nandini - quiet still waters run deep... a nice take.
sowmya - a nice take given the scenario. nice.
doksaab: i love the nuances of the beginin but the end wasnt quite the perfect cap.
sarang: i love ure rhyme scheme n choice of words as always. nice.
rashmi: a very interesting take, il give you that.
seema: i love ure first line. there's somethin that seems to be amiss tho! a link at the end. something.. im not sure.
mickey: dint like the writing much but the angle is interested, i liked it more cuz jus a few days back an auto driver, had a similar woe to tell me.. buzz me, il tel u wat happened...
ruchika: i like wat uve captured.. and how... the innocence and the madness, thats child n parent. nice.
priyanka: couldve done more i think. straddle ure thought harder, n then begin to write...
richa ji: nice. however, i think i prefer ure earlier takes.
honestly, i dont know who to chose. and not because there are too many nice ones, but bcuz i dont seem to remember which one stands out the most. rashmi for a nice idea, and ruchika for capturin the innocence...
and i really like sarangs too
but since its about writing,
il go with RUCHIKA!
Rishi Ghan:
Seems like Modern Mythology..That would be a very interesting accusation of God making mistakes... but quite entertaining nonetheless...
Nandini Sen:
Hullabaloo storified....LOL.. very true portrayal of such a dynamic word..
Sowmya:
Chaos in the office, chaos outside, chaos everywhere.. in the such trying times, this hullabaloo fits perfectly....
DokSaab:
Wished the sounds would just die, but jara sochiye doksaab, in sab ke bina, zindagi sooni nahi ho jaayegi???
Sarang:
Hmm.. the time might have come... but I guess staying in the past is something we all love to do... very practical.. but I guess people like to do everything what is not their business... and what is not supposed to be done..
Mandappa KC:
The last hullabaloo was the loudest, messiest, noisiest and yah, the deadliest....
Seema Kashyap:
Got reminded of poor Bud in Kill Bill Vol.2...what a way to die.... Sometimes it would be good to actually listen what the kids have to say...!!
Mickey:
Here comes Diwali and the hullabaloo remains.. Seriously, we never think about the pain and torture caused to our 4-legged friends during celebrations and the crackers...
Ruchika Bajoriya:
Kids and their play.. One can never be with kids and expect to be in a peaceful heaven..It is heaven but not a peaceful one...
Priyanka Chakraborty:
Hmm.. When i was reading, i imagined the hullabaloo in the parent's life, after having a GIRL child... Hullabaloo before the birth and Chaos later on... but it was good to read just the prior part.. let the latter part move to extinction.
Richa Gupta:
Seriously.... thankful to be out of the hullabaloo...
Now for the VOTE: Seriously a though task with many worthy entrees.... quite a mouthful on my plate.... but I guess I most enjoyed Nandini's take...coz the words just put Ramababu and the mayhem in front of me...therefore..
My vote: Nandini Sen
Alright, taking matters into our hands. Final votes are:
Dok Saab - 3
Sarang - 2
Richa - 2
Priyanka - 2 + 2 = 4
Ruchika - 1 + 2 = 3
Nandini - 2
And so with a happy, happy smile on my lips I formally declare the new Mommy to be the winner of this err...(stretched to)couple of week's Klash.
The Purple Krown of Klash of the Konfessioners Season 2 goes to {b}Priyanka {/b}
Aaaaaandddddddddd............DDddrrrummmrrollll for ME!!! I have finally after 1 hour of slogging got the purple krown on Priyanka's head.
C'mon Priyanka eagerly waiting for the new word.
Kongrats Priyanka !!
Please give us one aasaan saa word so that poor klashers don't have to exert too much and we kan see more takes
@ Juhi !!
You have to use <> in place of {} for HTML Tags.
Thanks Doksaab
Thank you so so much folks... :-) And I'm so so sorry I couldn't comment and vote in time..!! :-( Won't happen again..!!
And the new word is ... MASK I guess its easy enuf Dok saab... :-)
Ciao..
Mask !! Nice word :).
So Priyanka , you are still having nightmares of the Labour Room
No Dok saab...!! Now I am doing night shifts.. ;-))
heloo helllooo!!! i know i know i am a bad bad person!!! sorry wont cut it so i wont try!!
doc saab thank u so much for your vote. getting your vote is more valuable than getting the Krown!!
i cant see who the second person to vote for me is...but the tally says 2 votes for me..so thank you to you too!!!
sarang u are right i did right it in a hurry..but not in 10 min more like in 3!!! thats why it sounds so rough and "not quite done"
since i am already too late to komment and vote i will just say well done and welcome to the new blood to put some life into us!!!
three cheers for the three musketeers!!!
can you believe i wrote "right" instead of "write" Jeez i sound like someone who does not know "lose" and "loose" or site and cite!!! :( :( boohoohoo
Hi Richa !!
Only I have voted for you, but my single vote is worth 2 points So double thanks to me :)
(Previous winners Vote is worth 3 points , every other participants vote is worth 2, and non participating klasher's vote is worth 1 point )
The Klashers are KLASHING!! :D Albeit a bit differently than we had thought, and hoped. But, all said and done, the number of new mails in my inbox exhibits how dear klash is to all of us. By the way Mandi, I love your mail.
And Sir Kaveesh (just received your "ahem" post last mail) :P thanks!
The reason that I am writing this here(apart from trying to circumvent Sarang's plea)is that this way, only klashers get to read it.
Bottomline is that we are all Krazy 'bout Klash, so lets klash!...err as in the original intended way.
Cheers!
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