Monday 26 May 2008

Shadow

SHADOW
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1. a dark figure or image cast on the ground or some surface by a body intercepting light. 2. shade or comparative darkness, as in an area. 3. shadows, darkness, esp. that coming after sunset. 4. shelter; protection: sanctuary in the shadow of the church. 5. a slight suggestion; trace: beyond the shadow of a doubt.


[ENTRIES CLOSED]
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Richa (66)

Famine, Tsunami, Floods
Hunger clawing at the intestines

Bombs, Attacks, Guns
Terror numbing the mind

They tell me
I live...
...in the shadow of death

I refuse
to give up
To give in
to such morbidity

Rain, Thunder, Sunshine
The celestial music loud yet mild

Flowers, Butterflies, Rainbows
The joyous laughter of a child

I tell them
I choose…
…to live in the shadow of hope


Santonu (117)

The blue line at the horizon was captivating, fading sunlight and the dark cloud hovered around me. The sun was setting. The shadows of uncertainty grew with the shadows of the trees, I was bone tired, the last man standing at the battle field. I sold my company today! The one I built with my own hand. Warm tears were flowing through the cheeks. I was waiting for my friends to come and sit besides me, quietly, but they never came and their shadows danced and mocked at me. I am tired and alone today, standing under this dim light I talked slowly with my shadow for long, it too deserted me as the darkness set in.


Mickey (120)

“Mickey, don’t you go out now”, shouted Dadima, “not till the eclipse is over”
“But Dadi, this is my playtime.”
“The God is in trouble and you want to play, stay here and pray with me.”
“What trouble Dadi, it’s just a solar eclipse, moon’s shadow falling on earth.”
“That demon Rahu has engulfed the Sun, and you say it’s just a shadow.”
“But Mom says…..”
“You and your Mom, She also never heeds to my advice.
Last eclipse, she argued it’s just a shadow.
You were in her womb, and despite my warning she went to her college.
Look what happened, you were born with this defect.”
I could feel it heat up as she pointed towards my tail.


Dok Saab (100)

A small bush it was,
old and stunted.
It had been there
always
for so many years,
calm dull bush,
just surviving.
I had never seen
it go dry,
shed leaves
or, flower.
*
But today,
suddenly
it was struggling
to survive.
Exposed.
Unaccustomed
to the rays of the sun
its leaves wilting.
Used only to cool breeze
it seemed to uproot
as the hot gusty wind blew.
*
But to me
it was more alive
today.
*
Even though
it had always
seemed to lived
under the shadow
of the banyan tree.
The big banyan tree
which fell
last night.


Sowmya (120)

"Can't believe this Swati! Look at yourself", Gayathri was fuming.
You have nothing left. Your children, job....why did you give up everything? For Arvind?
Gayathri thought of the enthusiastic and bubbly Swati who charmed everyone around her. People fell in love with her inspite of themselves. Everyone wanted to be with her since laughter & fun were guaranteed. Then she fell for Arvind….
Looking at her pale and spiritless sister, Gayathri could not help screaming, "What have you done to yourself? You were not like this".
"I loved to talk, Arvind liked silence. I loved my job, he felt threatened. I wanted children, he was not interested. I loved sunshine, he preferred darkness. All I am now is a shadow".


Coffee is my Poison (120)

The shadows don’t leave my dreams, my life. They chase me.

"Any female friends? Generally girls have girlfriends?" asked Dr. Singh, my psychiatrist.
"Not really."
"Why?" he persisted.
I didn't reply.

I'll tell your parents, I'll lie and they'll hit you. Do what I say. Touch me.
Here, and here... caress me. Act like you want me.
My six year old mind felt too sick to think. Ever since she hit puberty I was suffering the consequences.
Girls I found, even when I grew older, could be such FUCKING bitches, and unapologetic about it. Better being lonely than "friends" with them.

I turned on the lights, in my heart and my mind...
The shadows, will flee. I won't suffer them.


Yuvraj Jhaa (118)

Blank stage. Hard sunlight.
Remaltron — wearing posh clothes.
Stangtron — wearing middle class clothes.


(Remaltron) —sweating— There is something dark…really dark…at night it engulfs me…it takes over…its everywhere.
(Strangtron) —calm but curious— Where is it now?
(Remaltron) —further sweating— Look behind me…it follows me…it will follow me till eternity.
(Strangtron) —loosing his calm— WHERE is it?
(Remaltron) —without turning— Look…it must be somewhere.
(Strangtron) —angry— There’s just your shadow!
(Remaltron) —fear takes over— Yes!…is it there?…is it near?
(Strangtron) —alarmed— What is wrong with you?
(Remaltron) —speaking low— Its pitch black, and when it seeps into me after sunset…(weeping) it takes over.
(Remaltron) —speaking to himself— Its nothing…nothing but your religion, that has devoured you of beauty…and instilled fear.


Sarang (120)

Lallan sells pirated CDs on a carpet at Gandhi Putla Chowk. A booming business. Teenagers flock in for the latest movies. But that’s not the real secret of his success. They visit repeatedly for the blue-films he hides under his carpet. They only have to say ‘Bapu’, the code-word for BP, and he produces a bunch of them with mouth-watering pictures and provoking titles like – ‘Sali, Puri Gharwali.’

‘How do you manage it?’ a man asked astonished.

‘The kind shadow of this statue of Bapuji protects me from sun,’ he answered.

‘No, I mean this illegal business.’

‘Ah, that I do under the kind shadow of cops,’ he says spitting aside. ‘I give them five Gandhis a day.’


Nandini (120)

Seeing his wife laugh with her childhood friend, a shadow of doubt appeared in his mind. Gloom descended, he started to waste himself. Work filled late nights, shutting out of loved ones, the shadow turned to depression.

Wife’s anxiety grew, and he ended up visiting a doctor.

“Tension” was the doc’s verdict.

“Why” was wife’s reaction

Silence was the man’s defense.

One day, after another sleepless night, he glanced at the mirror and saw a mere shadow of his former self and a big shadow covering his mind.

Enough! he decided. He pulled back the curtains, let the sunshine filter through the room, and his mind. He had to get the lighting right, illuminate his mind, to vanquish the shadow.


Juhi, the Fragrant (120)

“Mooooom!” My 2 year old son was running across the playground as fast as his pudgy little legs could carry him, and shouting louder than his lungs would ever have allowed.
“What?! What happened?” I was terrified that something had happened to him, while I was gossiping with that no good Swati! “Did someone say something to you? Did you fall off the swing?”
“Swing?! Those are for GIRLS! I am a BOY.” Declared my almost a metre high son.
“Oh?!” I sighed. “Mom…” inching closer he whispered “there is someone following me.” “Oh?! Who is it?” I looked around wondering. “Not up, look down” my son admonished. I complied and burst into peals of laughter. It was his shadow.


Ruchika Bajoria (110)

While traversing the pathways of the moors, he didn't pause to appreciate its beauty. If only he hadn't been such a rash fool. He should've spoken with care. If he didn't get there soon, it would be too late. The brewing tempest outside, articulated his inner turmoil.


He entered her chambers stealthily. Head bent in thought, her back towards him, she was the embodiment of ethereal beauty. He moved closer and his shadow fell upon her. Fear constricted his throat as he reached for her. She crumpled in his arms. Lifeless and sunken, there were shadows under her eyes. In her death, she was a shadow of her true self!


Lord Summer, the Stallion Poet (111)

To the distant land of Far-far-away
I left once in the morning all alone
The road was empty like a bald human’s head
Boredom was deep in my bone

‘What a dreary trip, still two days to reach,’
I whispered feeling sad
‘Yes, O yes! You’re always so right,’
Someone answered… scaring me bad

I swung my head from side to side,
‘Who’s that?’ I cried out shrill.
I jumped up high, when my Shadow answered
‘It’s me, O Stallion of Steel.’

I ran hard and straight, right till sunset
And there I was, at Far-far-away
My Shadow sniggered, ‘Thank me later for the ride.’
‘We’ll meet in the morning anyway!’


Mandappa (116)

"Shadows"
Its hours before sunrise
Hours after the fireflies
When reality fades away
And the shadows come to play

It's four in the morning
And the dawns not breaking

Mind numb from sleeplessness
Sleepless from numbness
Colours begin to go away
When the shadows take over the day

It's four in the morning
And the dawns not breaking

Dizzy, tipsy from the night over
The bed and sleep, still a distant cover
Headaches will eat into your day
Until then shadows will drive your way

It's four in the morning
And the dawns not breaking

The shadows in my head
The shadows in my bed
The shadows of reality
The shadows that won't let me be

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Rajat Mukherjee (120)

The shadows of my past haunt me; I have failed, over and over again. I still don’t know how I turned up like this, tormented by the despot within, shackled by my senses, inhibited by my own presence, catatonic, I have failed, oh the shadows, I fear them.

Once I thought of winning, I failed, once I thought of loving, I failed, once I thought of redemption, I failed, now I think of living, and I know I shall fail, again, oh the shadows of my past. I fear them, oh the shadows.

I retrospect, all seem nothing but a lay of failure, euphony for others, a swan song for me, oh the shadows, I detest them, I fear them.


Amey Mujumdar (94)

I am the feared obscurity.
Keep away.
But if you are beaten down, I am refuge.
Come to me and recoup.

I am the last place desired.
I hide losers from the brightness.
I shelter them when they are low.
But they survive to step out again.

I have a shifty nature.
I am small when heat is high.
Long when it is low.
But I am with you.

I am the meanest veil.
I shroud your success.
But step out of me and there is light.
Where I am, there is always light.

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98 comments:

Sarang Mahajan said...

Nice Klash!
Send in your entries, all those who haven't yet.

Yuvraj Jha said...

There are some changes in my klash..could you please rectify them..i am sure its because of bloogers correctino problem..but the piece has lost its pattren...please check...the italics, and the places where a new dialogue starts...each dialogue has a new line...

thank you to sarang pai sahab...

Sarang Mahajan said...

@ Yuvraj: check it out, Sir. I hope it has been properly taken care of now.

Sarang Mahajan said...

Welcome back, Shantonu and Richa! :-)

And where are so many of last time's debutant klashers? Ruchika, Rajat, Shantaram, Maggie, Sneha, Amey and whoever it is I am missing.

Ruchika said...

I hope I'm not too late to post my entry!!

@Sarang: I'm sending it in 2 minutes. Is it still valid?

Sarang Mahajan said...

@Ruchika: It is valid up to 8.00 PM tonight.

coffeeismypoison said...

yes!finally!!!
amazing klashes...n may i say that the picture is amazing too.
@nandini : omg, we nearly always have similar entries!

The Konfessioners said...

@ Sweta: We are glad that you liked the picture. It took us only a minute to find it.

NonsSens said...

CIMP - Heheheh- havent u heard that gr8 minds think alime :-))
(We'll conveniently forget the second part...that fools seldom differ)

Mickey said...

Welkom back Lord Summer !!!

Unknown said...

Thanks a lot, brother Lord Mickey! :-)
Nice to be amongst the humans and a monkey again!

The Konfessioners said...

Welcome back, Mandi! :-)

Ruchika said...

Wow!! Awesome klash, although quite a few people from the previous klash seem to be missing. Are there going to be no more entries???(a VERY sad looking face)

p.s. Does anyone have a clue as to how to use the various text options here...do let me know please.

Yuvraj Jha said...

thank the you sarang pai saahab!!
thank the you!!! sab sahi hai...ab aao kab band ho ga entry!! toh bakar shuru karte hain!!!

Sarang Mahajan said...

Entries are closed now, Mowgly. You can start commenting. I wonder why the comments are so slow today?

richa said...

what a diverse group of people we are!! such varied takes on a single word!!
good to see some old stalwarts again...welcome Summer and Mickey and Santonou...u were missed

Yuvraj Jha said...

arre koi toh comment maaroo!! sab log pata nahi kahan chale gaye!! how busy is everyone? missy-of-the-twin-aged-didi, where is the you?

mein toh kal maarunga..abhi tohda digest kar raha hun..for once mickey bhai hai a serious take, given that i understood it..and if its supposed to be funny then i didnt..ehhehee...but realy liked it...hale the jungle raaj!! hehehe

Unknown said...

Thank you Lady Richa!

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Unknown said...

Friends, Here is my poem nominated for Noble Prize –

"A Shadow and a Lion"

Once upon a time there was a shadow
She liked butterscotch ice-cream,
because she was a widow

Twice upon a time, there were two shadows
They too liked the butterscotch ice-cream,
Because they were also widows

Thrice upon a time, there were three shadows
But they liked vanilla ice-cream
Even though they were also widows

Shadows are mystery, mysteries are shadows
They might like any ice-cream
When they could all be widows

- Lord Summer,
the Stallion Who Eats Ice-cream

coffeeismypoison said...

Allow me to be the first to komment... get things going a bit...todays been slow hmm...

coffeeismypoison said...

and now...in order of appearance...

1.] Richa : I loved it simply loved it!full of hope... optimism and pessimism...lovely..and in so few words too!!

2.] Santonu : hmmm... the despair,loneliness come through quite well...but you've overused the word...I understand the loneliness though...not many friends come through in times of need, of despair.and we do feel mocked.well put.

3.] Mickey : hahahaha!! the dadima in your take sounded just like my mom...as kids we weren't allowed holidays from school..parents were quite strict.but the day of the solar eclipse was a sure holiday for us cos my mom was orthodox in that regard!I do feel sorry for ur tail monkey :o) if i may help,allow me!
BTW... MY VOTE to mickey!!

4.] Dok Saab : awesome. not your usual style but nevertheless just as and maybe more effective... i wonder if you realize just how many types of shadows you've spoken about here...
dominance...living under someone's shadow.
Suppression/ Oppression - Pushed down into someone's shadow.
shadows of depression... when one appears to almost have no life until one day, suddenly one pushes away the shadows and decides to live...
amazing..and u have used **** this time making sure 'blogger' doesn't mess up in anyway... :o)

5.] Sowmya : A common occurrence, very well put forth... mistakes we make being foolhardy and over optimistic and madly in love, literally, and then being doomed to the shadows... well written...

6.] Coffee : about time you wrote this story.ooohhh look at the anger...!

7.] Yuvraj : whew. Scary and so so true... religion is meant to instill love but we misuse and misinterpret it.
When i was little, one day I went around asking everyone in my class [1st grade], including my teachers etc whether they were scared of "God"... and they were shocked that i eve nhad to ask... " of course we're scared of God!" they all replied every one of them...
then i went home and asked my mom the same question...
she wasnt shocked...she casually said no ofcourse shes no scared of God...
i pretended to be shocked...like everyone in school had been...i gasped!!"huh!! ur not?why?"
"well,I havent done anything wrong...whats there to be scared about?I do the right thing as far as i can, i dont lie or steal or anything...theres no need to be scared of God or anyone at all...just be right."
I've never been scared of things since...now much to the despair of my mom who thinks i shud be at least scared of living alone or of strangers or my dad but im not...n its all her doing!

8.] SArang : I LOVE the irony!!i love it!!it made me wonder whether to laugh or cry...excellent...how do u come up with such stuff?

9.] Nandini : Wat ya?same same writing...kya bolun samajh nahi aaraha...but i love the idea...certainly its different and v.well written :o)

10.] juhi : AWWWWW!!!SO cute...and i've heard this before...kids get scared of their own shadows...i wondered if anyone would write abt this perspective :o) i'm so glad u did...well put v.well put indeed.

11.] Ruchika B : hmm. honestly? ur last klash was better.sorrryyy but this reminded me of a paragraph out of a Mills n boon kinda novel... n i dislike those...for the reason they are pretty unrealistic...no one swoons looking at anyones beauty n wen i once fainted my boyfriend dint think i was the embodiment of etheral beauty [worse luck] he thot i looked pale,wan and sick.
kya yaar...write something na..again...

12.] Lord summer : haha...bald human's head...hehe... loved it. I could just picture the valiant stallion rearing up n jumping and running...the brave stallion indeedy :oD

13.] Mandi : u were the choice for my vote if i wasn't missing my mom and being senti :o) the minute i read ur take i wanted to vote for it.so i guess thats comment enuf huh? ;oP

IN CASE OF MY VOTE BEING MISSED LET ME AGAIN SAY ITS TO MICKEY...
MANDI, RICHA, DOKSAAB, SARANG CAME CLOSE TOO...

coffeeismypoison said...

OH MY...ive gone really into kommenting havent I?inspired by ruchika :o)

Unknown said...

Lord summer, Your poem is chumma (the icecream one)!! i hereby become your official fan..
please accept my greetings!

Unknown said...

Looks, like a good klash.. i had no clue how you guys would respond to 'shadow'.. but must confess its been a great endavour.

Unknown said...

Would agree with u coffee.. its a nice pic.. looks like a Psycedelic rock album cover to me.. good work if took only a min.. ;)

malted socktail said...

RIcha , u missed everyone but me is it !!! humpf :(

and thanks coffee :)

Mickey said...

Hurrey !!
The Monkey gets the first Vote :)

Mickey said...

The Votes so far !!
Mickey, the Monkey-------1(CIMP)

Mickey said...

:( No new komer in this Klash :(

richa said...

Mr Malted Socktail...Of course I mised you...and I also missed seeing your entry...sorry baba kaan pakad ke sorry!! :D

richa said...

Mr Malted Socktail...Of course I mised you...and I also missed seeing your entry...sorry baba kaan pakad ke sorry!! :D

richa said...

Lord Summer, Stellar as your Nobel prize winning poem is, I must register my formal protest for not mentioning "four upon a time there were 4 shadows" as the 4 shadow widows feel slighted and not represented as they like tooty fruity ice cream. is there some discrimination against tooty fruity?? please recitfy your poem to include the above mentioned...

the legal counsel for the 4 shadow widows

:P

richa said...

ha ha and I will write short messages here but shant Komment...
you wonder why??!! well I am at work and if nothing else i HAVE to pretend to be working!! so no Komments...aaj ke liye Klash ki janta ko mere komments se vanchit rakha jata hai!! Muuuahahahaha

Ruchika said...
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Ruchika said...

'm glad to have ""influenced"" you into commenting extensively. That way, I get better ideas about how to improve myself. My reasons were purely selfish you understand... [:)]
I wasn't too happy with my entry either. But I was hard pressed for time and this was the best I could do.
Thankyou for your suggestions. While I was trying my hand at writing a sombre piece, coz I really liked the idea of a cross between R&J and Wuthering Heights, I guess, the execution left a lot to be desired.
I hope to be better next time.

Ruchika said...

Btw, that was for CIMP

Unknown said...

All right, all right. No need to sue a valiant stallion for not including the fourth stanza in his poem, Lady Richa. Here is another version of my poem nominated for the Noble Prize –

"The Shadow, the Lion and the Tutti-frutti Ice-cream!*"

Once upon a time there was a shadow
She liked butterscotch ice-cream,
because she was a widow

Twice upon a time, there were two shadows
They too liked the butterscotch ice-cream,
Because they were also widows

Thrice upon a time, there were three shadows
But they liked vanilla ice-cream
Even though they were also widows

Four upon a time there were four shadows
Two liked bonbons, and two loved tutti-frutti**
Whereas even this lot were all widows

Shadows are mystery, mysteries are shadows
They might like any ice-cream
When they could all be widows

- Lord Summer,
the Stallion Who Eats Ice-cream

* Thanks Lady Richa, the title now sounds like the first Narnia Book!

** This is for the Noble-prize-committee. The later addition to my masterpiece poem is all due to the legal trouble caused by a human female named Lady Richa who once lived somewhere in a Sausage Land across seven oceans. If I do not win the Noble, she should be held responsible and be severely punished by adorning her face with Tutti-frutti.

Santonu said...

Mickey u've got 2 points not 1! the rules have changed a bit :)

Sarang Mahajan said...

I wonder why comments have been at such a low pace, and where Dok Saab has been? :o

Mickey said...

The Revised Votes so far !!

Mickey, the Monkey-------2(CIMP)

Thanks Santonu :)

Sarang Mahajan said...

Let me break the jinx of no komments. The jinxed No. 41. :D

Ruchika said...

Since NO ONE wants to komment and it's FRIDAY already, I'm going to give my comments in the HOPES that others will follow suit.

In the order of appearance:

1)Richa: I loved the idea and the concept. Although, I thought that the execution wasn't too successful in bringing forth what you wanted. Sometimes, when I write, because I've written the piece, it blends well and makes sense to me coz unconsciously or subconsciously, I know what I'm trying to portray but, to a third person, it fails to impress. The imagery comes out well but, as a whole, this left me unsatisfied. Sorry.

2)Santonu: I loved it. Captures the feelings of a man down on his luck pat right.Maybe the spacing could have been worked upon. That would have ADDED to the pleasure of reading. Although, fortunately, it does nothing to diminish the impact of your writing. Crisp, painfully true and still beautiful. Its a tall order but you successfully managed to achieve it all.

3)Mickey: I love your writing style. It always makes me smile. After a hard day's work, I love reading your pieces coz they make me smile and entertain me. I enjoyed this one even more than the last one. The last one succeeded in making me taste the agony of your protagonist and this one took me back in time to that point in my life when me and my grandmother had had a similar conversation. Beautifully written and portrays the varied points of view of an adult and a child. Highly Refreshing!

4)DokSaab: Very articulate and enjoyable. The imagery is perfect. I could visualize the entire scenario as if I was right there. I didn't understand the style of writing, and so maybe, it didn't work for me as much as it would have if I'd understood your style.A very innovative approach to the word. Just like they say "the simplest thing is the most complicated". It's such a common usage of the word and yet nobody else touched it.

5)Sowmya: I relished ALMOST every word you wrote. What awes me the most is that you pick up such everyday issues which we're suffocated and yet fail to notice. And with your pen, they come to life!! Your keen eye makes mundane regularities come alive. I could almost FEEL the angst and helpless fury or Gayathri and the misery of Swati. Can't wait to get my hands on your next piece. I also felt that the ending tempered the intensity of the text and it sounded a little too self-pitiful. Not an emotion I wanted to feel. I would've like to feel Swati's helplessness and the strength with which she altered her life completely to suit a man. But, all that remained with me was her self-pity.That somewhat ruined it for me.

6)CIMP: Oh My God!! I don't know HOW you manage to put such off-beat ideas into 120 words :o)!!! Didn't understand the significance of the last two lines but...that's just me! I had never even imagined that there could be this particular aspect to the word shadow. The opening sentence and the 2nd last one seemed a little contradictory and confused me. Good writing. I hope you would make a ""lengthier short story"" of it. Very strong writing.

7)Yuvraj Jha: I'm going to again, like last time, ask you to elucidate. Your writing style is difficult for me to grasp!

8)Sarang: WOW! Like Sowmya, your writing has the effect of effectively stunning me everytime. Even better than your last piece. Direct, concise and clear. Highly Satisfying. Talks about our societal vices with candor and yet its beautiful!

9)Nandini: Your writing struck a very prominent chord with me. I've seen so many relations break in similar situations but I adored that message of hidden hope. It encourages me to move forward as one of my cherished relations is in almost the same sorry state. Thankyou.

10)Juhi, the Fragrant: You're a MEAN MEAN MEAN MEAN sister! I'd heard of love creating connections and even of Voldemort ""hacking"" into Harry's mind. And now you've done the same to me!! For every Klasher out there, my sister managed to TELEPATHICALLY steal my idea of a child being scared of his own shadow and managed to submit it one night before i did. Ok, enough ranting and raving... I loved your piece. Reminded me of running up to you with the wierdest and most stupid questions and your patience in answering them. For further analysis of your piece, CALL ME, my bill is sky-rocketing!

11)Ruchika Bajoria: Hmmm...Do a better execution of ideas the next time.

12)Lord Summer, the Stallion Poet: I don't know if your piece is inspired by that movie Spirit, but it reminded me of a scene in it. Beautiful! Right till the shadow speaks, you successfully managed to delude me into believing that the protagonist was a human. My favourite lines were "The road was...in my bone" and "My shadow sniggered..." These clinched it for me!

13)Mandappa: The way you've played with words left me speechless. I've spent numerous nights, numb from sleeplessness and sleepless for numbness although not because I was tipsy. I could relate to the weariness. I liked it. Enjoyable.

14)Rajat Mukherjee: Slightly sombre and morose. Well executed. As a reader, I'm not fond of reading a sombre piece but, as a writer, I understand that such pieces are hard to pull off and applaud your success. I'm not impressed as a reader simply because I dislike such writing but I think that you deserve high praise from everyone around for the sheer beauty and magic of the piece.

15)Amey Majumdar: Nice. I felt as if a real Shadow (or as real as a shadow gets) was speaking to me. Seemed a little auto-boigraphical but then the first I've read in a poetry style. Loved it. However, you haven't used the word Shadow. With so many words at you disposal, I'm certain you could have created the same magic AND fufilled the condition of the klash. But I must applaud your writing for the simplicity with which it connected with me. Anyone who had no clue of the word given to us would have been able to guess it by your text. Not an easy thing but you pulled it off stupendously!

That's that then. Since quite a few pieces have left me confused, I'm refraining from casting my vote in the hopes that the comments of fellow klashers or they themselves will elucidate and clarify my doubts.

Unknown said...

Quite a smart way of refraining from voting, I must say.. lol .. Hey Ruchika, thanx for the comments.. Beware!! your sis uses orkut as a port key ;) chill.. your article wasn’t that bad, I quite liked it and it isn’t a travesty of assurance. looks like coffee and Juhi are making you learn the harder way :)

I had enquired about the usage of the word in the klash but was told it isn’t a requisite as long as you speak about the subject however agree with you that it’s a safer bet to use the word itself…

Rajat S. Mukherjee said...

Alright....did i miss something....this time round I don't feel like casting my vote, or may be I'll cast it later on, lets see what the others have to say, what's wit hthe tepid pace of response, the weather???

NonsSens said...

Here go my Komments & Vote.....

RICHA-Despair's dark shadow turning to hope's playful shadow. Nice piece....always like an optimistic conclusion. Well potrayed.

SANTONU- Your last line is really nice.....with darkness even the shadow is gone.....hmmm - the last man standing with just no hope. Nice take - but very melancholic.

MICKEY - Wow - a awesome twist in your tale ;-)) Really loved it.

DOKSAAB - "More alive" with the shadow of supposed protection gone....great thought. As usual, different & nice.

SOWMYA- Sad realities of life..Well written and you've used the theme well....but only thing I felt was that the story is very common.

CIMP- Hey I'm quite a sucker for happy endings...so liked the hopeful ending....And I really dont think our stories are similar - you touch upon a more complex problem....and have written it in a better way (mine is more abt plain old jealousy)

YUVRAJ-Hmm - stark & grim. Somehow I think you revel in writing about the grimness of life...and prob get it out wonderfully well too. ....The shadow of fear devouring one of one's beauty. Cool. (Dont want to start a debate...but is "religion" that dark? Fanatism is...but religion??? Dont know)

SARANG-Hey...nicely different. Really liked it.

JUHI-Hehehe....poor little kid. Nice, cute & sweet piece. (Sorry for using such cliched words...but cute is what I thought was the essence of our piece).

RUCHIKA-Filmy......hmmm. So-so.

LORD SUMMER-The last two lines were really cool.

MANDAPPA- Hey....there you go again. Another of your oieces which could so easily be set into a song. You know, you, Mickey & Yuvraj always have a typical style....Nicely written...Inimitable Mandappa :-))

RAJAT-Ummm nice one. Grim...and sad....but in sync with the theme.Most of us have thought of "shadow" to be a grim, pessimistic phenomena.

AMEY-Wow....loved some of your lines "I'm the last place desired"...."But I am with you"...and the clicher "Where I am there is always light"
Really captured all the emotions good & proper....technically, the best piece while writing about the theme.

My Vote - Can it be divided (1 point each) between Mickey & Sarang? (Loved the tiwst in their tales)

Sowmya :) said...

Hi ppl
Looks like we r going very slow on the comments front this time....
Here goes my list

1.Richa -Very optimistic and loved the way u have used the word 'Shadow' Ur entry would have been a nice fit for last week's word too.

2. Santonu -the lonliness of the man was very well potrayed...

3. Mickey -damn cool! Nandini put it perfectly....fantastic twist in ur tale

4. Dok Saab -'living under the shadow'...awesome!

5.Sowmya -well....need to think out of the box and get some new ideas instead of common ones....

6.CIMP -'Shadows of the past haunting'..very well brought out...could actually feel ur story!

7. Yuvraj -hmmm I may not agree with ur idea of religion instilling fear and robbing someone of beauty...but u have executed ur idea very well! Spot on

8. Sarang -WOW! awesome...fantastic...amazing! The irony is shown extremely well. Could not have thought of a better way to use the word 'shadow'. My vote to u

9.Nandini -'plain old jealousy', sure. but very well written

10.Juhi -I know u r goin to hear this few more times but there is no other word I can think of....Its so CUTE :) The scene played in front of my eyes as i read it...damn nice :)

11. Ruchika -Firstly thx for ur comments...I did not intend her to be self-pitying but I guess thats how she sounds.
Ur piece reminds me of all the Mills & Boon I read through college...except for the happy endings part.

12. Lord Summer -Like ur style of writin...'empty like a bald human head'... ur shadow poems in the comments section r so funny! Gud luck for that Nobel Prize

13. Mandappa -I cud feel a sense of despair in ur poem....the last line is too good 'The shadows of reality, The shadows that wont let me be'...fabulous

14. Rajat -Got the feeling of total hopelessness...nicely executed!

15. Amey -That was really good....wonderfully written, a deep thought conveyed very simply...best was the last 2 lines 'But step out of me and there is light.
Where I am, there is always light'

To repeat, my vote -Sarang! Keep Kalshing Konfessioners :)

Unknown said...

few of my Komments(in alphabetical order)

1. Amey Mujumdar---
So it was your word, Amey, Nice choice.
But why didnt you use the word?
Without that it sounded like a riddle we asked as kids-
I have a shifty nature.
I am small when heat is high.
Long when it is low.
But I am with you.
Who am I?


2. Coffee is my Poison---
Now that even Malted Socktail and Mowgli have started using thier real names, why dont you too, Sweta without a H
A very different take from you this time. I think thats your passion, becoming a good psychiatrist, i mean :).
Lovey interpretation of shadow.

3. Juhi, the Fragrant---
Finally you got it back, the fragrance :)
Cute !!, what else :)
by the way, your two year old son is tall. 99 cms is the average height of a four yr old boy (what else did you expect from a child specialist)

4. Lord Summer, the Stallion Poet---
NIce to see your shadow back, O great assenine err um I mean equine poet.

5. Mandappa ---
Lovely song, as always, Mandappa :)

6. Mickey ---
So you have once again dragged your tail into klash, Monkey.
But I must say, your koncepts about the eclipses are very clear, they are shadows of celestial bodies after all.
(and your dadima must be a happy lady wen your tail was amputated accidently by that famous Dr Saab.

7. Nandini ---
Shadow of doubt will not vanish, bright light may only diminish it.
Thats what I think, but Nice take :)

8. Rajat Mukherjee---
Haunting shadows of past failures, good thinking. sentiments just the opposite to your past take though. I hope you are enjoying your stay in Klash, rajat.

9. Richa ---
After a long break, Richa. Lovely take, shadow of death contrasting with shadow of Hope.

More to kome ...soon

Unknown said...

10. Ruchika Bajoria---
Your komments are even more appealing than your take this klash. It is the kommentaters like you, who motivate me to write for every klash, even though I am also a busy practitioner strugling with time management.
As for your take, I feel it is beautiful, but the word limit has taken its toll.

11. Santonu ---
Very poetic !!
(Reminds me of a poem from movie Silsila, Mai aur meri tanhai aksar ye baate karte hain)

12. Sarang ---
Lallan !! Very bollywoodish name !!
Shady business under the shadow of Bapu, most of India is doing that only. Nice take on the word.

13. Sowmya ---
Mismatched marriage and a compromised life, well thats a very common story, nicely described. But somehow I feel this is not justifying the theme word very effectively, Saumya.

14. Yuvraj Jhaa ---
Very interesting dialogue !
But whats this reference to religion, can you please elaborate, Yuvi.

My vote to
Lord Summer, the Stallion Poet ,
for such kreativity.

malted socktail said...

ok here goes...

richa : i love hope too... neat...

santonu: a different take... ill give u that...and ure first lines are awesome. .

mickey: typical u.. but jus a personal thing... if ure stickin to a single theme..(monkey) , try making it more exciting or find sharper angles to cut it, cuz one half of ure write ups are always known :)

dok saab: dont know if there was a hidden filosophy but a really nice take.

sowmya: decent story... very real and raw...

coffee::: intense like really... intense....a coffee and a conversation with u im thinkin will be intense like this !

yuvraj: i like the gimmick or style but not too sure of the ending...

sarang: knowin ure style, this isnt ure best... u cudve done a little more with the same subject, tho ill tellu that its a subject well chosen...

nandine: interesting

juhi: cute enough but it wont excel in my sheet...

ruchika: well because the shadow of herself thing has been said before... i feel u needed more words for this same story than uve used...not a tight one but nice

lord summer: good as always...storyline, dunt kno but good writing...

rajat: nice ... somethign im missing and i dont know what... if its the punch ?

amey : ure last line is amazing..a simple but killer take on shadows...the fact of light being there , where a shadow is... it really is amazing in its simplicity..

if u can split my votes
betweemn

coffee for her rawness reality
and
amey for that last line

Missy Baba said...

Last votes to be kast in by 6:00 p.m. today please! Verdikt to be sent by 8!

Ruchika said...

My vote: Juhi

SIMPLY BECAUSE YOU WROTE EXACTLY WHAT I WANTED TO AND YOU WROTE IT WELL. I loved the sheer simplicity of the piece. Remained with me a long time after all others faded!

Sarang Mahajan said...

People, please do not split your votes.

Sarang Mahajan said...

Missy, I know it is very late, but please give us a bit more time. :(

coffeeismypoison said...

so so slow...time for replies~!
@ruchika : I am somewhat offbeat n so i just put whatever comes to my mind on paper,figuratively speaking...my take is an extract from a story,a short story which is unfinished but what is done can be read here ... its not done yet but thats the bit that bloggable. the initial and final sentences are supposed to be contradictory...the first line is from someone who is in intense pain...n the last from the same person making the decision to get rid of the pain,to get better so to speak... making a decision is half the battle won wont u say? thats all.its pretty simply.i wonder if its clear tho...young girl forced to engage in m********n with another girl, thus leaving a scar in her mind therefore not having famale friends as an adult. if u read the actuall story theres a twist ahead...
and i write based on what has happened...meaning nothing i write is fictional...thats y its so easy.

@nonsens : i know...no same but its wierd that ur theme also revolved around 2 chicks :o) thats unusual themewise u knw..n its happened before too!

@amey : its better to use the word...cos otherwise, one poem/prose piece maybe capable of representing more than one theme...say love Vs hope...or shadows Vs ghosts...

@Dok Saab : Inshaa Allah sir, maybe one day!and i dont know how to put my name...when i sign in then CIMP comes...n to be honest... im a bit proud of my nick :D hee hee.

@malted socktail : thanks for ur half vote!!! :D made my day!

@missy,sarang : shirking responsibility are we?refraining from kommenting?denying us ur wisdom and unabashed clarity?not fair!!!!!

Sarang Mahajan said...

Sweta: No, no. I have to leave of station in about an hour. Have nebeen preparing for the trip all this time. Shall vote and komment soon.

Missy Baba said...

haha okay.. I'll wait! One reminder shall be sent then!

My komments and vote...

1.Empress-- "I refuse to give up, I refuse to give in"...I almost sang that bit?! haha.. Blue! but that's a co-incidence.. also, god.. i'm depressed I know of the boyband.. I live in the shadow of puraani girl choices haha :). Back to your take, strong and typical of you.. I enjoyed it. Particularly how you chose to tell them to live in the "shadow of hope". The juxtaposition of the ugly/fearsome with the beautiful/loving is much appreciated.

2.Santonu-- So good to read you again! Except for a couple of grammatical errors, I love the desolateness of your post.. how his shadow leaves him too. You might have had my vote if it wasn't for the form.. You simply must work on the form.. I'll look after it this week when you post in..we'll work on it together.. :) you have such great potential and yet you muck it up with the language occasionally, and its not that your English is "bad" you are just in a hurry.. that is all. A very original and painfully conceived little klash.. I enjoyed it most.

3.Mickey-- Oh dear, good to see you back too!! I met some of your relatives in Ranthambhore and Sarang was komplaining I gave them too much .jpg importance haha. :) I always look forward to your klashes.. you're an auteur you know, spinning these little hives of stories..setting us ablaze with the tiny sting at the end.. very enjoyable yet again.. Stay with us! :).

4.Dok Saab-- Very delicate and with a heavy undertone..!! I'd have however preferring "as hot gusts of wind shook" and "seemed to have lived".. what is heavy about it is, the shortness yet age and that moment of it's liveliness (to the narrator..)when the wind shook it and it came to life.. if you put more time to this Dok Saab, you may make something Wordsworthian of it. Let me know if you'd like to prune it for you?! :)

5.Sowmya-- Been there, seen that.. An important take (women's lib speaking..ahem ahem!) haha.. no seriously, all of it is good and fine except, somehow I'd have liked Swati to say nothing except complete something the other girl was saying with " i'am but a shadow"..and you could've described the dark circles under her eyes, her appearance and defeat...and how she bitterly/hopelessly considers herself a shadow.. while the sun is behind her..you could've played with the sun of her being a little more..I think that;s what you were trying.. :) a cool take, nevertheless.

6.CIMP-- I do hope this isn't a personal account..? very of us can claim to have not suffered something similar.. you're right about girls, especially when they hit puberty.. great take. You have my vote this week. Your best ever.

7.to be kontd..!

Sowmya :) said...

@ Missy
Thts exactly what i was tryin to say! Will try to improve this further. thx a lot!

malted socktail said...

ok fine
then my ful vote
for
COFFEE.....again for the same reasons

AMEY, my apologies..:P but still a killer line...

Rajat S. Mukherjee said...

My Vote goes to Mickey.....very well written....the simian has some gray matter....

Mickey said...

Sorry People, Too busy to Komment this time :(
But I would definitely kast my Vote.
My Vote to:
Juhi

for a very cute description of a male child's psychology, his small masculine ego , even though he fears his shadow :)

Mickey said...

Thanks Rajat bhai !!
for doing a CAT Scan of my simian brain :)

Unknown said...

really really sorry to comment late.. and what do I see, my half a vote is gone.. U Koffee kahi ki :D, hmm..thats ok.. Guess ur klash was better. Thanks malted cocktail neways, (Take care the nxt time)

Unknown said...

Will give my views later.. But must eulogize - Mickey, Somya, and Juhi (& ruchika coz juhi stole her thoughts) u guys rocked..

thought a lot before making a choice. But hey, this ones better than captain Demero. Compliments for your take on Bapu ;) My vote to you Sarang.

Unknown said...

hey!! where's Mickey ?
will someone kount the votes ??

Ruchika said...

Where is everybody??? Come ON people....we have to start This week's klash too!!!

richa said...

sorry for being sooo late but my vote goes to
[b]Juhi[/b]capturing the innocence of the shadow!!

richa said...

urggghhhhhhhhhhhh how does one bold here??!!

NonsSens said...

Richa - Get the < & > paranthesis & not [ & ]

Rajat S. Mukherjee said...

Aren't we supposed to declare the winner....seems to be the smart simian.....but then...as a formality....and lets have the word for next week....I wonder what will mickey come up with if he wins....

Sowmya :) said...

Hey ppl!
Wassup?? why is no one kommenting / voting / counting the votes?? I tried to the last part. here goes -

Mickey -5 (CIMP, Rajat & split vote from Nandini)

Sarang -6 (Sowmya, Amey & split vote from Nandini)

Juhi -6 (Ruchika, Mickey, Richa)

CIMP -2 (Malted Socktail & Missy)

Lord Summer -2(Dok Saab)

Amey's vote is 3 pts. Malted Socktail and Missy Baba votes are 1 point each and the rest of the votes at 2 pts each.
So whats the klash policy in case of a tie???

Non voting klashers include Yuvraj, Santonu, Sarang, Juhi, Lord Summer, Mandappa

Mickey said...

Thanks Sowmya, for doing this great job which I thought only I could do :)
But Sowmya, Mandappa = Malted Socktail, so there is some korrection.
the revised votes So Far

(if Nonsens is allowed to split votes)
Juhi----6(Ruchika+Mickey+Richa)
Sarang----6(1/2 of Nonsens+Sowmya+Amey)
Mickey----5(CIMP+ 1/2 of Nonsens+Rajat)
CIMP------3(Missy+Mandappa)
Lord Summer--------2(DokSaab)

coffeeismypoison said...

hey!!
not everyone has kommented!
jaldi jaldi get the winner and the word.if the klash is to be put up by monday...
@soumya, mickey : wow.how do u do it...the vote counting i mean.i cant even count the words in my klash!

Santonu said...

Richa Beautiful take, I liked the line...Rain, Thunder, Sunshine The celestial music loud yet mild" about shadow of hope, i have a doubt is the word shadow signifies pessimism here? pardon my dumbheadness :)

Mickey Typical of you, very nice, u know u r becoming predictable:)(didn't it sound like "Ha Ha! mickey nice one :D")

Dok saab nice one, being the oldest klasher, its not your regularity but u r consistent nice takes impresses me always. I just wanted to know could you put the shadow at the beginning too, not of the baniyan tree though

Sowmyayou could portray the adjustments often people makes in order to stop the fragile relation from crash. Good use of the word shadow

CIMP Wonderful, you really brought out the darkness of the shadow, a topic i guess we didn't see much in klashes

Yuvraj I can remeber only a few occasion somebody took out a part from a play, ireally an innovative effort

Sarangeach of u r piece is very different, the pun is hard to miss, long shadows of Gandhi really still bothers us

Nandini I felt u have put more inside 120 words, there were many things conveyed. I understand u wanted to leave a positive note. you probaly need not use the shadow of doubt explicitly at the begining, it was evident

JuhiTough one to be put within 120 words :) and i think first one to use shadow literaly, very nice in reading

Ruchika I felt the u need to work upon the first couple of lines the thrust would have been more, as the last lines really left good impact

Lord summer Once horse and monkey stole the klash show its good to find both of u back together. I used similar shadow which leaves in the darkness, looks like u r having some warm up before u get back to form :)

Mandappa Nice rhyme mandappa, in the third stanga is it "colours will begin to go away?

Rajat beautiful take, liked the last lines, i felt probaly u were restricted by the word limit. Write it in full i am sure all here will love it

Amey I think keeping u r piece at the end was appropriate, although many of us had a pessimistic approach towards the word, u tried to put it different ly. Beautiful poem


and I am voting for CIMP

Santonu said...

thanks everyone for the komment, it was really nice to be back, i was not busy or something, but u all were too good

@Ruchika thanks for the suggestion, and the time u spent in putting down the komment. i was trying to put the spaces but wasn't liking it, help

@Shin Danke! i will feel extremely happy if u can help me in improving the form. I get the ideas but but my literary skills doesn't allow it flourish, again help :) thanks a ton for going though it

Sowmya :) said...

Oh ok! i did'nt know tht mickey.

anyways the further revised votes So Far
(if Nonsens is allowed to split votes)
Juhi----6(Ruchika+Mickey+Richa)
Sarang----6(1/2 of Nonsens+Sowmya+Amey)
Mickey----5(CIMP+ 1/2 of Nonsens+Rajat)
CIMP------5(Missy+Mandappa+Santonu)
Lord Summer--------2(DokSaab)

Getting to be a close finish....any more kommentators??

Sowmya :) said...

Guys, a suggestion......there is a poll/survey option at blogger. can we use this for the votes?? it will be instantly updated and the counting wud not be required to be done every now and then...wot say???

Unknown said...

No Sowmya we cant :)
We have done such polls before. One , they are anonymous,
two, you can vote more once using different PC's.

Ruchika said...

Hey, I don't think splitting votes is a good idea. I mean, the very point of giving two people your vote nullifies its effect! Imagine a tie braking vote being given to BOTH the participants! Besides, the whole concept of a 2 point vote fails like this.

Santonu said...

yes diving vote is not a good idea, Nandini decide one klasher, otherwise people may divide it among more than 2

richa said...

i agree...no splitting. other wise with the quality of writings here I might be tempted to give .25 vote to 4 people

Thanks Nandini for the tip

richa said...

santonu: shadow as permission..hmm to be honest i never delve this deep!! haha my write ups never have a hidden meaning...at least not form my side..if u find one...well!!! :D

Sowmya :) said...

@ Dok Saab, valid point.
So who is the winner?? and when do we get the next word......

NonsSens said...

Ok guys I'm sorry....OK I'll give my vote to Mickey

Sowmya :) said...

OK latest vote tally is -
Juhi----6(Ruchika+Mickey+Richa)
Sarang----5(Sowmya+Amey)
Mickey----6(CIMP+ Nonsens+Rajat)
CIMP------5(Missy+Mandappa+Santonu)
Lord Summer--------2(DokSaab)

Still a tie...are any more votes expected??

coffeeismypoison said...

now...for those who wish to read the longer version of my take u can go here... http://acuppaconversation.blogspot.com/2008/05/cover-me-short-story.html

coffeeismypoison said...

see now i dont know how to turn a url into a link. but u can copy paste it...n pls leave a komment so i can improve :o)

Unknown said...

Looks my vote will make a diffrence. liked mickey's klash and coffe's was also nice but my winner is juhi.. good work

Sarang Mahajan said...

Please allow me only to vote this time, will comment as soon as i get time.

My vote - Sowmya!

Santonu said...


Juhi-7(Ruchika+Mickey+Richa+Shantaram)
Sarang----5(Sowmya+Amey)
Mickey----6(CIMP+ Nonsens+Rajat)
CIMP------5(Missy+Mandappa+Santonu)
Lord Summer----2(DokSaab)
Sowmya------2 (Sarang)

Sowmya :) said...

@ Sarang Thx so much for my first vote :)

Sowmya :) said...

Congratulations Juhi!! Whats the good word for this week???

The Konfessioners said...

Juhi!

Kongratulations at winning the krown this week.. what's the good word?!

Do send it in asap!

Cheers!
The Konfessioners.


p.s. thank you everyone for voting and especially those who kompiled the votes... :)

Juhi said...

Oh My God! Reading through the comments section has been nailbiting for me! And, I admit if you could see me right now, you would observe a very shamefaced person. I am so sorry, but I was travelling for most of the past week and...you know!

Anyways, great great klash and thank you so much!

@Doksaab, thank you for the info. Point noted. I guess I need to learn more about babies and kids before writing about them.

@Ruchika, !!! it is your fault that you planted the thought in me through telepathy. So basically you yourself are to be blamed. Thanks sis! :P

@Shantaram, thanks for tilting the votes in my favour.

I loved all the takes. Richa, Santonu, Mickey, Doksaab, Sowmya, I think I'll have to take everybody's name here!!

Ok, ok the new word is "clash

Enjoy!

Sowmya :) said...

Lovely word Juhi!

So Guys, by when do we need to post in our entries???

Unknown said...

Kongrats Juhi !!
I knew your take would beat the Monkey's :)

Juhi said...

Thanks for the vote of confidence Doksaab, but I must admit Mickey is a strong contender. :D

HEY!!! Where's my krown?? boohoo...

Unknown said...

Hey konfessioners, Sarang / Shin, where's the new pic ? & what about Juhi's crown..