Thursday 8 May 2008

Hope




Hope




(Entries are now CLOSED!)


1. the feeling that what is wanted can be had or that events will turn out for the best: to give up hope. 2. a particular instance of this feeling: the hope of winning. 3. grounds for this feeling in a particular instance: There is little or no hope of his recovery. 4. a person or thing in which expectations are centered: The medicine was her last hope. 5. something that is hoped for: Her forgiveness is my constant hope.


Coffee Is My Poison (106)


AnYwAy...

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all our lives,
we plan and pray
things may not work out
we dream, anyway.

.
look at the divorces,
loves taken a backseat
more 'me', less 'us',
we wed, anyway.

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we hold our pets,
too close to our hearts
eventually they die,
we love them, anyway.

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we study hard,
burn the midnight oil,
we may fail exams,
we try our best, anyway.

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life’s often hard,
putting a foot forward,
waking up some mornings,
don't seem worth the discomfort.

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in those hard times,
it picks us up,
it never leaves us,
not until we let it so.

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its hope it is,
that makes
us live, anyway.

.=

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Yuvraj Jha (119)



The wicked winged satire on optimism
Is placing its claws on our jaws
And leading us astray
In the arms of death.
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Any moment we die is the sacred hour
There is no hope, no soup to turn sour
Hope comes with black wings that devour
The little lost girl hopes for the strange hour
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We bring the mist of hope in this world
Through the event of our birth
And live in perpetual despair.
.
Hope for the forests of the night
The dead night, that sleeps
In the calm of its existence.
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“We got our final vision by a clap”
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Embrace the gloom,
This night we shall swim
Unannounced
To the kingdom.
Not with hope
But with wine.
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Nandini Sen (120)



Miraben nurtured a hope she’d always live in the ancestral bungalow, but her husband sold it and shifted into a flat.
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Miraben hoped she’d have two children. However, husband’s want for a son, ensured she produced three daughters before a son.
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She hoped her children would go abroad for studies. However the eldest dropped school and eloped with neighbour’s son. She hoped her other children would go for big fat Indian weddings, but one didn’t marry, another did a registration. Her son married a foreigner in church.
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On her deathbed, Miraben’s husband remarked none of her hopes were fulfilled. She smiled saying her ability to hope hadn’t diminished. Even in death she hoped her quality of life would get better.
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Dok Saab (120)


"Is there any Hope, Swami ji?" Rukmini was looking expectedly at Swami Ji.

"Beta, where there is Faith there always is Hope."


"Hopeless," Doctor Sweta's remarks were still ringing in her ears, "You have no chance."


"But Swamiji, the Doctor said it's impossible."

"Nothing is impossible for those who believe.

Just apply this bhasm on your husband's forehead every morning.

Soon your house will reverberate with a baby's cry."


She returned from the ashram, her heart full of hope.

Rohan was anxiously waiting for her.

"Biwi, I have decided, we are not going in for IVF.

It is so uncertain."

"But Swamiji said…."

"Leave Swamiji alone, we are going to adopt that cute girl we saw last week at EHSAAS."

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Juhi (61)




The barren land hid in its depth a creature so dreadful, that even Pandora wouldn’t let it out. The beautiful girl in white scrounged for it. Her hair disheveled and her eyes wild, she dug her small fingers into the merciless sand. Suddenly, her face lifted and her misty blue eyes reflected it. She had finally found it. Her lost hope.

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Ruchika Bajoria (116)





I gazed out the window at the parched land craving the elixir of life – water.

A silent prayer heavenwards, a furtive glance towards the sky, an earthen pot on her head…she made the journey towards a pond which had almost run dry.

Why did she even bother to go when disappointment was assured?

With my curiosity peaked, I beckoned her. Folding her hands in a show of subservience, she entered The Grand Hall.

"Jee Hukum."

"Why go to the pond knowing that it is dry?''

With an unidentifiable look in her eyes she said "What sustains you now that Hukum is at War and you hear no news? It is hope that sustains us both."
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Shantaram (120)




Rocky: ‘I was hopin’ to talk to you for a while.’
Rita: ‘Sure. Shoot away.’
Rocky: ‘Ehm, erm, ehm…’
Rita: ‘Oh. My reply is, err, urk, err…’
Rocky (laughs tentatively): ‘Nah, I mean, I was hopin’ to take you out on Saturday.’
Rita: ‘And?’
Rocky: ‘And hopin’ we’d have dinner.’
Rita (smiles meaningfully): ‘And?’
Rocky (all charged up): ‘And… hopin’ we’d go to my place for a coffee?’
Rita: ‘Wow!! And?’
Rocky (swallows): ‘And… I have a nice couch. I was hopin’… we could use it?’
Rita stares angrily.
Rocky (dumbly): ‘What say?’
Rita (stomps away): ‘I hope you were a pig.’
Rocky (gazes): ‘Yuck! She fancies pigs to do it? Hope at least on woman on earth was normal.’
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Sneha (52)




Is the consciousness
constantly giving me
strength to live?

They say this
world lives on
hope

Perhaps the highest
four letter derivative
that keeps us ticking, ticking
and alive

Hope is life
that overpowers
strife
that keeps hurting like
a knife

Have hope
for a better world
a better tomorrow
that's yours.
.

.=



1st RaY Of tHe SuN (120)




Sometimes, Secretly, She Would Wish… Closing Her Eyes… Collecting Her Broken Self… Putting The Jig-Saw Together… She Hoped No One Would See Her Tears… Prayed That The Smile Fooled Others….

Hope Is What She Clung On…After Every Broken Thread Of Trust… After Every Lie That Rocked The Cradle… Every Deceit That Shook Her Faith.. She Gave Another Chance.. Hope Ruled Her Mind…

The Phone Calls Continued…. The Late Nights Prolonged… The Slight Red Appeared Now-&-Then… His Smell Seems Adulterated…. Each Night, Making Love Felt A Distant Memoir… Fake, Dreamy, Stranger…

She Assumed The 2 Drops Would Just Make Him Ill… A Chance To Care, Another Awakening Of Long-Lost-Love.. But The Thought Went Wrong… Fatally Wrong… And She Hoped to Survive…

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Sarang Mahajan (120)




The speck in the ocean was a smoking ship. The dot that moved away from it was the last man to jump out, Captain Demero. There was no room for him on the fleet of boats moving away with the crew, not without sinking one of them. But he did not need any. He had a plan – use the plank he had as a boat and his hands as ores. When the plank gets too wet and sinks, swim. Swim till the last bit of strength. When the strength is gone, bring out Mara’s picture from the pocket and hope it is intact under lamination, for that would be his last hope to cross the hundred miles to home.
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Maggie (2)


Fools Hope!

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Sowmya (105)


"Hope we can be friends", she said. His heart skipped a beat. His most cherished dream was to come true. They became friends, talked, laughed and cried on each other's shoulders. "I think I want to take this further", she said. "I hope u agree". It's a perfect world, he thought. He lavished her with attention, love and care. When she smiled he was ecstatic. I want to get married. Hope u agree. That's what decided he would tell her that day. "My parents found a guy from USA, a millionaire I think. I hope we can still be friends", she said. “We can”, he.

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Amey Mujumdar (120)


Backache was gnawing Murari today. His old body lying in a cot wasn’t tolerant anymore. It wouldn’t let him lift his head an inch. But he had to. Somehow. Anyhow. There had been a sound at the door. Someone had pushed it open.

Moving hands aside might help, he figured. But it didn’t. Then legs, perhaps. But nor did that. So there was only one way now.

He jerked his head up; pain singed him. It won’t leave him for hours now.

But he had managed a glance at the door... only to find it was just the wind, not his son who had left him sick and broken years ago.

But he would come one day. Murari would hope.

Mickey (120)




This was the seventh time I had climbed to the tree-top.
It was brown and yellow as far as I could see.
I scanned the sky, not a fleck of cloud was around.
It had not rained since more than six months.
Kuano had never seen such a severe drought before.
Trees were drying, animals dying with hunger.
Kids were thirsty but the village well had dried up.
Worrying about them, don't know when I slept on the branch.

A cold draught woke me up.
The sky was dark, clear, and cloudless.
But the air blowing from west was cold and wet.
Suddenly I saw a bolt of lightening strike the horizon.
A ray of hope glimmered in my heart.

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Rajat Mukherjee (120)



I touched around, four walls, no doors, no windows, was dark, I felt smothered and trapped, as if I was unwanted, detested. I wondered how I made it in there, someone said, I was born in it. I asked, “What about others, are there others like me?” They said, “Yes, there are many, more than you can count”, I asked back, “Are you one of them?” the voice said, “Yes I am. Just the room adjacent to yours”. Couldn’t stop from asking, “How are we alive without light, air, food, water”? He said, “The light is in you, we eat, breathe and drink it, we call it HOPE”. I sat down silently hoping to make it out of there someday.






Konfessioner Singh (83)



Dear –


“I wished. I wished as hard as I could, on every shooting star and every falling leaf…that…but…anyway.

So tell me, do your cold blue stars weep?

Is that what these mean?

… these paintings, they are stairways to you. Unending…are there any turns?”


From what I see, you now walk my roads. These postcards you send, the pictures are not enough. Say something. Run for me. Tell me I don’t need to… hope.


since forever,

S.


p.s. Even La Cienega once smiled.

155 comments:

richa said...

WOW!!!

coffeeismypoison said...

thats it?????????

coffeeismypoison said...

the above is me btw :o)

Juhi said...

What's happened to you guys?? Where are the rockers of the klash?? Is there no more hope???

Alright enough melodrama! C'mon guys, how busy are you? You just have to write 120 words or < (that's less)

And Sarang!!! You too?! Or rather, you neither??!!

Sarang Mahajan said...

What to say. I have no words. :(

Mickey said...

Is there any Hope for Klash :(

Sarang Mahajan said...

I have an idea. Let us make this one a memorable klash. We'll keep the entries open for three more days. I will rush into many people and ask them to send in their takes. And I request you all to do the same. Bring in as many new klashers as you can. Let us see if we can revive Klash. What say you all?

coffeeismypoison said...

it seems like a good idea :o) on forward then!!!

Juhi said...

I am with you! :D

ruSh.Me said...

OH.... Errr.... Hello There..Every1 .....

The Sleep was a Little Too Deep.... so took time to wake up... I Hope the Entry will be accepted... :D

Sarang Mahajan said...

It sure will be! :-)

Sarang Mahajan said...

Some sort of number now. I hope more entries will come in by tomorrow evening.

Sarang Mahajan said...

Welcome Shantaram, Ruchika and Maggie! I think 1st Ray of the Sun has been woth us before. So welcome back to you and to Sneha. Let the comments flow, klashers. :)

The Konfessioners said...

Welcome Sowmya!
May I know who steals the credit of inviting you to Klash? :-)

coffeeismypoison said...

welkome shatanran maggie n ruchika n soumya!!
new blood was never more desperately needed...awwesome writeups everyone.but shud the komments flow now if the entries r still open...maybe from tomorrow?

Sowmya :) said...

hi everyone...gr8 to be here. stumbled upon this site few months ago.loved the concept but never got to writing an entry. finally did it. yipeeee!

Sowmya :) said...

Oh sorry...btw this is Sowmya

Unknown said...

Hello every1, this is a good platform. All are good writers here. Thanks for letting me in.

Unknown said...

what to do now that i have participated?

Sarang Mahajan said...

@ Sweta: Yes, of course. Let us wait till evening. I expect a few more entries will come in. But we can still chatter on. :D

Sarang Mahajan said...

@ Sowmya, you did just the right thing by turning up. Hope you have a great time here.

Sarang Mahajan said...

@Sowmya and Shantaram:
You can now comment on the takes of the others and also cast your vote to the entry you like best. But you might want to wait before voting, as more entries are expected.

The Konfessioners said...

Amey, you are finally writing for Klash as you promised ages ago. Welcome!

Unknown said...

Hi !!
Thirteen so far!!, not bad at all.

@ CIMP , true, new blood is always welkom, but with the old blood staying away, hmm not good :(

Unknown said...

Good to see aktivity again,
Thanks Sarang , for taking up charge.
(though miss you Missy, I don't know what is keeping you away, this was your baby, wasn't it? )

Ruchika said...

hi, i just realised tht my entire passage has somehow become one paragraph...there were supposed to be different paras. how do i work tht out??

Juhi said...

Hello everyone! Its great to see Klash klashing again! :D

An ice cuby welcome to everybody (since its the middle of may)Shantaram, Sneha, 1st Ray..., Maggie, Sowmya, Amey and Ruchika.

Well, I advertised a bit and I recognise one of my public here so I'll introduce her, if anyone else who is here because of me, please reveal yourself ;D

Ruchika is my cousin and is younger to me. She is a very sweet, a lot confused and too caring a girl for anybody to handle. She is extremely sensitive and both of us have been fighting since she could think and speak at the same time ;)
She is passionate about anything that comes into her life and is yet to come into her life :P
All in all a great kid. (Yes Ruchi, I did swipe your testimonial,)
She has a great pen, I recently realized this in full force and now she's telling me that she like all of us is addicted to klash(was there a doubt?) So I am sure we'll be seeing a lot more of her.
Happy Klashing...

P.S Doksaab I completely agree with you. And Sarang, you are doing a great job! :D

Sarang Mahajan said...

@ Ruchika: Blogger is a stupid composer. I'll fix the error with paragraphs right way.

Sarang Mahajan said...

@ Yes, Dok Saab, the rest of us are just the baby sitters. :D (Nik is not good at even that. Wonder where he is.)

Sarang Mahajan said...

Juhi: You are so right. Ruchika's first take at klash does not at all sound like her first ever write up. I really liked her theme.

Mickey said...

@ Sarang Sirjee
I see you are very good at babysitting :)
Mrs Sarang would be so lucky:)

The Konfessioners said...

Thank you monkey! I wonder why Shinjini is being such a bad mom. :D

Sarang Mahajan said...

That was me up there. By the way, Nice take, Mickey. Welcome.

Unknown said...

Hmmm ...Amazing posts ... I see a lot of "hope" that Klash is drenched with... Excellent people ... :)

Mickey said...

Hi Sarang !!
Its always fun to be in Klash :)

I think Shinjini has found something more interesting than Klash, which she doesn't want to share with us :(

Sarang Mahajan said...

Perhaps, she has given birth to some other baby! :D

Sarang Mahajan said...

Thanks for dropping by, Sneha. :)

coffeeismypoison said...

well well...what started out as a disappointment has turned out into almost a record breaker...im so glad...hope is a nice word.and so many newbies...welkome welkom again...!ull love klash n its very addicting...even the idle gup-shup
@sarang : see,ur an excellent host!!
@dok saab : i have a bone to pick with u abt ur entry!!!its ironic isn't it?the very person who suggested the word is all against hope?? HMPF.i consider u my mentor!!ergo...i expect to be praised to the skies!unless u were aiming for irony in the first place...HMPF.ahh..never mind...u cut off mickeys tail... ;o)
i cant wait to start kommenting...
sweta

The Konfessioners said...

Welcome Rajat! Nice take. :)

NonsSens said...

Welcome to Everyone new
Good Evening to Everyone old

Sarang - Wow you did a great job of garnering so many hopefuly purple krowners.

Mickey - Nice to see u back....thanks to ur kind & benevolent master who let you Klash.

Something never change....Sigh!!! with so many great writeups, its going to be difficult to vote (as usual)

Missy Baba said...

Welkome to Klash Knk newbies!!! It's GOOD to see so much aktion (in my cradle?! ;) )

I see some old timers are missing...:(.

No, no I haven't forgotten my baby haha, it's just that I needed a break from almost everything I'd been doing..what better way to holiday than take exams?! :).

Good to be home, time to whop some konfessions outta everybody's lazy lumpy errr brains

LET THE KOMMENTING BEGIN! Last date to komment Thursday.

Thank you Sarang for handling all this so well and thank YOU ALL for participating!!! and keeping my baby alive (ventilator shentilator pe by the looks of it..!!! :) )

I am positively BEAMING at your efforts..thank you! big jhappis to everyone!

NOW GET WRITING!!! (and reading..this is going to be a longgg one!!)

loads and loads and loads of love,
Shinjini.

Sarang Mahajan said...

Heyo! We have matched the highest number of entries ever. :-)

Welcome back Shin-shin. I am glad you are here. :-)

Yuvraj Jha said...

ehhlo ebhrywon!!
seriously this has been manged this week...some realy seriously klashingly amazingly complicatingly spectacular kalshes this time...

@doc saabh: uncle seriously amazing thing you have written...loved it...

missy didi wht eggjam are you writing?

A grand welcome to all the new klashers, hope you get klashed to addiction as the rest of us...

And the lots of welcomes of the backs to the monky of the disorders!!! =D

cooments to follow in some time..i ll let the klashes seep in first...

Yuvraj Jha said...

ohk one quas-ti-on to the juhi...dont you have like a profile, coz everytime i try to view it, it says i cant..seems like its protected, wht you got in the pandoras box? hehehe ;) isnt there a way we can view it?

coffeeismypoison said...

since i cannot wait to komment,let me!
@missy : sooo great to have u back...some things good or bad,dont change n its quite a relief too see u in the ahem once called 'hitler' mode,setting deadlines and all :o)
@sarang : i suppose ur breathing easy nw?but u did a great job.
@juhi,mowgli : pandora's box is my blog!!

now for komments...

CIMP : could be ar better.
yuvraj jha : very well written...but it made me feel stupid...will u pls explain ?
namdini : v.v.good...probably the inner feelings of a lot of indian women are portrayed through this...
dok saab : hmpf.but nevertheless very well written.but sir it seems continuous,so maybe u could put * * * between the paras...maybe u shud publish this on ur pedia blog...maybe make more ppl aware abt adoption ...
juhi : pandora lets out alll bad stuff..pls write this in more depth...i really want to read abt that creature...u could make a short story about it...seriously.
ruchika : awesome...remniscient of the short stody by munshi premchand...abt the drought,the thakurs well and the poor lower caste lady.very well written certainly not ur first time writing :)
Shantaram : hmm.funny...but questionable intents...in the end,either the grammar is faulty or the thoughts are...
Sneha : short n sweet.essentially telling the meanig of hope...but but but...the highest four letter derivative that keeps us going would have to be 'love'...wat say?
1st ray of the sun : awesome.if its not already a story,pls make it so...!
sarang : brilliant.love and hope together...reminded me of the tom hanks movie ' castaway.' awesome.
maggie : inspired...but i strongly disagree... :o) the strong hope... so do fools...but then...those who don't hope are bigger fools... :o) no offence...
soumya : damn the girl.so much like so many girls we see everyday.they like someone else,pass time with him n then marry someone better capable of giving them luxury.brought out really well...
amey : excellent...!!i give u my VOTE.
Mickey : welkome back monkey!!!this is so so different from the funny way in which u usually write...but its v.v.well done...my throat parched.and my heart ached for the kids.
Rajat : very good...smothering...
kon.singh : interesting,i hope u turn this into a story...

well im done...!!hurry up everyone else..

Unknown said...

Whom are you kalling Uncle, Mr Yuvraj Mowgli Jha .
Kome, run a mile with me, I'll tell you who is the Uncle and Who the nephew.
(Kall Missy, Didi or Aunty jee as you wish, I have no problems )

Yuvraj Jha said...

hahahaha...Doc saab!! aap toh bura maan gaye..but apparently i am realy very young, atleast compared to people around here...so no harm in showing respect...thts wht i believe...especialy when the other person deserves it...most times people are just forced to gv respect..but this one was genuine..though am sorry if i offended you...

Unknown said...

Hey Mowgli,
No offence taken,
But Uncle Yuvraj, I am younger than most here :)

Yuvraj Jha said...
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Yuvraj Jha said...

@ doc saab-hehehee...haan mein bhi uncle hun!! meri harkatein toh ho gayi hain bahut buri tarah se! hehhehehe...

Yuvraj Jha said...

@coffeemypoison - arre I can realy write a lot about tht poem, but then it'll take a lot of space...all i can say is that people (the common masses), are given a certain view of hope(god), and asked never to question it...and then when one grows up, it sort of tears the person apart coz of the conflict between the real world and the world of the religious hope...hence the line we got our final vision by a clap...which means that no supirior powercreated the universe, everything came about by a clap. thats it...i just deny the existence of a gnawing, ruthless, impotent, violent god...hope i will not be hurting anyones sentiment..."to all their own"...and then the lines that we shall walk to the forests of the night, with wine, coz wine makes you forget...and forgetting is anyday more devine then forgiving, and mind you forgetting or anything that is truely good; is a sin, hence i say speak of embracing the gloom...A bit complicated it is...i ll write a book someday and then you can figure it out..hehehehehe

i hope now you knw that it was the poem that was stupid, and that's why you felt stpid..hehehehhehe..

Missy Baba said...

Yuvraj aka Mowgli beta, hum dono ki ummar ek hi hai.. baaees saal. Mai March 1986 mein paidaa hui thi.


--Exams: MA Population Education and Rural Development Second Semester. i.e. First year.

--CIMP: Kongratulations about winning the krown last time!! :) Please do kast thy vote by 6:00 pm on Sunday.

--Sarang: Thank you!!! :)

Sarang Mahajan said...

Missy: CIMP has cast her vote. Search it out like a pin from the haystack of her comments. :D

And I am going to cast mine before Sachin plays his first ball in IPL. :-)

Yuvraj Jha said...

koi bahut hi bheeshon galti ho gayi hai!! i am assuming tht most people around here are like 27 28 types...obviously i shouldnt have...but now that i have...i am so embraced(embarrased)..hehehe...my bad!!

Missy Baba said...

Votes so far--

Amey--2 (CIMP's 1=2 points)



No worries Mowgli... you were in the jungle ;)

Nabila Zehra Zaidi said...

Alright! Apologies!! (once again) for not konfessing this time, but I was about to... Infact, I even started to scribble something, then thought 'ah...later! the deadline is far!' (yes Shin... typical attitude!!;) ), ad then ofcourse I recieved a mail asking m to komment -'Ah! I was late!' Hoping I had not missed this wonderful word would not change much, would it?? ;)

Anyway... whoa!! 16 posts!! And all so positive... honestly... I got slightly bored because it was ALL so 'hopeful' (yawn!), but everyone's take so different that I could not help but enjoy each one of them without realizing KnK had its max. number of entries!! Yay!! Congratulations!! :D

My personal favourite takes were by Nandini, Ruchika and, Yuvraj - yours was just the post I was hoping to read! ;)

Cheers! :)

Ruchika said...

have my exams going on...can i comment and vote by friday morning please?

Mickey said...

Nabila Didi
You neither kommented nor voted
and broke the hearts of 13 hopefuls :(

Mickey said...
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Mickey said...

Votes so far--

Amey--2 (CIMP's 1=2 points)
Rajat Mukherji---1(Mickey)

Sarang Mahajan said...

Here I keep my promise (which no one noticed). There is still an hour to go before Sachin bats today evening. It's gonna be Mumbai today.

CIMP: Yes, that’s hope. Meaningful and well worded. The first paragraph itself defines hope wonderfully.

Yuvraj: Hello, Sir. We haven’t met before. Nice take yours, especially the ending. But I could not grasp it fully.

Nandini: A stark reality. Good theme and nice flow of the story.

Dok Saab: As usual, a good theme and a nice read. But, I hope people here know Ehsass to understand the depth completely. I know it and so I understood it.

Juhi: I am ashamed to say I haven’t read about Pandora’s Box, but have heard about it many times. I liked what I read here though.

Ruchika: What a fine first klash. I’d say this one is not an easy scenario to paint, but you have done it well, bringing the punch in the end to a fine effect.

Shantaram: Good dialogue, especially third and fourth line, but I didn’t get the end. What exactly the last sentence means?

Sneha: A very good take on word. The second-last paragraph is the peak of it. Hoping many more klashes from you like this one.

1st Ray of Sun: Artistically written (I am not talking about the capital letters)! Nice punch in the end!

Maggie: I agree, but only if you would call Wright Brothers fools. They hoped to fly and they did it. Hitler was a fool though. :D

Sowmya: I am a little surprised this is coming from a girl and not a boy. I personally know a few couples to have broken this way. A good subject you took here.

Amey: In every city or a village there are people like this. But I really doubt they have any hope. But I also agree some of them might have it. Very painful but real picture.

Mickey: This strongly reminds me of Lagan. Thousands of farmers live on hope, literally. A very nice entry, Sir Monkey.

Rajat: Wonderful take. Hope is what you are left with when in imprisonment. There are so many wonderful novels on this subject, like Papillion, The Count of Monte Cristo and so on. A very nice first klash, full of hope.

Shinjini: Esoteric as always. A lesser being like me can only smell the beauty in it, but cannot taste it. And you are least bothered about it, which is what I like about you. :-)

My vote: I closely considered Amey, Dok Saab, Sneha and Rajat, before giving it to Ruchika. Her take reminded me of critically acclaimed movies like Rudali and Pakijah.

Sarang Mahajan said...

Total Votes Now:

Amey - 2
Rajat - 1
Ruchika - 1

Rajat S. Mukherjee said...

Aaah, I made it here, I loved the one with the least words...Fools hope.....The rest is history....

Rajat S. Mukherjee said...

Woo hoo *with a child's enthusiasm* I have one vote, hehe...anyway I loved what Ruchika wrote.....

Rajat S. Mukherjee said...

Hello Shantaram, ahem....I am speechless, first it took me a whole lot of energy to cope with the fact that women consider men as Man's Best Friend, but now after reading your post, my HOPES have hit the nadir....

What happens to single men now is in the hands of the almighty, I HOPE for the best.
My Vote goes for Ruchika....
Amey--2
Ruchika--2
Rajat--1
Can I vote for myself??? :P

Unknown said...

Rajat Beta !!
You have voted, very nice of you,
But Beta we would love to read what you have to say about our takes.

NonsSens said...

Dear nephew Mickey....I'm delighted to get a nephew who is well errr..... a monkey.
I dont have any objections on being called Aunty, considering the fact that its a tad better than Dadiamma which many of my frnds insist on calling me (thanks, I assume, to my penchant for giving lectures) :-))

NonsSens said...

Here goes my Komments & Vote.......

CIMP - Well written...theme potrayed nicely...selaed it with the last para "it is hope that makes us live anyway"

Yuvraj - Thanks for the explanation...otherwise it was going above my head. Ummm...well written, and I've just about been able to grasp it(with the aid of ur explanation) - your take has a lot of starkness in it.

Dok Saab - You have faith thats why you start hoping - or do you hope and that is why faith gets stronger??? Loved your ending.....a happy ending to all the couple hoped for.

Juhi - Too short....maybe there's something more.

Ruchika - Wow.....very well crafted. Hoping in the midst of a hopless situation. Really liked your story.

Shantaram - :-))It was going along fine...but the end just got a bit blurred.....maybe your word phrasing didn't match what you wanted to convey. Cool. Keep Klashing

Sneha - "Highest 4 letter derivative that keeps is ticking" - yo - nice one....Maybe its love as CIMP says...maybe its hope - maybe a combi - dunno. But you potrayed Hope real well.

1stRay... - Great storyline....super potrayal....ironical na how even in the hopeless situation she still Hoped to Survive. Just brings out human psychology real well.

Sarang - CIMP's observation is poving to be correct - Love scores more than hope.....Love inspires hope for your Captain. Nice one - liked the last sentence.(Is this like an ode for "Titanic")

Maggie - Dont Agree :-))

Sowmya - Poor him.All hopes dashed.

Amey - You know what somehow your take reminds me of Mrinal Sen's films - I can actually picture Murari staring at the doorway (all painted in black & white hues) - his eyes painful, sad....but filled with hope!!!! Whih actor do you think would potray this character well?
(In retrospect one realizes how powerful an emotion Hope really is)

Mickey - A Discovery Channel setting. Thank god yours has a happy ending....hope fulfilled is aways nice. BTW, its nice to read a different sort of write up from you. Well written.

Rajat - Great, great one....amongst so many nice ones, yours stands out a little bit more b'cos of this line "Th light is in you...we eat, breath & drink it...." Wow...You've got my vote.

Konfi S - "So tell me do your cold blue stars weep".....hmmm liked your take - but I've just drawn my own meaning out of it - dunno what you really wanted to say. Please do give us some dtails about your take.

My Vote - Rajat

Unknown said...
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Mickey said...

@ Amey
So you didn't find the other ten even worth a mention :(

Mickey said...

@ Konfessioners
I am deleting my komments for Amey and Rajat, as I feel they do not deserve my komments,
Monkeys revenge !!, you see :).

1.1st RaY Of tHe SuN Didi---
Beautiful depiction of a whole story in just 120 words.
Great Take Rashmi Didi

2. komments deleted

3.Coffee Is My Poison Didi---
Lovely poem, anyway !!

4.Dok Dadaji---
Bhasm for strength !, you should have given those glucose capsules you gave me last time.

5.Juhi Didi---
Lost Hope, so difficult to find,Nice take Juhi Didi

6.KS Auntyji---
So you are 22 :), Missy Aunty, Kongrats !!
Your takes, as always go above my head, so very literary. (will have to Google La Cienega to comprehend full meaning.

7.Maggie Didi (Or are you a Bhaiyaa)---
Welkome Maggie, Hope you enjoy your stay here. If you do not hope, you become hopeless, Maggie!!

8.Nandini Aunty---
Plight of Indian women very nicely portrayed, Sen Aunty (I hopeyou have no objections to me kalling you aunty)

9. komments deleted


10.Ruchika Didi---
Welkome Ruchika Didi, are you from Rajsthan?
Your take and mine are so similar, believe me , I had not read yours before sending mine.
Nice take, Hope in its truest sense.

11.Sarang Chachu---
Swimming a hundred miles, high hopes Captain.

12.Shantaram Bhaiya---
You say Yuck for a pig, wait till Maneka Naniji hears of you.
I respect Rita's love for pigs, even Jane loves animals.
and oh, welkome Shantaram bhai ( I hope you dont say Yuck to me.)

13.Sneha Didi---
Lovely poem, Sneha, is it your debut at Klash, I have lost kount of the new komers. Welkome !!
And CIMP is true, Love would be placed higher than Hope.

14.Sowmya Didi---
Welkome (you are the seventh)
Nice take, False hopes always hurt.

15.Yuvraj Uncle---
So you overgrew from being a Chaddhi clad kid.
Nice take (esp after you gave those explanations )


My Vote
Rajat Bhaiya

For best depiction of hope,
true we may live without food, water, air, light,
but without Hope,
well there is no hope :)

As you see, i have not changed my vote

Unknown said...

Mickey my boy.. I am sorry! but am scared of hieghts and started it off from a tree top... Please dont delete the comment you had for me.. please give it back.. please.. bu hu hu...

Ruchika said...

ohkie, here are my comments...

in the order of appearance

1) CIMP - I absolutely adored your piece. When I first heard the word, these were exactly the myriad of emotions that I wanted to portray but since I was unable to express myself in such few words (I'm more used to extending my plots)I stuck to one facet. However, I personally feel that you succeeded to portray everything beautifully! Wonderful justice done.The part about the exams struck a particular chord specially because I was in that phase of my life.

2)Yuvraj Jha - I tried reading your piece again and again but I didn't understand it, even with the explanation, while it helped, i felt there was something missing. Some piece of the puzzle which brings it all together seemed missing.Brilliant thoughts, and probably the only piece which was refreshingly different because of the innovative point of view but the presentation of the thoughts didn't work for me.

3)Nandini Sen - Brilliant portrayal of the lives of so many women around us. Feminism at its best. Not only did you portray the feeling of undying hope, for me, I felt like you touched vital issues like the want of a son, the feeling of despair that parents feel when they are let down by their children, etc with the subtlety that it seeps in and makes you ponder but doesn't overwhelm.

4)DokSaab - I loved the message of the story. It touched a vital issue in the lives of so many couples with maturity. I loved how the characters finally let go of their superstitions to reach forward for the joy that lay ahead of them.

5)Juhi - Sis, leaves a lot to be desired. You've written stronger pieces and while this one creates a beautiful imagery of the situation in the mind of the reader, somewhere it seems abrupt and incomplete.

6)Shantaram - The first piece in the entire Klash that was lighthearted and relate-able. I have just started college and I come across so many boys uttering words along the same lines. Struck a humorous note with me but I found the ending weak and it reduces a wonderful piece to a merely mediocre one.

7)Sneha - Highly motivating when one is gloomy and blue. It doesn't talk too much about hope, I feel like it INSPIRES hope within the reader.I completely agree that hope is the highest four letter derivative in the world. When love betrays, when friendship fails, its hope that sustains!

8)1st Ray - I was awed that this piece encompassed such a variety of emotions and spoke about them in such depth even without the usage of a lot of words. The various conflicting emotions that the protagonist feels paint a very surreal picture. Slightly melodramatic, but I enjoyed every moment of it.

9)Sarang Mahajan - Firstly, thankyou for fixing the spacing issue on my piece. And now about your piece,I loved how unique your take was.Hope and Strength depicted at their strongest.Within such few words, you've depicted, unending love, the strength it provides a person when all else is lost and the hope of being reunited against all odds. Life's most difficult lessons to learn and you make them easy.

10)Maggie - I disagree. This world would be very different if we did not have hope to sustain us.

11)Sowmya - I know so many people who would relate to this scene. What surprised me was that it was a woman portraying a man's dilemma and you got it pat down! A delightful approach to a known concept.

12)Amey Majumdar - First impression was that it reminded me of a short story by Ray,I had once read. Slightly melodramatic but I love the easy depiction of stark reality. A slightly sombre and futile view of hope,but one which works for me.

13)Mickey - I see the similarity. :)) I enjoyed reading it. I see how Sarang said it reminded him of Lagaan. Depicts the sorrowful situation of every village in rural India as it is. A very real take on life.An inspiring story of ordinary people.

14)Rajat Mukherjee - WOW!!! Reminded me of how Neo feels within the matrix and what helps him get out of it. Our lives seem similar to that of the protagonist and my interpretation of the story was that we become REAL people when we hope. Your piece made me think. I adored it.

15)Konfessioner Singh - Beautiful. I loved the portrayal of unrequited love and the concept of a letter is so refreshing. Didn't understand the postscript and I'm sure it adds a lot to the piece but for me, it was complete even without it.

My Vote - CIMP

p.s sorry for going overboard with the comments. :)

Sarang Mahajan said...

@ Ruchika: No, don't be sorry. You must receive the best komment award (if it existed). It is very generous of you actually.

coffeeismypoison said...

wow...
@ruchika : Not only are u a promising writer,but you Kommented extensively!!And on top of that,ur apologizing for it...!u seem to match juhi's desciption of u perfectly...pls,if only we all kommented as well and as enthusiastically as u have done...plus u have great taste!! u voted for ME!haha...kidding...!
@maggie : its only the prople here who disagree with ur POV...ppl in the "real" world, will agree whole heartedly... :o)

goodness with all the aunties,uncles,bhaiyyas n didis im quite overwhelmed.perhaps we really should knw the proper way to address each other...very,how shall i put it indian :) callin each other these names is really sweet.not to mention amusing.ha.

Sowmya :) said...

Hi ppl

here goes my comments -
(in order of appearance)

1. CIMP -Think u perfectly captured the essence of hope. the line -"it never leaves us,
not until we let it so." said it all.

2.Yuvraj -I join the rest here...went totally over the head.
hamare IQ level ke hisab se explain kijeeye please......

3.Nandini -hv been followin klash for a few months now and u r one of the main reasons. luv ur posts. this one too....u say profound stuff so simply!

4.Dok Saab -nice concept, simply delivered.

5. Juhi -finding lost hope is what makes life worth living....very unique..

6.Ruchika -sorry if this is repetitive to u....wow!

7.Shantaram -my hopes were dashed with the ending....it started off and went on so nicely...but the end was a bit of an anti-climax

8.Sneha -reading ur post convinces me that 120 words is far too much to express our thoughts...so beautifully said "Hope is life
that overpowers strife that keeps hurting like a knife"

9.1st ray of the sun -awesome. MY VOTE IS FOR U!

10.Sarang -this was probably one of the first ideas one would get with the word hope. but the way u have conveyed it is so fantastic.

11.Maggie -well.....hopefully u will change ur mind on this:)

12.Amey -very vivdly described. could actuallly visualize the scene unfolding in front of my eyes.

13.Mickey -A serious one from u...fab as usual

14. Rajat - hope in total despair...awesome.

15.Konfessioner Singh -lovely...b ut do explain the footnote.

my vote -1st ray of the sun

NonsSens said...

Sowmya - Thanks so much for such a cool compliment :-)

Unknown said...

hello friends, i am glad to be a part of this. i 'hope' to be excused for my first-timer's mistakes. i will make a better attempt next time. my comments -

coffee is my poison- you have summarised life here. and life has so much to do with hope. well done.

Yuvraj jhaa- i had to read it twice to understand. but i liked it after that.

Nandini sen- again a summary of life, but very well told.

Dok saab- very good dialogue. i liked to read dialogues and therefore yours i one of my favourites.

Juhi- a small but well described piece.

Ruchika Bajoria- this is another of my favourites. i gather from the other comments you are also a first timer but you have done so well.

shantaram - this was based on a true story i heard, but some typos ruined the end of it. shall take care in future.

1st ray of the sun- this must not be your birth name. just kidding. i find your piece creative and different from the rest

sarang mahajan- i enjoyed reading it. good attempt like titanic.

Maggie- you are also a first-timer and much in my league for none have agreed with you. nor do i.

sowmya- it happens so much today. you have picked a general issue (if we can call it that) and wrot it well.

amey- this one was very sensitive and so well written. keep it up.

mickey- very vivid and touching. but what were you doing on a branch. just kidding. i liked it.

rajat mukharjee- one of the best pieces. you have described the prison so well.

Konfessioner singh- i had to google la cienega to know what this is about. very nice.

my vote- Dok saab

Mickey said...

@ Shantaram
"but what were you doing on a branch"
Well Shantaram Bhai, thats my home, what else will a monkey like me do on a branch

Mickey said...

Votes so far--


Ruchika---- -----2(Sarang,Rajat)
Amey-------------2 (CIMP X 2)
Rajat Mukherji---1(Mickey)
Rajat------------1(Nandini)
Saarang----------1(Amey)
CIMP-------------1(Ruchika)
Rashmi-----------1(Sowmya)
DokSaab----------1(Shantaram)


Nine Votes so far, come on ppl sunday 6 pm is not too far

Sarang Mahajan said...

Sir, Mickey, you have counted Rajat twice. :D

Mickey said...

Korrection :) Sorry Sarang Sir !!

Votes so far--


Ruchika---- -----2(Sarang,Rajat)
Rajat Mukherji---2(Mickey, Nandini)
Amey-------------2 (CIMP X 2)
Saarang----------1(Amey)
CIMP-------------1(Ruchika)
Rashmi-----------1(Sowmya)
DokSaab----------1(Shantaram)

Unknown said...

Sorry I goofed up! Was short on time actually.. Here are my revised reviews..


coffee - your poetic stance gives me a glimpse of Shakesphere in the making..;) nice work..

Yuvraj – remarkable.. got the punch bang on.. I guess it adds so much power to the environ created..

"This night we shall swim
Unannounced
To the kingdom.
Not with hope
But with wine."

Nandini – appne bahut achi tarah se reality bayan ki hai, but some how makes me feel gloomy..

Dok Saab – And That’s how India must be groomed.. ur article has a lot of wisdom in it sir..

Somya – well said! that’s the most common thing that happens around. Would agree with Sarang, that surprising its come from a girl.. appreciation mam!!

Juhi – Only you have used Pandora in the comment.. “Her hair disheveled and her eyes wild” liked the sketch.. looks very professional..

Ruchika- your story is senti and out of the lot is best on emotions of hope (by far). really liked it yar..

Shantaram –sexy!! Couldn’t stop laughing in office.. and got a beating from my boss.. liked the concept.. Can relate it to male hypocrisy and sham but why stress thy mind.. taking it literal, its quite hilarious

Sneha –Simple and straight forward and a positive ending.. nice hai

1st ray of the sun – uff!! Kya description hai, am getting an inferiority complex now.. fantastic

Sarang.. good stuff bro, for I like adventure, and captain Demero is an amazing character. Use it in your stories, He will not have a chance against Captain Sparrow, am sure..

My vote to you...

Maggie –Very true ;)

Mickey –My apologies to you, coz I missed out to comment, and you deleted my..
it made me cry.. and that’s no lie.. See I am learning from coffee.. But on a serious note, its quite neatly composed, and language is simple, which makes it quite easy to relate to.. Some more twists in the episode theme would have made it even more impressive..

Rajat – quite a compelling style of writing.. certainly impressive..

Konfessioner Singh - good work missi, but I don’t understand... all I had ever come across is some album which had some thing to do with la cienega but didn’t understand that either..

Mickey said...

9 Votes so far !!
Yet to Vote:-

1)Yuvraj Jha
2)Dok Saab
3)Juhi
4)Sneha
5)1st RaY Of tHe SuN
6)Maggie
and
7)Konfessioner Singh

richa said...

if i haven't written or klashed or kommented is coz i have a twisted brain and much more twisted fingers!! not to worry komrades, as soon as the plaster is off and i can type without pecking like a hen on the keyboard i will be here full force.
I am sure I am greatly missed ...hooohahaha!!!

richa said...

but i am religiously following Klash and whats been happening here...much more later

ruSh.Me said...

first of all... 1st Ray Of The Sun==ruSh.Me==RashmiThe Name i was Born With.... Close!!! for all those who missed the earlier bandwagons...and welcome to all the newbies... Hope made everyone take a shot at it... Isnt it nice!!!

ruSh.Me said...

Komments Following!!!

CIMP :
I dunno about others.. but for me, personally Hope does Keep me Alive n Going... If it were not for Hope, LIfe would have gone long ago.. Hope to live another day as i want... hope to see others smiling.... Very Inspiring!!

ruSh.Me said...

Yuvraj Jha :
OHT..please.......!!!! thoda to context explain kijiye....

ruSh.Me said...

Nandini Sen :
OH!! That some positivity....!! Even after so many struggles n failures, if one hopes... the strength itself can create wonders... Kudos... Nicely portrayed!!

ruSh.Me said...

Dok Saab :
WonderFul!!!!!!

ruSh.Me said...

Juhi :
Seems Nice...but could not get the context???? is it the Pandora's Story????

ruSh.Me said...

Ruchika Bajoria :
Hope in 2 different circumstances...2 different lives, 2 different eyes... But the both keeping themselves alive!! very heart touching!!

ruSh.Me said...

Shantaram :
LOL.......

ruSh.Me said...

Sneha :
Thats a Prose thats very poetic... at least for me.. it sounded like flowing water.. water that carves our life out!!! Beautiful Definition!!!

ruSh.Me said...

Sarang Mahajan :
Thats What is called hanging by the thread of the hope.... The desire to live... just in the hope to see the one u love.... True!!! Amazing context!!

ruSh.Me said...

Maggie :
True...
:((
Fools Dream. Fools Hope, Fools Dream on...........

ruSh.Me said...

Sowmya :
AWWWWWWWWWWWWWW!!!!! Not Again!! Why cant Love be as it is?? Hope to stay friends? Very Sad....Painful! Tragic

ruSh.Me said...

Amey Majumdar :
Hope at the death bed... not to live but for the Love to come back.. to make him live again.... Very thoughtfully written!!

ruSh.Me said...

Mickey :
Oh!!! WelKome Back... Good to see u here!! Very nice... Did u sing the Song "Barso re megha megha..."

ruSh.Me said...

Rajat Mukherjee :
Caught?? Trapped? Broken?? Hidden?? Living??? Hoping?? Amazing!

ruSh.Me said...

Konfessioner Singh :
Hope after everything goes wrong.. true time for hope to live n Survive!!!

ruSh.Me said...

HMMmm.....

Voting Time:
Sneha: for the Simple n Sweet Definition!!!

Unknown said...

Hi!!
Sorry for being late :)
Here are some of my komments,
I hope I will finish all by tomorrow.

a) Coffee Is My Poison----
Wonderful word suggestion, Sweta.
And equally wonderful poem!!
When I joined Klash, I was told about the rule, The ‘word’ should be in the 120, and such, that if you remove the word, the whole edifice falls. Yours is the take.
I am proud that I introduced you to this club.
(sorry about using your name in my Take, I know you will never let hope die in your patients hearts :) )

b) Yuvraj Jha----
So now you know, you are not the youngest here. Its not the physical age that matters, Yuvraj beta. I have kompleted 46 this may, but I have the enthusiasm of a 22 yr old.
Lovely Take, bit difficult to understand, too many analogies.

c) Nandini spam Sen----
Why do (Indian) women always compromise and sacrifice, hoping that things may improve. When will they live for themselves?

d) Juhi----
Why did you remove the Fragrant, Juhi.
Good imagination, but why did you call Hope dreadful?

e) Ruchika Bajoria----
Welkome to Klash, Ruchi, I see you are already addicted to it.

f) Shantaram----
Thanks for the appreciation, Shanta !
I like dialogue too :) , but you don’t have to repeat the names in every sentence.
And humans have always fancied animal power, be it a horse, a dog, or a pig as in Rita’s case, why the yuck !!

g) Sneha----
I do not want to fall into the controversy whether love is greater or hope, but your take is lovely.

h) 1st RaY Of tHe SuN----
Again the woman suffering and hoping for better.
Wish and hope, are they different emotions?

i) Sarang Mahajan----
You have done better in the past, Sarang. I am not much impressed with Captain Demero’s swim. A good writup, but not doing full justice to the theme.

j) Maggie----
If fools hope, then i would prefer to be one :)

Yuvraj Jha said...

Let the commentory begin:

@Coffeemypoison- now thts wht i call a romantic description of hope...have you read cadide? its by voltaire...its something on these lines...basically optimism...nice one...pretty soothing...

@Yuvraj jha - sorry didnt understand you, do you understand yourself? hehehee =D

@Nandid sen - see again its more like optimism..i knw they are pretty close to each other..hope and optimism...but this one's more like sad things are happening and the person is not giving up sort of hope...well written though...

@DokSaab - now this is more like it, i dont knw why i see an invisible hope in this one doksaab...more for the cute girl that will be adopted...i knw i am reacting like a sentimentalist, but i think one can get a little senti-mental, on things other then kal ho na ho! hehehehehe ;) amazing piece dok saab..realy nice...

@Juhi - for some odd reason, i just love the way you write...there is always some shamanic excitement in it...this ofcourse is bhanumati finding her hope back, nice one...i always wondered what happed to pandora after she opened the box...

@Ruchika - ohk!! that was something..realy different..realy realy different..i mean i could never have compiled that peice...nice and simple and stunning...

@Shantaram - you belong to mickey bhai's category i believe...though different...nice funny ending...

@Sneha - now that is more like hope in its naked sense...nice one...

@Rush.me.(the drama queen) - hehehehee..seriously you must be one great drama specialist...its always fun to read you pieces..."She Assumed The 2 Drops Would Just Make Him Ill… A Chance To Care, Another Awakening Of Long-Lost-Love.. But The Thought Went Wrong… Fatally Wrong… And She Hoped to Survive…"....amazing lines...

@sarang - seriously!! lovely eggjajeration...hehehe...impossible to believe event, but i think thats wht makes it nice...

@Maggie - wah kya likha hai...wah kya likha hai....wah kya likha hai...


wah kya likha hai? ;)

@saumya - heart breakers, these NRI's...realy i wonder why we guys are such late lateefs...acha wala tha yeh toh..."we can" coul have been deleted though...aur bhi sahi lagta padhnein mein...

@Amey - old age and the young wanderer...this is one thing tht realy pains me everytime i think of it...when a man gets old and suffers, unnecessarily, ofcourse mercy killing is not justified, but how cruel it is of life...nice take on hope...

@Mickey Bhai - kya bahi itna pyaas...mowgli ko batate na, mein kuch madat karta...hehehhee...

@Rajat - one question...how does he knw that he has survived without water and all, if he has never tasted any of tht...as in if he was born there...and how does he knw what is outside, if he has never seen it? since his imagination can tell him anything, but he will never knw wht it is, so i think there is some flaw, unless i am the one who's wrong...Dark piece though..

@KS - arre this was above me...i didnt get it atall...eakdamnahi samajh aaya...toh mein kya komment karun..ease situation aksar log bolte hain acha tha!! ahhahahahaha ;) please samjhaooo...


my vote to Juhi!! "i think i am a fan by now"..."Auto-graph please!"

Unknown said...

@ Coffee-IMP --"but sir it seems continuous,so maybe u could put * * * between the paras."
I had made the doctor's dialogue in italics, but Blogger didn't do it.

@ Sarang-- "But, I hope people here know Ehsaas"

EHSAAS is a NGO which is taking care of kids abandoned/lost at Lucknow Railway station. I was introduced to Ehsaas by Shinjini Singh, who is an active member.

Sarang Mahajan said...

@ Everyone: I think we should set and follow some rules of formatting while submitting entries. Even I don't like putting such kind of restriction, but Blogger offers really stupid software to maintain formatting with. I think if everyone sends their entries in following format, well not have any missed formatting in the final display -

1. Written in MS Word
2. Normal line spacing
3. Black text colour
4. Right-side text alignment
5. Font size 12
6. Font Times New Roman

In other words, if you open MS Word and write in it without any change in the default formatting style, you'll follow the above said style.

But if this restriction makes you feel irritated, we'll work our something else.

Sarang Mahajan said...

Secondly, please mention in your mail if there is something specific in formatting you want to be maintained.

Ruchika said...

I guess using the default settings shouldn't be a problem. Good idea.

Rajat S. Mukherjee said...

Reply to Mr Mowgli's question------I never potrayed the person inside the confines of the 4 walls as someone who is unaware of the bare necessities...else another question may arise...who taught him how to speak??? .....this should have been ur first question...the incarceration is construed through a sense of metaphor which comes when we stop thinking "OUT OF THE BOX" banality sets in and rusts the hindges of our doors to an all round emancipation from the mundane emcumbrances.....
Perhaps u can rate it as a lawyers take...
Lol I wrote all that...hehe...

Rajat S. Mukherjee said...

Coffee----Very well put forth...the repeated use of anyway has added to the effect of the existence of hope...I liked it...

Yuvraj----A great poem...u made is sound like the crusades against the Crown...I loved the last stanza...

Nandini---The Phantasmagoria of a an insignificant household life shown by u si amazing...and the last few lines were very good...

Doc Saab---Very well construed real life scene...The age old problem of hope culminating into something which may be quite gross and that to practiced in the name of religion...at times I feel i should turn intn a pseudo agnostic.

Juhi---I liked the depiction of a child's hope burried deep within but then a child's vehemence can alway unearth it....but then....why a dreadful creature...why not a hidden treasure...after all its hope....

Ruchika---Realistic...loved it....

Shantaram---I have already said a few things....I loved the way u have put in the humour...

Sneha----Yes I was searching for a post which talks about world hope and a better tomorrow...And I loved the first sentence....

Ray of Sun---Amazing...although people attribute such behaviours with women, somewhere down the line even I would for many plausible reasons, but then u cannot depict tears and hope and then hope and tears surviving together walking together and then hope winning but the individual losing unless u have feminism in there somewhere....

Sarang---Straight forward, unadulterated, at times banal, hope...can't have a better description....

Maggie---Already said...in a seperate post...fools hope...and the rest is history...

Sowmya---Very emotionally put..."We can", I know how it feels...and hope acts as a good anti dote....but many choose otherwise...but then...somewhere its hope that makes them choose otherwise....

Amey---Aaah...the dismay of a sick father...a story from the streets of our society...and panorama so common but grotesque...very well put...

Mickey---Now please shed ur anger against me.....COmmenting for u I would say u actually tried very well to put forth how an animal would feel in such a situation....isn;t that what we feel...a smile coming to our charred face when we feel, anticipate that yes its gonna happen...I can, and i know everyone else too can, relate to that feeling.

Rajat Mukherjee---Can't vote for u dude.....too bad....

Konfessioner Singh---Its great to see people actually writing against having hope....yes...why have hope...isn't it short of aspiration...short of the desire the goal one had set in one's life...Why hope...why not make it happen???

My vote still stands for Ruchika...
Although i would love to vote for so many others (for myself too :P).

Ruchika said...

I was just wondering if we are allowed to submit short essays for the word of the week?

Unknown said...

hey guys, it is my first time here but am not sure it is the right time. i got so little time 2 write and now again so little time 2 comment. is it ok if i vote now and comment in detail later?

still i would like to mention i liked everyones work especially coffee, dok saab, sneha, nandini, ruchika and amey. if i hav 2 hav 2 hav 2 vote only 1 of these, i would vote amey.

i hope i will be excused, i will come and comment later.

Unknown said...

My vote goes to Amey. Truly deserves it!

Missy Baba said...

My komments first---

1. CIMP-- The humdrum of life almost captured... :). I like how you say "it picks us up", that sums "hope" for me.. very well put.

2.Mowgli-- Though I am not a big fan of the Gothics (except, maybe, their architecture) I did enjoy your attempt at dabbling with death and the morose. I have been out-of-touch so long, that I cannot identify whether this string runs through most of your verse...back to this poem, I like the "attempt" but I am not too happy with your structure, the words are trite and the images are dying to break free.. I shall email you a reworked version. This will not do..the concept is beautiful, but the words dont do it justice.

3.Nandini-- This sums the hopes of most Indian women, a touching, from-the-common take.

4.Dok Saab-- Ehsaas! Touched to see this here..:). The hope "for" a child.... it is something else indeed.

5. Juhi-- My vote this week! Very clever, very creative. Excellent.

6.Ruchika-- Welkome! and what a beautiful first take. Great visuals, I love the use of 'hukum' here.. if only you'd used a word other than 'unidentifiable'....maybe played more on the eyes or less..

7. Shantaram-- welkome! hmm.. it was going good especially when she got angry and stuff, but i hope you were a pig is grammatically incorrect where i come from, though most post modernists would disagree haha.. I think you need to fix the last bit. It needs some workin'.

8.Sneha-- This sounds optimistic!

9. Rush.me-- aaah, the hope the hope. Not bad. we do get over it. I wonder if there's a special reason for using the caps for every word...do elaborate?

10.Sarang-- So good to read you!! :). I love the beginning and I almost voted for you! Not "ores" but "oars"... what is beautiful is the use of genuine-ish names...the idea and the feeling.. i could smell the wet wood.

11. Maggie-- Klassic! and welkome.

12. Mickey-- I just came back from a drought affected area in Bundelkhand..though I didnot climb an old peepal to look for water but my heart wept and lept like yours during the storm..for the children. Very real take..thank you for this..it made me feel like I was there all over again.

13. I shall kontinue!

Rajat S. Mukherjee said...

Pardon my typos....I have a habit of making quite a few...

Sarang Mahajan said...

@ Missy: Oh, so you aren't voting me because I made a spelling mistake! Okay, so much for the old friendship! :x

Sarang Mahajan said...

Vote karo, vote karo!

Unknown said...

:D Sowmya, rashmi, Mowgli, Rajat thanx for the comments

Coffee, Maggie and Sneha.. A treat from my side.. if or whenever you guys in Delhi..

All in all, enjoyed this blog..

Juhi said...

Hi everybody! Wow, this is terrific!

My apologies! But I guess even if God granted the living world another set of 24 hours it would seem too less! :P

Anyways, thankfully I seem to have just made it, phew!

@ Yuvraj
Thanks! Now I am content that when my books publish, atleast one person is going to buy them!! :D
You know, you should konfess every week, this way I'll have atleast one vote :D I was really scared as I scrolled down your comment. I didn't want to see anybody else's name there I guess!!
The reason that you can't see my blog is because it doesn't exist! Hehehe...

@ Sweta
Ofcourse Ruchi is just like I described her! She has been torturing me for the past 18 years!!! :P

@ Missy
Welcome back Missy!

@ Everybody
You are right, I have written better! :( and also :)

Juhi said...

Ok my komments...

I am going to do this in the reverse order (You see I am all for "Variety is the spice of life")

Singh:
Wow! Radical. You know I love your writing. It reminds of unsung songs and unheard melodies.

Mukherjee:
Its nice, reminded me of Kafka and Nietzsche. (Hope that comes as a compliment)

Monkey:
Hey! You are back! I am so glad! The take's really nice. Made me smell rain!

Mujumdar:
Beautiful. Almost made my vote!

Sowmya(don't know your last name):
I think there are some typos in the last 2 lines. But, anyways, its a nice piece.

Maggie:
That's a debateable statement!

Mahajan:
Mr.Mahajan, sorry for doing this here, but why have you taken away my fragrance??? :P
Shiver! Poor man. I loved it.

SuN:
Wow! Moving piece. I liked it.

Sneha:
Great definition for hope, and that too in verse! Hats off!

Shantaram:
Hahaha...and yeuww!

Bajoria:
I am proud of you. Its a beautifuk piece and you get my VOTE

the Fragrant(ahem Sarang):
I am not proud of myself. :((

Saab:
Thanks for the info on Ehsaas. Nice piece. Practical husband!

Sen:
Wow, really hopeful lady.

Jha:
Hmm...it is a well written piece, and thank you for the explanation, otherwise I couldn't make head or tail of it! It's really poignant and a bit sad, why do you think that god is violent?? Anyways, its nice.

Poison:
Its lovely. I loved the way you used "Anyways".

That's that then.

Ruchika said...

@juhi: Thankyou for the appreciation but I HAVE BEEN BUGGING YOU??? Dear Lord! wait till I call you up.

coffeeismypoison said...

hey!this is fun reading.
@doksaab : thank u so much sir!ur pride means far more than all the votes in the world!hopefully someday my parents may read this n tell me to carry on writing in between studies!

@amey : coffee is in delhi only beta ;o)

@ruchika and juhi : i loove watching sisters quarrel!i used to do so with my sis too!

Sowmya :) said...

Hi all...thx for ur comments. thought i shud take the guy's perspective for once. every1 potrays a lady's hopes being dashed by a man.
no vote though. will try & do better next time! so when r the results to be announced????

Unknown said...

Kontinued from the last post:-


k) Sowmya----
How very practical approach by the girl. Not every friendship can end in marriage.
Your take conveys to me that ”Hope for the best and be prepared for the……”

l) Amey Mujumdar----
Bed-ridden old man hoping for his son to return !
Very nicely picturised.
But I feel in this age this would be a false Hope :(

m) Mickey----
Welkom Back Monkey ! so ur Kreator got time to write for you as well as comment n vote.
I believe this was because of the slow pace of Klash these weeks, giving Him ample time.
Nice sober take from you this time, no monkeying around Jane :)

n) Rajat Mukherjee----
Hello Vakil Saab !! Welkome to Klash.
I kan say that I introduced Rajat to Klash at the last moment.
And written at such a short notice, his take is a master-stroke.

o) Konfessioner Singh----
Should we say Welkome back Ms Singh !!
I read the Ryan Adams lyrics "La Cienega Just Smiled" but still couldn’t make out what you wrote. So may be I’ll need some explaining ( I was not a very bright literature student you see, that’s why I opted for Bio )

Unknown said...

My Vote-
CIMP


I can not explain why, there were so many good takes, but I could relate more with her take, probably because of the simplicity of her poem :)

Unknown said...

Votes so far--


Ruchika---- -----3(Sarang,Rajat, Juhi)
Amey-------------3 (CIMP X 2, Sneha)
Rajat Mukherji---2(Mickey, Nandini)
CIMP-------------2(Ruchika, DokSaab)
Juhi-------------2(Yuvraj,Konfessioner Singh)
Saarang----------1(Amey)
Rashmi-----------1(Sowmya)
DokSaab----------1(Shantaram)
Sneha------------1(Rush.me)

Unknown said...

Thats 15 votes and a Tie !!
Lets see if Maggie resolves the tie, or adds to the confusion.
Where is ur Vote Maggie ??

Sarang Mahajan said...

@ Dok Saab, Maggie has already voted (even I almost missed to see her vote). So that makes Amey the leader with - 4.

Sarang Mahajan said...

What started off as a disappointment has turned out to be one of the very close Klashes. But the best thing is… it has been newcomers all the way! Though Sowmya didn’t get a vote this time, she looks good for a lot of them in future. And so do Shantaram, Yuvraj and Maggie (when she gets sufficient time next time). We had the highest number of debutants in this klash and they have dominated thoroughly.

If only our old mates joined us and the newcomers continued to participate we’ll easily reach a much greater number.

I wish to thank everyone who invited the new blood this time. Keep doing it and Klash will entertain us more and more!

Let us make the next klash even bigger! :-)

Sarang Mahajan said...

Kongrats Amey, what's the word for the next week!

Unknown said...

Sarang, one more positive thing about this Klash was 100% voting, which is very encouraging.
I have one suggestion to make. I feel every klasher should have the voting rights, whether (s)he participates in the current klash or not. Voting gives a reason to read the takes. We all are hard pressed for time so may be some of us could not write for a word, but atleast a chance to vote gives us a reason to read the takes.

Sarang Mahajan said...

Good suggestion Dok Saab, even I have been of a similar openion. How if we make every vote of the participating klasher worth two points, of the winning klasher worth three points and of non-participating klasher worth one point?

Missy Baba said...

i think its an excellent idea.. i agree with Sarang and dok saab!

Sarang Mahajan said...

That's that then. This new rule should be a part of the Word and Verdikt letter. What say, Shinjini? Please have a say if someone has to say anything.

Unknown said...

See what Richa had to lament in her komment on Strength
"richa said...

wonderful take everyone...sorry havent been able to komment..have been bedridden for the past few days and although i have read the Klash faithfully, dont have the "strength" yet to komment extensively. but if my vote would have counted I would have voted for...ohh well it doesnt count anyway :)
"

coffeeismypoison said...

I think its a great idea...word of caution...the institution of this new rule must not end up provide a ready made excuse for not KOMMENTING!!!
kongrats Amey...kindly give the new word so we can get cracking!!!

Mickey said...

Kongrats Amey Bhaiya
Alas ! I would also have got the invite for Koffee, had I not deleted my komments for you :( .

Also, you get three votes next klash, so I have missed my chance to woo you for the next klash :(

p.s. but my deleting the komments made you and Rajat bhaiyaa komment for everyone else's takes

Yuvraj Jha said...

Sarang Pai sahab..thanks fr the booster...missy of the twin aged didi said the same thing long back..hahahhaa...but i dont write for votes..infact, i am thinking of writing like konfessioner singh...for he excludes himself most times...i love this place...i love writing here, and mind it reading aswell...mind it!!! =D....

Yuvraj Jha said...

nice idea...but in case someone has written, then please make it mandatory to comment aswell, incase the person wants to vote...this rule must only be for those who havent written...*conditions aply...hehhehe...*read the offer document carefully...

Yuvraj Jha said...

@juhi - well i deny that god created man, i instead believe that man created god for his lust and greed, so what happens is HE is left as a political horse...i am not talking about faith...i am talking about god..so please tolerate what i am saying...he becomes a will to power...a mask for the power humgry, and the masses in the beautiful and misguiding soliloquy of teachers and preachers are mislead to slaughter...thats ofcourse the blind faith system, but then this is one place, where i havent seen fanatics...but i land up in a serious discussion every day..infact last saturday, me and my frnds were siting at home..and we were discussing the comment the pope just made, and there was this naga-chiristian friend of ours...and she started crying and all...then we asked her if she knew what we were talking about, she goes "no but we were talking about christianity"..and apparently we were screwing its case so she started crying...thats so wrong..she has been taught never to ask questions and so she blindly believes in a god...i dont say its wrong...may be thats the simple way of living...but then she is a gentle person and does not get violent...but most people jst pounce for no good reason, for something they have never remotely felt...

this incident hapened once..i was in shilong..and i was walking longside a friend..and someone saw us...so she got a call..."who's the guy with you? he looks like jesus christ!"..the next thing i asked her was.."when was the last time this person saw jesus?"..how do you knw what god looks like, if not through someone elses imagination! sorry for the long banter...but its the answer to "why do you think god i violent".god is not violent, its the image of god that man has created to suit himself that is violent...

Sowmya :) said...

Congrats Amey! Whats the (next) good word??
The idea of getting all klashers to vote and comment (irrespective of contribution)gets my vote.

Unknown said...

Incredible!! Thank you guys for all the critique and love you ppl for the votes .Special thanx to Coffee, Sowmya, Mickey, Sarang, rush.me, Magie & Sneha for the encouragement.. Oh yeah, Mickey, u’ll SURELY miss the coffee. And all my praises to Ruchika. Guess, your article was a shade better ;)

A clash of titans is what I see, so people give me some time to phrase a virgin expression.

Ruchika said...

hi, i think the idea of letting klashers vote even without being able to write for a word is a great one. and the new points distribution also seems very nice. It has my vote but I also would like to suggest that the vote of any klasher be considered only if they have commented on everyone's take. That way, we all benefit from constructive criticism.

@Amey: CONGRATULATIONS!!! and hurry up with the new word.... I'm dying to get my hands on it.

Sarang Mahajan said...

Nice suggestions coming along. Thanks Ruchika and all the new comers (Mowgli, Sowmya, Rajat) for taking such a keen interest. I think you will see the new rules in the Word and the Verdikt mail that's soon to hit your mailboxes.

Unknown said...

Thought of a word which may sound fascinating...

"SHADOW"

Opinions please..

Yuvraj Jha said...

@ sarang Pai sahab - you have been away for too long I think :x...I have been writing for KNK since december...though thanks for including me in the list of enthusiasts ;)...

@ amey - sounds like an interesting word...and i forgot to mention 'congratulations'...where is the party for the crown?

Sarang Mahajan said...

I like it. And I don't think we have done it before, have we Dok Saab?

Sarang Mahajan said...

@ Mowgly: Sorry bro. I act like a nut at times. :(

Unknown said...

@ Sarang !!
So you have recognized my abilities as the official record-keeper :).
No we have done Candle but not Shadow.

What did you do to that list of Krowning Glories I had sent?

Sarang Mahajan said...

Of course, Dok Saab, you haven't missed a single Klash and you have a much better memory than me. :)

Sarang Mahajan said...

And as to the Winning Klashes wala blog - I will workout something and send it to you tomorrow. Will ask the klashers also. We will work it out for sure, in a very near future. :-)

Ruchika said...

its a really nice word....can we get cracking already?

NonsSens said...

Amey - Congrats

Sarang - Whats the deadline like?

Sarang Mahajan said...

Nandini: Sunday.

I hope you all have receivde the mail with the deadline, if you haven't let me know I'll add you up to the mailing list.