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Mowgli (120)
Baked Bored Moon
- Bored silence,
Baked bored moon,
Blue bored trees,
The Amateur fool.
- Your palm’s sweating – Expressionlessly, she asked - Do you want to leave my hand for sometime?
Strange; why would she want to leave his hand – Thinking; he declined.
- Are you forever going to be this quite?
He has read in those books that love can best be described through silence. His eternal vow, never to utter a word. He truly loves her.
- Martyrs of those love poems
I pity your innocence.
- Poor victim of book shelves, it’s just your addiction of the idea of loving me - she thought; leaving.
- The last episode, of the last goodbye
I’ll send you a smile; sometime.
Pinchi (120)
Her thoughts invoked a deep feeling...
Set my heart throbbing, my head reeling,
Cupid asked "Is this infatuation?"
I said - "It's more …-… it's addiction!"
Eating, sleeping are less than reckoned,
Wanting, dreaming, - a close second;
Amor asked "What is this affliction?"
I said - "It's more …- …it's addiction!"
Lord! Save me, from the forces that be,
Of the heavens, the earth and of the sea;
Benten cried - "I grant you benediction!"
I said - "I need more… -… it's addiction!"
Gods! Don't ask me why I don’t crave,
For heavenly abodes, as I'm a slave;
To someone for whom I pledge my devotion
I'm in love, yes I am - and it is love addiction!
Mickey the Monkey (119)
I want a divorce, Virmani Uncle.
Why Jane? On what grounds?
Mickey is such a nice monkey,
I know him since his childhood.
Uncle! isn't addiction sufficient ground under US laws.
Mickey and addiction, why he is a teetotaler, I can vouch for him.
Not alcohol, Uncle, he is addicted to Orkut.
Whole night he is sending scraps.
Shweta, Sweta, Rashmi, Nandini, Seema, Shinjini, Richa, Ana, Priyanka,
I don't know with how many girls he is flirting these days.
He has stopped talking to me. Even I have to scrap him.
Jane beta, I can't take your case, because if I win, it will set a precedent.
Your Aunty is trying hard to divorce me on the same grounds.
Shweta Srivastav (120)
'Are you addikted?' her voice wavered.
'Addikted?' he hesitated, 'Yes, I am', his eyes looked far into the horizon.
'But why, how?' her voice trembled with emotion.
'The whole universe conspires to make you fall. I couldn't do anything', eyes afar.
A moment of silence, 'Can't you leave it?'
He thought, 'No, there is no cure! Once fallen, there's no hope!'
'But there has to be something', her eyes searched his face, Hopeful.
He looked into her eyes, 'Will you help me?'
……Her eyes grew eager.
He held her hand, 'Will you… marry me?'
She looked lost.
It took her a moment to catch the mischief in his eyes, then, a twinkle in hers said all he wanted to hear!
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Nandini Sen (118)
I always get a high.
But if you go away
I heave a deep sigh.
In foes and friends
I've lost all interest.
Fantasizing about you
To me seems the best.
I've lost the desire
To eat and to drink.
Sitting all alone
It's about you I think.
My heart beats faster
When you are around.
If I don't see you
It gets shattered to the ground.
Just to be with you
I can do any thing.
I can kill I can steal
Far-off stars I can bring.
Since the day I met you
I have this affliction.
Without you I can't live
You are my addiction.
Kaveesh Sinha (120)
I could feel her distress.
Clutching her hands, I asked, "What's it now?"
"Nothing. Just an organizational flaw in me", she quipped.
"Cummon. I'd be leaving for England tomorrow. D'ya want me to leave with a heart distraught?", I said expecting an answer.
" I'm addicted. Yet again. Knitting these sweaters for you is an embarrassing habit, like trying on other people's laundry….you'd be leaving eventually. I loved you to break addiction to this world. I kicked it, and now seem to be stuck with you, attacking my heart instead the mind. Grow attached; you grow addicted… thwart addiction; grow angry…be angry; confuse your mind… Con…………………"
I kissed those parting hands. Silence………
Her tears spoke silently, "Now don't …please!"………………Addiction again.
Rush.me (120)
Any Comfy Place @ Any Random Hour of the Day
Now let's get talking..........
About..........???
When
Depends..........!!!
As in?..........
When He wants it to be..........
Hmmm..........
What do you exactly mean?..........
I wanna know whether he's more addicted to u or to me?? ..........
Hehehehhehehehe..........
(Blank)..........
My Dear Book, addiction kills. You desire to kill?? ..........
Oks enuf, 7 pages in me, last sip in u. After that, let's see..........
I hope he devours the last page without needing me more..........
Betcha, he'll. The Killer's gonna b revealed..........
(After the last sip and 3 pages)
Y's he sittin' up??? ..........
The addiction..........
Juz 3 more man!!!..........
He can't concentrate..........
OMG!!! Try ya, only 3 more..........
Well..........
Blah Queen (103)
They say I am an Addikt.
Am I a sinner, then?
They say drinking is haraam
So is dancing and singing.
Do I become a sinner, then?
Why did they call of this haraam?
Why should it be viewed as a sin?
They call it ‘addiktive’.
They call addiktion haraam.
Do I become a sinner, then?
A billion other wrongs
And a billion other addiktions.
Why is religiosity not concerned as an addiktion?
Why is religion not haraam?
Do we all become sinners, then?
They say I am an addikt
I am addikted to questioning my religion.
Do I remain a sinner, then?
GSV (105)
Random thoughts, Mixed emotions
Craving to cry
Need some 'high'
And then….
Just one smile
You See… Here I am again…. Addicted to life!
Detached feelings, Shattered dreams
Out of control desire
Holding nerves
And then….
Just one warm hug
You Feel!… Here I am again…. Addicted to life!
Racing perfection, Comparing factions
Divided mind
No place to hide
And then..
Just one song of silence
You Listen!... Here I am again…. Addicted to life!
You know
One got to have an Addiction
Before you quit it
I am Drinking wine of life
You share!...I may be here this last time
So Can I Die?
Truth Dude (119)
We were meant for each other, or so I thought
I changed my mind, when she walked off.
She turned me on like a bitch in heat
and when we were done she took off in a beat.
I felt so screwed, I wallowed in shame
she's my addiction, and she wasn't to blame.
I know I'm being used
but that's okay man because I like the abuse.
Then she came back and I would stay low
I'd take her hand and then say 'Hello'.
She'd push me off, and turn to walk away
I kneeled down and I asked her to stay.
And I know she's playing with me
but its ok because I got no self esteem.
The Red Ronin (118)
Monochrome static crackles through my head but I don't look so dead. I hear the bird cry and fly with all the courage I can muster. Listening to the shadows I fly high for that is all there is to it. I say goodbye to my friend who served me well for a moment but now I need to wake up and walk it alone. I reached out each moment hoping she would change her ways but I had kid myself and instead shook hands with death. She is gone and I wonder how to fill the void that is pitted with the memories of life.
Seeking reprieve, I wake up and start trying to blow some bubbles.
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Genuine Fake(119)
As I entered the room that morning, thoughts of interviewing her made me feel curious. I pulled up my recorder, and began my normal course of questioning. Explanations of her sins in her calm demeanor, made her increasingly mysterious. That she outlived pains of any normal human being and that confidence was merely a make up eased me up a bit. Her take on drugs, both, narcotic and medicine, just represented the fact that she went on from one addiction to another, all ways for her to feel numb. She seemed perfectly normal. Uma Pradhan, a serial killer and an established schizophrenic, was probably just uninterested in a conventional life. Idealism for her was just an addiction as well.
Mandappa KC (112)
I see pink blue skies
Misty summer rainbow butterflies
In the midst of all these lies
You give me these magical lines
Cuz you are my addiction
I say all I can say
when shit hits the ceiling all day
you are my only way
cuz you are my addiction
(fade) you are my addiciton
My whole life blue
But ill always count on you
Smile like mid-morning dew
When I'm down under, I turn to you
cuz you are my addiction
I can see clearly
prancing with bits of u ins'e me
eagles, making me free
cuz you are my addiction.
(fade) you are my addiciton
(fade) you are my addiciton
Richa Gupta (50)
The hollow body I see
On the long road of addiction
Wasted and twisted in agony
Crying for release
Slave to the demands
Addicted to the "E"
Where has he come from
Who is he??
No name, no identity
In the sea of human waste
He is just an addict
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Konfessioner Singh(120)
It’s not easy to…
Shut up, I’m turning it off.
How many times will you turn it off? She’s gone mad, she’ll hear it after we’re gone...
Mahtob, snap out of it yaar… You can’t do this to yourself!
Meera…it’s not like you didn’t go through it…
You both are lovesick bitches, I’ve had enough I’m…
… see you guys, gotta catch the 6:15.
Yeah Meeru, call..
You think the bitch is gonna call? …hai meraaaa dill!
Mahtob get over it, actually don’t. It’s the only addiction you’re ‘allowed’ haha!
Bitch…oh I loveeee this line…
She walks off.
Dammit, where’s that song… did I delete it? Wish I could delete him.
“Don’t sway… ever go away.. sway my way…” shit.shit.shit…
120 comments:
just made it in time..... phew!!! :((
Missy Jee........where art thou????
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Have patience Rush.me :)
You also seem to be addikted to Klash. I am not the only addikt here :)
lol....Certainly Dok SaaB!!!
addiktion is just on the rise....!!!
my next opportunity to read the other blogs would be tomorrow morning and i dont wanna spend sleepless-anticipating-sleepless-anticipating-sleepless-anticipating-sleepless nights....!!!
but guess...okay..i shall refrain from impatience..!!!
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MISSY JEE!!! MISSY JEE!! JALDI POST KARO NAAA!!!! [:D]
kar diya! kar diya! lol
sahi hai...sab sahi hai.
looks like we're addikted to klashing..and with posts like these...who wouldn't be?!
:)
Missy Jee.....Micky Jee ki entry Invisible see ho gayee hai....!!!
You're right Rashmi! Wonder where it'd gone? I had deleted all the entries to reformat them and maybe I missed Mickey's while pastin'...not that he's komplaining haha..okay people Kommenting Season!!!
Ohh Ms Singh !
Whole afternoon I was depressed, thinking you deleted my take under pressure from Mr Virmani.
hahaha oh No MICKEY! I'm sure GSV will laugh heartily at your take this week! I was actually trying to reformat the post and deleted everything and might have forgotten to add your klash...sincerest apologies! :(
Time to prove your Klash addiKtion ;-)
Wonderful word and enjoyed writing on it! :)
Great takes by everyone! Love, obsession and addiKtion... don't we all love to talk about them!! >>sigh<<<
Kommenting time...
@ Mowgli... Being the protagonist of a great (jungle) book, reading as an addiktion is not surprising ;) An apt post expressing any book worm's 'addiktion'.
- Martyrs of those love poems
I pity your innocence.
- Poor victim of book shelves, it’s just your addiction of the idea of loving me - she thought; leaving. The pity, the love of pure addiktion comes out so well in these particular lines.
@ Pinchi.... Have just read in books and heard from people that love is addiktive. But how simply you express 'love addiktion', making it all sound so normal.
Gods! Don't ask me why I don’t crave,
For heavenly abodes, as I'm a slave; He is a slave of addiktion! ;)
@ Mickey the monkey.... LOL... Oh Mickey please give time to Jane 'in person', else her winning the case would break many happy...eerr... marriages atleast ;)
@ Shweta.... The concern and the mischief, thats love for ya!! ;)
@ Nandini.... Addiktion in general is considered as an abnormal craving or love for something. But your take on addiktion is probably the first optimistik one I have ever come across. Really nice :-)
@ Juhi... Wow!! That was a fragrant post! Loved Ah! You enticing kasturi, why do you play with him so? The post vividly expresses the madness that takes over when 'addikted'. :)
More koming up later... :)
HI All!!
Nice takes !! (as always)
New faces !!(As always)
Welkome Juhi, Hope you too will get addikted with this phenomenon.
Komments later .
But one request to Sir Virmani, pleae dont take up this case, varna mickey ke saath saath main bhi barbaad ho jaungaa
17 beautiful takes....
16 witty komments to make....
(and 16 for my master tooo:( )
bahut mushkil hai.....
haha...I completely agree with Arnav..nut heads shud get a chance to get the groove of the hidden meanings. This one in particular refers to me. However, this implies to Shinjini Singh in particular. I always find myself on board the illiteracy voyage when i read her takes! :X
N yes Pinchi...I did mean thwart. The girl is super emotional and in her poignancy and pain..she is gibbering all this. Many a times we tend to speak shit when we want to hide our state of mind. Words fill the spaces that the tears were supposed to do in this case.
The girl is saying how all this is vicious for her. It is common..when we try to push addiction away..we tend to invite frustration. Dok Saab...am I right?
Hence..thwarting (preventing the occurrence of..) the addiktion)..whew! Hope I cud do justice the clearance of the OHT! :)
Plz do comment now...!!
Arnav(Pinchi)..you've put into words what I felt...yeah I too belong to the OHT brigade...particularly for this Klash(Addiction is a "deep" word). I mean most of the takes seemed super...and while reading them, I got the feeling that I was missing out on deeper meanings in many of the takes.
Which means its not an ideal minframe to comment.
Anyways, I shall be a brave fool and comment on what my limited thought process could grasp.
(Will comment in a while)....
@ Pinchi
Hi Pal, your take initially had 139, but now I find only 120 !!
I wonder who pinched those 19 precious words ?? but a good job!! Man.
"In utter loneliness a writer tries to explain the inexplicable."--- John Steinbeck.
@ Mickey
Arrey woh maine hi 120 kar diye they... actually i used an online java script to count the words... but when i submitted it to Shinjini.. she used MS Word to count and found that the word limit was exceeded. So I guess MS Word is the standard for counting.. so I edited my entry while the entries were open. No foul play here... chill.
@ Pinchi: In-Tell-I-Gent!!!!
oh.....OHT....just my state of mind.....whenever it comes to Kommenting and VotinG...:((
but still my demure mind shall try!!!
Well, i must say, love is surely in the air....... ;-)
@ Mowgli:
love can best be described through silence astonishingly true.....!!! addiction to Love is even deadlier than to a lover...!!!
@ Pinchi:
Oh, Mr.Cupid!! Where art Thou!?! Heart throbbing, Head reeling.....dont we all, at some point of time, wanna get addikted to above norms....!!!
@ Mickey:
Wonderful!!! Wonderful!!! :D
@ Shweta Srivastav:
Sometimes the only way out, is through it....!!! Rightfully put, when the addiktion is too much to take, just welcome it with open arms.....cant get worst....lol..;-)
@ Nandini Sen:
Really true to the name, no-nonsense here!! Optimism personified...to find a glimmer of hope amidst the Dark ages of the vices.....!!!
@Juhi the Fragrant:
Just Like the Flora, the set-up is imbibed with all the beauties of the natural world..!! Kudos 'n WelKome!!!!
@ Dok Saab:
True Symptoms of Addiktion!! Nicely Put Forth!!!
@ Kaveesh Sinha:
Thanks for the clearing of the OHT.....Glad to know ur thoughts!! Yes, the Pain and the agony of the addikt, is clearly visible....Sadly no cure for it...!! May God give u strength to endure it...Amen!!!
@ Rush.me:
I think some words for the sake of OHT..: The conversation is the hypothetical banter between 2 of addiktions of mine, not quite long ago..... The Tea, rather the Numerous cups of it....and any Murder Mystery...!! The Body craves for the caffeine whereas The Mind Yearns for the Solving of the Crime...Who Wins????.....Keep guessing..!!! lol... ;-)
@ Blah Queen:
Some food for thought here.... A vicious circle of Mandatory Imaginations and Trivial Thoughts...to form a hierarchy here, seems next to impossible...!!!
@ GSV:
Addicted to Life..may be the most innocent yet the most potent of all...!!! one might never realize how deadly the addiction can grow and at the same time, inspiring and motivating the other to make a life out of the living...!!!
@ Truth Dude:
hmm....the most evil side of the addiction...that would consume u and ur alter-ego..!!!
@ The Red Ronin:
I sincerely wish if someone would write a BooK on "How to fill the void that is pitted with the memories of life".... Truly..a necessity for recuperating from the damned disease.... :((
@ Genuine Fake:
Outrageously Simple and Bulls-eye!!! Kudos....
@ Mandappa KC:
Just Loove the (fade)......gives a much desired pause in the sensitive and magical reverie of thoughts!!
@ Richa Gupta:
Seemed too dark.....
@ Konfessioner Singh:
Deleting never solved the problemo....!!! SIGH...wished there were better ways to get around it...!!! :((
hmm.....Kommenting to ho gayi...subah se likh rahi hu.....voting kal..!!! :D
Hi fellow addicts. This is the part I like most. But in this klash I had to write 32 Komments (16 for my Creator too who will obviously not acknowledge).
Blah Queen……
just like a new addict you used the K word in addict but forgot in call.
Religiousness as an addiction, yes I believe it can be addictive. And no questions allowed in this addiction, if you have to question, you have to be out of it. Just like the commander in army asks , koi shaq, jawaan and doesn’t expect any one to raise his hand.
Dok Saab ……
Very clinical description of an addict. I believe you have seen quite a few in your Psychiatry posting Dok. And good effort at rhyming. I had made a list of 30 words rhyming with addiction, but could not frame them into a poem :)
Genuine Fake……
GF , schizophrenia is a serious psychiatric disorder, where the thought process of a person is totally distorted, where does idealism come here. If Uma is a schizophrenic, she can not be an idealist, let alone an addict, who are just a psychologically dependent persons.
GSV ……
Very nice poem once again, Sir, very thought provoking. Except for the last line, the significance of which I failed to understand here.
(aur sir jee, Jane ki baato ko seriously mat lena, usko mai chat karnaa sikhaa rahaa hoo, jaldi hi hum done online scrap-scrap khelenge, :))
Juhi the Fragrant ……
Hi Juhi, welcome !
You are very good at synonyms, Juhi, three for smell, two for touching, great.
And I suppose you are an animal lover, so you must be a good person. Very beautifully picturised deer behavior.
Kaveesh Sinha ……
lovely sentiments, Kaveesh bhai, no explanation was needed anyways
Konfessioner Singh……
good one, Ms Singh, music and books can become serious addictions; they can hide you from some harsher realities of life.
Mandappa KC ……
Hi Mandappa, You are my addiction has been used by both you and Doksaab, now who was inspired by whom? Or both of you got inspiration from some common source :) but lovely lines!!
Mowgli ……
Welkome back, buddy!! Nice innocent take, but I feel addiction is not the soul here, firm belief in bookish knowledge, is.
Nandini Sen ……
You have described so many forms of addiction, but somehow the impact you had in earlier takes is missing.
Pinchi ……
you have very intelligently used all the rhyming words I found at rhymer.com , and I read your 139 take and now this 120 take, very efficient editing. Lovely take.
The Red Ronin ……
118 words , but just The Word is not there. You have to use it in your take, Ronin.
Richa Gupta ……
Richa Didi!!, this take went high above my head. What is this ’E’
Rush.me ……
well after the explanation, great!!, very kreative
Shweta Srivastav ……
Addicted in love great feeling, but let them marry, saraa nashaa utar jayega.
and shweta the word was addiction,
Truth Dude ……
Addicted to the bitch in heat but why use such small fonts even if you have no self esteem , Dude Bhai!!
@ Rush.me
Li-Ke-Wi-Se
:)
@ Mickey
Oye rhymer.com ni tha... rhymezone.com hoga shayad... :p
comenting...comenting...here comenting...
@Pinchi - I said - "I need more… -… it's addiction!"..oh yes!!even i need more..hehehe...amay-jing write. there couldnt be a better way to write this thought.
@Mickey - no no no..i am also an orkut freak like virmani uncle and mikey...i will protest against suh writing, you will be sent to dubai like M.F.Hussain..hehehe..funny write.
@Sweta - i am going to try tht some day. bhary bhary ajeebsa touching, like i realy felt nice somewhere inside, the way it ended..smooth and happy.You coul make an animation short film out of it. it'll look nice.
@nandini - With tubes in her nose, does she have a choice? all addiction ends thts the moral of the story, i believe, they all end with simone. i think this writes a hard and painful truth of life.
@Juhi - spectacular, amazing, splendid. i dont knw wht else to say. the pace and the story and the abstract addiction, is almost mythical. loved it.
@doc saab - hehe, sounds like you recalled your college days. eakdam when i was in 12 i had actualy felt like tht. hehe noice! dok saab, noice!
@kaveesh - Thats a tough one, true parting with addiction is a tough one, but doesnt your write make addiction a synonym of love, infact there is no room fr love in the atmosphere ever because the idea is love but the name is adiction. as in tht wht one reads is actualy a deep love, where as its been called adiction so you knw. ther can never be love anymore. i might be wrng.
@rush.me. - hahaha...the war of the book and the coffee pot, now the next biggest trilogy, hehehe...realy nice, i liked the way it goes on into something that is unexpected.
@blah queen - thats a nice one, real nice. i will not comment and trivialise it, bow to you(full bend)..
@ gsv - kya bolun mein..bas matlab kya hi boun..."I am Drinking wine of life,You share!...I may be here this last time,So Can I Die?"..kya sahi line hai...(clappings)
@truth dude - if thats something tht happened in life, than i am quite sure it must have been painful, though you put it in a lot less tension of words. painful.
thak gaya...baanki comment thodi der mein...
First of kudos to Mowgli for participating inspite of being admitted in hospital after an accident..he's better now.. :)
@Pinchi--Good idea. We'll incorporate it once I've konsulted Nikhil and Sarang :).
@EVERYONE PLEASE PUT YOUR VOTES IN BOLD FONT AT THE END OF YOUR KOMMENT SO I CAN ADD THEM EASILY!!
@ Mowgli.....Real Inspirational story..!!! That should go into my blog..!!!
@ Missy Baba......is SunDae the Deadline for VotinG????
yes rashmi! 6:00 p.m. sunday.
My Vote to
Rush.Me
For a very kreative and imaginative take.
Votes so far:-
GSV---1(Pinchi)
Rush.Me----1(Mickey)
@ Mowgli Bhai
Very sorry to hear about your Accident.
Abhee kaise hain??
kanhe ye
accident ho gayaa!!
permanent ho gayaa!!
rabba rabbaa....
walaa accident to nahee thaa??
hehe..missy didi, i didnt expect you to write it here..but never the less, me fine now, i jst had a broken wrist and some other bruises, my frnds still serious. so thts the reason i have been in the hospital apart frm the first day...accident ho gaya rabba rabba!..hahahhaa...
Juhi - Hi & Welcome. Really nice piece to start in Klash with.
Mowgli - Goodness gracious - you personify true addiktion to Klash..I mean, in hospital, broken wrist, yet Klashing away to high glory. Boy!!!!! truly super......a Happy & speedy recovery to you.
Lets start on Komments & Voting -
Mowgli - Poor him...addicted to her & bound by bookish knowledge of love...."Love can best be describe thru' silence"...true - hope she understood it. Nice piece.
Pinchi - Cupid/Amor/Benten - you've invoked them - you're bound to be addicted to love. Well put.
Mickey - Arrey, arrey. You better spend quality time with Jane. As it is she's having it tough - being addicted to a monkey - who in turn is addicted to Orks!!!!
But beware - dont let Jane get too much of GSV, lest his beautiful poems take her heart away :-))
As usual you're at your comic best...thanks 4 the laffs.
Shweta - Is it the February magic?...nice, melifluous love addiction....Good take - but the word was "addiction"....whilst you got it as "addicted"
Juhi - I loved your version of addiction. Yes, I've heard that the deer is addicted to kasturi...and often fatally so. You brought out addiction very aptly.
Dok Saab - Addiction defined perfectly. So what are you addicted to - a person, a memory, a thing, a smell???
Kaveesh - Does addiction equal Possesiveness? If you are addicted to a thing or a person - do you tend to get possesive about it?Parting is sad...and specially if you are bound by addiction.
Well potrayed.
Rush.Me - Hey...creatively put...I myself have gone through such situations so many times....addicted to a book...and in trying to finish it irrationality takes over...time is forgotten, you withdraw into your shell...and just read on!!!...Ohh another thought - does addiction get in irrationality?
Blah Queen - Ahh deep thoughts.Is "addiction" really a dark emotion?? or is it just an extreme of"special liking/interest"?? Whatever!!!!Your piece provokes one to think.
GSV - Now this is getting very monotonous & boring...to say that its super....I mean. how do you consistently "hit the mark"...even Sachin Tendulkar isn't this consistent. Sigh!!! but have to say - addicted to life is trult great....very, very well written.....Keep drinking the "wine of life"
Truth Dude - Ohhh totally "hooked" hook, line & sinker...and falling more. Gosh your addiction is indeed dark....makes you "have no self esteem". Good potrayal of the dark, dark addiction.
Red Ronin - Addicted to her memory.....nice. You built it up well, but forgot to mention the word.
Genuine Fake - Hmmm kind of nice. Uma was probably addicted to killing...maybe you could've played up on that.
Mandappa KC - Another viewpoint on Addiction....it can actually inspire you "when shit hits...you're my only way" / "When I'm down under, I turn to you" - all b'cos "you're my addiction". Liked it.
Richa - Hey, are you trying to potray a junkie & his out of control addiction? I think thats what you're trying to say....infact I'd thought more people would write on druggies / junkies....you know the in your face addiction we have heard/read/seen.
Its is a tad grim & dark....but I guess thats just another form of addiction.
Konfessioner Singh - Ohhh, how it drives one nuts, when one gets addicted to a particular song...its just keeps playing in your mind over & over again....reminds me of Kylie Minogue's song "Cant Get you Out of my Head".....your piece is a very realistic kind of situation.
And my Vote to JUHI.....for creatively potraying addiction.
(No GSV, I'm not considering your piece for voting. You piece should be "for reading pleasure only" - not up for Klash votes :))
Hi everyone, thanks for the warm welcomes.
Dear Pinchi, since times immemorial I have heard people around me talk about the musk deer running about the hills in search of the overpowering scent that entrances it, not knowing that the secret to it is hidden within its very own self. The deer is simply addicted to it. This idea forms the basis of the comparison between a person who is on an addicted quest for life(or the meaning of it) not knowing that the quest ends within.
And if, what you say is true, thanks for the info :)
All the pieces are simply wonderful.
Mowgli- I really like your personifications(cakification? :P)
the baked moon, the blue trees. Fascinating. Also I particularly enjoyed "Martyrs of those love poems" and "Poor victim of book shelves", there is such an irony there, because books empower you, but they also, as so aptly put here, "victimize you". Wonderful.
Pinchi- This is an extremely accurate description of the rush that one feels when infatuated, sorry "addicted" to love. And, the conversations with the symbols of love-mark of good grey cells.
@ Mickey- Hahaha...that is hilarious.
Shweta- Wow, that smells of melted chocolate. Really sweet. And "The whole universe conspires to make you fall. I couldn't do anything', eyes afar" and "No, there is no cure! Once fallen, there's no hope!" these really set the pace of your piece. Marvelous.
Nandini- Its a nice piece, with excellent plays of addiction.
Dok Saab- This sounds like a bollywood masala. I don't know which lines to quote. Every line drips with filmi pangs, losing the desire to eat and sleep, heart beats faster, far-off starts to be brought! Delightful. :D
Kaveesh- Oh the poor girl, don't leave her! Its a very strong piece of dialogue, and really conveys the distress of the girl, as well as the other person.
Rush.me- That's a really different take on a very usual addiction. Loved it. Especially "My Dear Book, addiction kills", I have no idea why!
Blah- Nice set of questions there. Don't know what else to say. Sorry.
GSV- That is one beautiful piece on the ultimate addiction-life.
Truth- After all the happy addictions, its refreshing to read about a sad one. The saddest line that really goes out to you (or rather me :D)is "she's my addiction, and she wasn't to blame"
The Red- Does your piece want to convey the addiction to the void? It's a nice article.
Genuine- Its a bit confusing.
Mandappa- It sounds a bit like a cross between a lyric and rap. Interesting.
Richa- Excellent picturisation of an addict.
Konfessioner- Addicted to a song? Tell me about it! Good one.
And my vote goes to trrrrn trrat trrr trrrrnt(this means fanfare, and not what you are thinking ;))
Mowgli. Applause!
P.S- Sorry to hear about your accident. I hope you get well soon.
The rest of the Ko-mments...
@Theredronin - is ti realy intentionaly sad, or is it my imagination of it? "I reached out each moment hoping she would change her ways but I had kid myself and instead shook hands with death"..i realy liked this part.
@Genuinefake - thats a growling write. addiction, schizophrena, drugs, murder..ooh!! i believe rock and roll is missing...female morrison..hehehe...
dead cats
dead rats
just to see what
they were at..alright! hehehe ;)
@Mandappa - woho!
prancing with bits of u ins'e me
eagles, making me free
cuz you are my addiction
does this refer to copulation? hehehe..nice peice, have you given a tune to it, or music?
@richa - i have loads of frnds who are drug addicts, your poem reminds me of each one of them, wated talents i call them...personaly touching.
@Kaun-fresher? sing (hehe ;))- i wish i could delete some of those ear worms aswell, sad though they just catch up on you. noice, noice.
“Don’t sway… ever go away.. sway my way…” shit.shit.shit…"...oh how i love that line. means a lot if you think about it.
ohk...commenting is over...i am done..dnt kill me please (any and all of you)...hehhe...
@nonsense - thank you fr the wishes. i do think i am addicted.
now the votin part...and my vote goes to...da da da...goes to...da da da...
"JUHI THE FRAGRANT"...amazingly creative...
tank you tanvi tank you..i am crying like a chanki pande if he would have got an oskar..hehehe...
and a messege to all please i have just started writin sort of an epic, not in the original format, though i am tryin hard, its there on my blog. it called "the battle of evermore"..you'll find one on the main page and the other in '2007/december/battle of evermore; the symbol'..this is the first chapter..please read and comment, how i could like put it on track, before it gets realy out of hand.i am clueless, i would appriciate some criticism, please please.
@ Pinchi, Kon. Singh Regarding explaining the klashes, one can always explain his/her klash in the comments section if (s)he thinks people will not get the hidden meanings. I don’t think it has to be incorporated with the post itself, as it will become even more komplicated for Konfessioners to post.
Now My Komments:-
1. Mowgli ---
Why did she pity innocence, a virtue difficult to find these days. addiction of the idea of loving, what an addiction !!
His bookish knowledge failed to convey his true love for her. Nice take.
2. Pinchi ---
So its rhymezone.com for you :)
Total dependence on your beloved, true, love is an addiction!
Nicely rhymed poem!
3. Mickey the Monkey ---
Be careful of the lawyer, Monkey, don’t meddle with him too much, else he may bring a suit or two against you. Find some other target for your takes.
And if all the girls you have named get together, Poonch to kut hi gayee hai, kanhee naak naa kut jaaye
But you brought out well the fact that most of us here are in fact addicted to Orkut :)
4. Shweta Srivastav ---
Addikted with a K, so you are also a Klash Addikt!!
Addiction was the word though; you haven’t used it in your take. But a very nicely narrated addiction-to-the-beloved theme
5. Nandini Sen ---
Nandini, you always want to pack in so much in those 120 words. Like your previous takes, you have tried to put in so many addictions in a single klash. Very intelligent !
True Dok Saab! it takes me a lot of work to format-do a word kount-send personal mails-add (thank you Mickey :) )-change the word, put a krown etc etc because the formatting on the post is different from word...which is weird...I have to re-space everything!!(EVERY SINGLE time a new post is added !!)
I often ask the klasher if I have a doubt about what she/he is trying to say... I think others can follow suit on that one..? also maybe a klasher wants to keep the meaning hidden?!
Cheers!
Shinjini.
Votes so far--
GSV---1(Pinchi)
Rush.Me----1(Mickey)
Juhi--1 (Mowgli)
Mowgli--1 (Juhi)
6. Juhi the Fragrant ---
Hi Tanvee, Welkome !!
Is Juhi the fragrant your usual pseudonym , or for this take only.
Very nicely written, Tanvee, but I feel you have got it all wrong.
Addiction is a psychological or physical dependence upon something. But the story of a musk deer is different. Poor deer is in a futile quest of the kasturi without realizing that its within him. Its like us searching for God in the whole world though He is within us. So your take is not about addiction, rather about an unending quest.
You have not even used the word in your take, Tanvee
Mowgli, Juhi
Yeh kyaa chal rahaa hai!!!
I know you have a softer corner for the flower,
Chaddhi pahan ke phool khilaa hai n all that :)
7. Kaveesh Sinha ---
Different approach to addiction, withdrawal symptoms, nice take Kaveesh.
8. Rush.me ---
Lovely take Rashmi, I am addicted to both :) books and coffee
Very creative indeed.
9. Blah Queen ---
Religion is an addiction Blah Q, it helps you run away from reality.
And no you cant question your religion.
If you are a believer you shouldn’t
and if you aren’t then why should you?
10. GSV ---
Very Lyrical, GSV ji, don’t find words to comment upon your take. But the last para, kuch samajh nahi aayaa
11. Truth Dude ---
are you describing addiction or masochism?
The rhyming is good,
but the fonts are very small, was Missy trying to reduce it to the point of illegibility ;)
12. The Red Ronin ---
Ritesh, you also haven’t used the word , and I couldn’t understand your take, need some explaining, please.
More komments and Vote later !!
OMG God....My first Vote....Thank u Thank u....Mickey....!!!
Imagine me with a Miss India Face, 440-watt smile and everything else...... :D
okay back to normal.....
another Innocent query.....
Can we all, as in the newbies can know the Birth and Introduction of the Klash???? a short one......if possible....please...may be?????
Im just so confused between her, her and him, him...... y cant life be any simpler....!!! :((
will definitely decide upon someone...!!!
13. Genuine Fake --- Interviewing a serial killer who is a schizophrenic too, great imagination.
14. Mandappa KC ---
You are my addiction :) I don’t know how this line came to my mind, almost like an old song repeating in the background. I some how managed to fit it in the last line, but you made it into a lovely song, very beautiful take.
15. Richa Gupta ---
Beautiful take, short and powerful !!
16. Konfessioner Singh ---
Finally your turn !! Missy ab bahut ho gayaa, aur comments nahi likh saktaa.
Music is one addiction I have given up. Two people cant be addicted to the same thing in a house. With teenage children at home, my choice never gets played, so I have settled for my other addiction, books.
Mahtob and Meera have been in your takes before, any particular association?
Votes !!
abhi sooch nahi payaa, sabhi bahut achhee hai.
kal sochenge !!
Thank you everyone. It is a great high to know from people who are not my mom, my sis, etc. in short people from my family, that they really liked to read my piece. Maybe, I have a chance!
Ms. Singh! I got 2 votes not one(sorry to sound too excited)
Dear Dok Saab, Juhi the fragrant was supposed to be the only name that you guys would know me as, but my utter and complete inefficiency to understand and operate a computer and its intricacies have deemed it impossible! I don't even know how to make my letters bold while commenting here, as you have done. How did you do it?
Thank you for the praise. As for the piece, I think that the deer is addicted to the smell so much so that he doesn't even stop to really locate the source, just runs after it blindly. So, its a sort of a blind addiction that inflicts it, making it lose its senses. And, is it necessary to use the WORD?
Hahaha Mickey the Monkey, but we don't even know our first names! Oh, I am sorry, s/he does.
Cheers!
Mowgli - the most surreal description of Addiction.
Pinchi - Love as an addiction seems to be a common theme. :)
Mickey the Monkey - nice :) real nice
Shweta Srivastav - Love baby...love the addiction that never stops. iI loved the w"will you marry me...and then the mischief and twinkle. nice :)
Nandini Sen - The life stages of addiction or the fact that addiction is like energy - its never lost, its only converted from one form to another. Whichever one..a really nice take. I liked this! :)
Juhi the Fragrant - I can almost picture this one in my head..and kudos to you. It's a beautiful picture and a refreshing take on a much abused word.
Dok Saab - Clinically perfect addiction dok :)
Kaveesh Sinha - Sahi hai :) thwart but you cannot..cuz it is an addiction after all!
Rush.me - unexpected to say the least. and nice.
Blah Queen - Thought provoking. Questioning religious theology is a necessity. And I like the way you've addressed this!
GSV - I liked the way you've ended the poem. addicted to life and giving it up? :) if only addictions were so easy to give up!
truthdude - no its not happened to me. and it ain't real life either. the addiction is very dark and entirely fictional..but it could be the story of someone's life.
The Red Ronin - another surreal but beautiful take. awesome.
Genuine Fake - Awesome..very real...good stuff here!!
Mandappa KC - a song from you. it'll sing well i hope.
Richa Gupta - The 'E'? Nice take as usual :)
Konfessioner Singh - can't delete everything..even though we certainly wish we could sometimes. on a slightly tangential note, you have to see this movie 'Eternal Sunshine of the Spotless Mind' :)
ok - vote time.
fuck me...this is gonna be hard.
hmmm...
I say Nandini :)
Korrekted Votes so far--
Juhi--1+1(Mowgli, Nandini)
GSV---1(Pinchi)
Rush.Me----1(Mickey)
Mowgli--1 (Juhi)
Nandini--1(Truth Dude)
i think...its gonna be her.....or her..???? :((
Okay..enough Konfusion and Komplikations....!!!!!
my vote for GENUINE FAKE for being d e a d s i m p l e . . . .!!!
Truth Dude - Thanks for the vote :)
Juhi - Its OK - I'm also pretty IT challenged...hey I too didn't know how to get the bold, itlaics etc.etc. while kommenting....did a google search today afternoon & got some gyan (search on HTML Tags)....this was after Shinjin's diktat that Voted Names should be in bold
Happy searching & learning.
BTW, could anyone tell me how to get the colours??? I saw the colour codes & stuff, but couldn't colour up the words!!!!
More of my kommenting...
@ Dok Saab.... Now this one fits for all addiktions! Really like these lines When you're near
I always get a high.
But if you go away
I heave a deep sigh. A very subtle and beautiful beginning.
@ Kaveesh.... I kissed those parting hands. Silence……… Indeed, it is hard to part with addiktions... Differently expressed! :-)
@ Rush.me.... Now thats an interesting one Rush.me! A well balanced dialogue between the two most common addiktions. I wanna know whether he's more addicted to u or to me?? lol...jealousy...is it! ;) Very nice!
@ GSV.... Just one song of silence
You Listen!... Here I am again…. Addicted to life! aah....Positivity, yet again! :) Feels so good. Honestly, I was not expecting so many positive posts on this word, but I am so glad to have come across such wonderful and positive posts. The undying spirit of loving life has been so simply put. Nice!
@ Truth Dude... Why does the addiktion always become bigger than ourselves? Sad, but that is the effect of addiktion on us. :-)
@ Red Ronin.... Killing your addiktion can sometimes kill you from within. Loved how you opened the piece... Monochrome static crackles through my head but I don't look so dead.
@ Genuine.... It is interesting how people's minds work. Drug addikt, schizophrenic and a serial killer, who is addikted to idealism. An interesting thought, which could be much well expressed if it was not for the word limit we follow. Yet a well written one! :-)
@ Mandappa.... Smile like mid-morning dew
When I'm down under, I turn to you I really like these lines. Overall, I think it would make a great song. Someone into making music, here??
@ Richa... In the sea of human waste
He is just an addict I like the way you have put it.
@ Konfessioner.... Aah...how true is that. Felt like it came from some part of my life. Specially Dammit, where’s that song… did I delete it? Wish I could delete him. :-)
>>pheww<< Finally...done with all the posts!! It is such an ordeal commenting on all posts, specially when you have broken your spectacles and have to go on increasing the font size to help your naked eye from being strained too much and a nose that either overflows or is blocked...huh...!!
Cheers!
Blah Kween! ;)
p.s. : MY VOTE GOES TO MOWGLI!! This was decided after having re read two - three other strong contenders. It was not easy choosing one. :-)
@Mowgli-reminds me of my last episode :P i like!
@Pinchi-loved the last line..no wait every line actually. very apt!
@Micky-rofl..hilarious man! 'appy flirting ;)
@shwetha-not my ideal fantasy :P
@nandini-bravo!
@juhi-poignant
@dok-smooth
@kaveesh-sigh!
@Genuine-gritty n real
@Rush.me-the repetitive pauses r so contrary to ur nick :)
@Blah-after my own heart
@GSV-thought provoking.. hmm..
@truthdude-the truth it is!
@mandappa-magical for sure
@richa-who is he? classic!
@konfessioner-soap op?
My vote goes to Truthdude
S&M at its best..
Votes So Far:-
Juhi--1+1(Mowgli, Nandini)
Mowgli--1+1 (Juhi, Blah Q)
GSV---1(Pinchi)
Rush.Me----1(Mickey)
Nandini--1(Truth Dude)
GF--1(Rush.Me)
Truth Dude---1(Ronin)
Nine more vote to be casted!!
where are you people !!
Cold Sunday afternoon and hot lunch, alongwith amazing Klashes to read...Amazing combination!
My comments for the week:
1.Mowgli: The moon and addiction are almost synonymous. Good write. A little cryptic but well thought. :)
2.Pinchi: The poem itself is an addiction now.Read it close to 10 times now. Really well written. Some girl must be feeling really lucky, right now. :)
3.Mickey : Hahaha. Funny! Ohh, about schizophrenia and idealism; her rebellious attitude and the non-concept of leading an ideal life, led Uma to the non conformist paths.. esp, the drugs bit. Ohh yeah, and schizophrenia for your information, can also be a prolonged effect of drug overdose ;)
4.Shweta Srivastav: Heyy, love is in the air! I like this one..Very simple yet rings the romantic bells :)
5.Nandini : The eagerness of a rehabilitated alcoholic! Very apt for Addiction! :)
6.Juhi : Welcome to the klash, it is ur first, I guess! Very very nice, the thought :)
7.Dok Saab : One word. Heart-rending :)
8.Kaveesh : I can understand how painful it is to stay away from someone you really really yearn for... Amazing :)
9.Rush.me : Yours is always a treat to read. Especially, the pauses. Good work :)
10.Blah Queen : I was toying the idea, of character personification and addiction. You did it for me. The eternal question,reallly well put. :)
Rest coming up after lunch...
Forgot to vote :)
and it goes to
GSV
Hey people :) Greetings...wow! wonderful takes.
Hey Kaveesh! D'ya ? hahaha... As always :).
Arnav, we needed that word here, OHT! :)
Truth Dude, loved your take. Not in context to addiktion but generally. Those could be made into very good lyrics :)
Mowgli, GSV bhai, Mickey(hahaha), Dok saab, Shweta, Nons, Juhi, rushmi(me?), Blah Queen, Red Ronin, Genuine Fake, Mandi, Richa(ji), Shin(why mahtob?)... great takes all :)
Where is coffeismypoison(addiktion) ?
Hello everyone..
Amazing writeup’s ..:)
I always found it difficult to komment over other's work in general...but cos it's compulsary to do here..i shall try...but please dont take it seriously..even i am not trying to be funny...
first thing first..after 'the' konfessioners', i 'saw' so many here with 'the' proper noun..
mickey 'the' monkey
'the'genuine fake
'the' red ronin
juhi 'the' fragnant
Arnav 'the' pinchi
Yuvraj'the' mowgli'
Non-'d'-in(sane)
'd' 'oak'(tree of klash)saab
truth d uuuuu
Man 'd' appa
and finally GSV the surdie..:P ur friendly neighbourhood spy'dar man..
Komments-
@Mowgli-very creative:) ..bookish love! I found it was humorous ..:) nice writeup!
@Pinchi- bahut badhiya. .rhyming to gazab ki thi….par wo comment aapke take se bhi achha tha..’who cares about the post…:..’:P..:)
@Mickey the monkey-haha..mickey bhai very nice writeup on addiction of orkut…bas sir ji aapko vote de deta lekin nahi doonga kyonki….:P
1-abhi ek toh meri barbaadi/shaadi nahi huwi aap pehle divorce karva rahe ho..:D
2-itni sari ladkiyon se aap akele hi chat karte ho aur mujhe inke link nahi diye..:P
3- aur bhai main lawyer zaroor hoon par abhi liar ban na seekh raha hoon, (ref-aap teetoteller..hehe..) dekh li hai Jane ne..:D
@Shweta Srivastav-doctor-patient love….dil ka addiction..:D
Nandini Sen- Different shades of addiktion displayed in a single take...
Juhi the fragrant-aka tanvee- Kasturi Kundali basay, mrig dhoondhe van mahi". very creative take…:) and yes u have to use word itself in take but since its ur Try Ball in the game..so chalega…) lekin Addiction aur jaisa doksaab ne kaha unending quest mein faraq toh hota hai…lekin kyonki musk deer aapka hai..fragrance bhi usko aa rahi hai..apne ko kya..:P achha likha.:)..
Doksaab-kya doksaab sahi kavitayein likh rahe hain aap aajkal…vajpayee ji se toh prerna nahi lee…”likhta hoon mitata hoon, geet naya gata hoon”
very nice lyrics doksaab..:)
Kaveesh sinha-arrey kaveesh bhai , painful addiction…classic gibberish act used…itna gibberish ki knitting sweater bhi trying on other laundry ho gaya…uff…bhai please England usko saath le jaao…:P..ur expanation did helped to get it completely..good take..:)
Rush.Me-‘Tea-qeela’ se ‘Tea-killer’ tak ka safar/addiction achha laga…:P.. nice take.. well written..:)
Blah Queen-very true! People addicted to religion never like anyone questioning religion…liked the simplicity belonging to your writeup..:)
Truth Dude- Sahi hai TD …who cares of self esteem when one is addicted.!
The Red Ronin-‘No smoking’ dekh kar likha kya bhai saab…? Aap kuch explain kar dete toh shayad mujhe kuch samajh aa jaata..kuch hidden addiction hoga..shayad..:O
Genuine Fake-Power packed masala take..:P.. really thrilling..:) nice one.!.
Mandappa KC- nice..:) fading effect brings magic quality in songs..well used..!
Richa Gupta- bahut bariya richa ji..! thoda sa aur describe karna tha naa..’E’ ffect…:P.. Idhar India mein ‘E’cstasy ki goli schedule ‘H” drug mein aati hai…main soch raha tha…ki fir ye rhyming ka kya hoga..Eeee---Heee…AcHHHH-?...:P
Konfessioner singh- mahtob aur meera ki waapsi.!:) nice ‘deleting’ act..:)
arrey mujhse ye HTML tag close nahi ho raha.....chalo jaane do..aise hi rehne..do..
voting in few minutes..:P
Well all of them were excellent reads!!
My vote however goes to GSV.
Amazing work with words. Keep up the good work :)
Hoping to klash with a hot word again :)
Cheers.
since have to choose
my vote goes toDok Saab :)
is there still time????? I am sorry, cant comment, but my vote to GSV!!
Great takes as usual people.. and i make one or the other error every time.. huh!!well.. try and try till you succeed!!!
Revised Votes Tally-
In alphabetical orders-
Doksaab-1 (Gsv's vote)
genuine fake-1 (Rush.me's vote)
GSV-4 (Pinchi,Doksaab,GF,S.S vote)
Juhi-2 (mowgli nd nandini's votes)
Mowgli-2 (juhi nd blah Q's votes)
Nandini-1 (TD's vote)
Rush.me-1 (Mickey's vote)
Truth dude-2 (Ronin's 2 pointer)
STILL 4 votes awaited
for Final tally from-
Konfessioner Singh
Kaveesh Sinha
Mandappa KC
Richa Gupta
Apologies everyone for being unable to respond to individual komments and voting in time!! I've been preoccupied I guess.. I'm sorry! :(
Kaveesh has smsed me his vote because he's in Delhi-- Rush.me
My vote is for TD
I will komment the minute I'm back from college!
my apologies.... my peaceful weekend does not entail the internet or a computer...so forgive mme...
i will however komment today later on...i hope ts still valid...
one comment...
truth dude: is ure piece from a song i know?? is it supposed to be or were they co-incidental to the song im referring to! ???
hmm...if you are referring to the offspring thingy, yea i've heard it too. obviously :)
but the addiction bit clicked later. :)
@ r3flux:
someone truly once said about me.....ur such a bundle of contradiction!!!! some times, i do blve, some times, dunno..!!!!
@ kaveesh:
thank u...but agar Komments bhi hote toh aur samajh aati ki vote kiya toh kyon???
well cuz couple of the most interesting lines are straight from the song--self esteem by offspring.
komments
mowgli: quite and quiet. some nice lines. nice craft. overall id rate it above average..not much more.
pinchi: again a nice meter or rhyme..overdose of 'its addiction' and the last line doesnt work for me personally 'love addiction" but a nice tke none the less
mickey the monkey: really cute.. but cute dont always cut it! :P
shweta: sweet take. and if it is what i think it is. nice.
nandini: nice name - simone..ive heard it so many times in the recent past. (1973-james blunt) and a nice take.
juhi:love the start...true craft.. tho u couldve gone places with the same. and addiction--how much? i dont know. more of tease i thought..i maybe wrong tho!
dok saab: a nice take but not woah! the rhyme seems nice tho i wouldnt say it matches the high standards uve set ureself!
kaveesh: (fellow copywriter i hear?) its a nice piece..start and end to .... nice... and the part where she talks, isnt awesome which is nce and adds to the piece, cuz he kisses her to silence. nice..
rush.me: the "try ya" kinda removes the authenticty of ure craft. makes it more local, almost to the extent of removing ure class or touch to it!
blah queen: nice take.. good questions. and something i think a lot of us in our generation relate to.
gsv: the last parakinda reduces your over all... but the beginnin was real nice.
truth dude: nice. but it doesnt rock my boat cuz i think its exactly similar to the offspring song :P sorry !
red ronin: "Monochrome static crackles through my head" love this line. but i dont know if i got ure piece in its entirity. care to explain. but a good write.
genuine fake: nice take. really nice. but i think if u had elaborated a tad on the fact that she takes wahtever to numb teh pain part, then ure ending wouldve been even better
richa: really nice start, structure and flow. but ure last line couldve made a whole lot of a difference.
k.singhji: a refreshingly different take from u, if u ask me. love the difference...
im quite dumb struck as to who to vote for.
well tough decision to vote
my lead kontenders:
Richa
GSV
Nandini
Mowgli
gsv, richa and mowgli: ure starts are superb... nandini--overall good..nice take. im lost...
cant even flip a coin. . .
my vote to mowgli for : "Bored silence, Baked bored moon, Blue bored trees, The Amateur fool. "
result???
I haven't been able to klash.. :(( sob sob sob..been entangled in the worldly woes..!! But I found time to read the klashes...and must say that its getting better and better every klash..!! So many different takes on addiktion...!! Absolutely brilliant...!! I'll surely participate in the next one...!! :)
@ malted socktail - above average? and then the vote? hehehe..;) thts funny...
arre kaun jeeta kaun hara?
khirki mein se dekho jara?
agla word kaun sa hai? i am dying to write!! please koi word de do!! please mujh gareeb ko koi word de do!!
Doksaab-1 (Gsv's vote)
genuine fake-1 (Rush.me's vote)
GSV-4 (Pinchi,Doksaab,GF,S.S vote)
Juhi-2 (mowgli nd nandini's votes)
Mowgli-3 (juhi nd blah Q's votes and Mandappa's)
Nandini-1 (TD's vote)
Rush.me-2 (Mickey's vote, Kaveesh's)
Truth dude-3 (Ronin's 2 pointer+Shinjini's)
The winner is GSV! AGAIN!! uffff!! :)
Kongrats GSV Jee !!
Purple Krown pe apnaa naam permanent Marker se likh diyaa hai kyaa??
BTW , why didnt Richaa Didi Vote??
wow...GSV Jee.......Kongrats once again..!!! i think we should give on Krown to GSV Jee.....and another keep as the running trophy...!! lol.. ;-)
arey..new word?????
GSV - You better keep a dictionary with you....every week wahan sey new words detey rehena :-))
@Rash.me and Nandini-- Super ideas haha..!:)
Komments--
1. Mowgli-- Baked, bored moon..has a deeper significance, especially if I look at it in the lunar perspective..what's the moon doing all month anyway? waxing and waning! :) some pointers
- "Are you going to be this quiet forever".
-Thinking..he nods.
-Martyrs 'from' love poems... I pity thy innocence.
- Your addiction 'to' the idea of loving me.
I loved-- "I'll send you a smile..sometime". :)
2. Pinchi- I'm going to be ruthless, this didnt strike any chords.. :(. Maybe its because you cut it short?
3. Mickey-- You're a sweetheart...haha... this is plain ridiculous! "Virmani uncle" haha..and you don't flirt with me at all.. :(.
4. Shweta-- the line "the whole universe conspires to make you fall" made me chuckle..real hard! Sweet! I didn't see how anyone was addicted though? she thought he was addicted to drugs but instead it was the nasha of pyaar and all? :) did I get it right?!
5. Nandini-- This would've been nice, especially because there's much punch in it..except except except..not much is left to the reader's imagination..too much of the word "addiction" makes me squirm! But it's a very good concept indeed!!
6. Juhi-- You'd have been my winner this week.. Splendid. A perfect example of indian writing in english! if only my inability to tell you that "addiction"/the word of the week must be included in the klash..hadn't hampered many a votes!
What an entry.. :)thanks for the refreshing read!
7.Dok Saab-- Your simple poem here is a summary to most of the klashes on love (above!) haha.. I like the simplicity in this.. especially in--
"I can do any thing.
I can kill I can steal
Far-off stars I can bring."
the rest later today!
my bad mowgli !!
there was a slight error in your usage of quiet and quite...
but over all like i said i think its above average.. but ure first few lines were amazing and they made the difference!
@Shinjini
Aing? Simple si poem hi to hai... isme kya ni samajh aaya...??? chalo khair.. this klash is over anyway...par itni far-off ya complex entry ni thi... neways.. chao !
Oh yes and A BIG KONGRATS TO GSV!!!
(I was the first one to vote for you... seee... seee..sseeeee.. he he he... ) Very nice ! Keep it up!
Thank you Arnav,Anamika,Shweta,Doksaab for kommenting/voting for me..:)
More Thanks for
Nandini,Nabila jee, Yuvraj,Tanvee,TD,Mandappa KC,Red ronin,RushmiG,Mickey for their komments..:)
and RichaG aap kahan ho?..!kaveesh bhai-delhi ka safar shub ho!Yuvi,wishing u fast recovery.tooti wrist mein bhi sahi speed mein type karte ho...:)
Thank you High command, the konfessioners for accepting the recommendation of new word..:D
Thankyou all for the compliments:)
Kongrats GSV.....
I think now you should keep a dictionary beside you - tokeep providing new words each week :))
@nandini-kya baat kar rahi hain aap ..:))
dont u know i have 'live' dictionary besides me..:)
'chalo' ab 'Sugar' par likhiye..:))
sorry sorry and more sorry!!! but thanks to all those who missed me :) makes me feel..well remembered!!haha!!
GSV tusii to chaa gaye yaar!!!! ab mein sochti hoon ki is writing shiting se sanyaas le loon!!!
Congratulations, GSV it seems you are the "King Klasher"! :D
Thank you Shinjini, you don't know what that comment means to me....ooohhhh...Help, I am slipping from this cloud!!!
anyone who cares for explanations , post komments, let me knw ? ?
mujhe mujhe.....thoda sa Konfusion hai...infact ab woh thoda -thoda karte karte...Royal Konfusion ho gaya hai......!!!
@ Malted Socktail....Please aap apna Screen/Real Name batane ka Kasht Kare.... Actually.....you kommented on my Komment that I was inKorrectly interpreting your taKe....now which taKe was urs??? tell date i dunno.....??? :-o
Rush.Me has raised a very valid point.
GSV writes as GSV, komments as GSV and votes as GSV.
But some one posts as The Red Ronin, Komments as Reflux, and is actually Ritesh.
Please Konfessioner Singh Help us.
Hey, I got an idea - while Kommenting - we should start with - "Komments from ABC"
ABC being the name posted in your takes.
For eg - I'll start with - Komments from Nandini......
that might help.
sorry rush me...
ive been here so long, that my id i thought had agthered cob webs...
malted socktail = mandappa k c
Oh.......Mandappa K C.....now i can relate to all u said..!!!
i still Looove the (fade)
Ha Ha! again the pseudonym issue. we had a vote on this earlier, and that time Mickey u remember the issue was the same, please use only one psedunym
@ Santonu Bhaiya
Mickey in not my pseudonym, but my nick name.
And what Rush.Me said and I support her, is that we should use only one name/pseudonym/nick name for both writing as well as kommenting and voting.
Like Truth Dude writes/komments/votes as Truth Dude only.
unlike the Red Ronin/reflux/ritesh
or Juhi the fragrant/Tanvee
or Mandappa K C/Malted Socktail.
Though Coffeeismypoison is still away, I have come to know that today (7thFeb) is her Birthday!!
Happy Birthday Dok
Dear Coffee_is_my_poison
Happy Birthday !!
yours
Addicted_to_sugar
err.........one more Konfusion....is Coffeeismypoison related to Dok Saab???? i thought Coffeeismypoison==Sweta!! :(
i feel like agreeing with Nandini's suggestion..... one can post with whatever name they like.... say The Red Ronin now we already know he is r3flux too.... so while Kommenting.... just add.. XYZ (writing name) Komments from ABC(Blogger/GMaiL ID)...
Oh...happie Budday CoffeeIsMyPoison!!!
@ rush.Me
The konfusion is monkey-made. Mickey should have specified which Dok he is referring to :) as I am not the only Dok here
CIMP (Dr. Sweta) too is a Dok, a MBBS pass-out from KMC Manipal, presently trying her luck at PG entrance exams.
OH.......my apologies DOk Saab!!! :(
any other Doktors Klashing???????
he..he.. rush.me :D
You are korrect in a way!
CIMP is related to DokSaab, in a way that it was Doksaab who introduced her to the world of klashing,
i aint changin mine .... its been the same since day one ...:P
so im leavin it just like that !
CIMP(Sweta) - A Very Happy Birthday. Heres wishing you a great day & a wonderful year adhed.
From fellow Aquarian (Nandini)
Hey anymore Aquarians around in Klash??
Jesus Christ it should read as "ahead" not "adhed" (thats my typing lisp :))
Hey its my Moms'B'day too :D
Many happy returns of the day CIMP
Happy Birthday
Dr Sweta
:)
many many happy returns of the day CIMP urf Sweta urf doc sahiba!!
i missed it!! shit!! but i ll still celebrate, with clapping singing, then the whistles, and a little dance, then the jumping on the table...then the cake, (attack),
then the grand hug...and happy belated birthday...and now its over so clean up the mess...hehehehhe ;)
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